Hoopy's just this guy, you know?
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You'd think that being trapped in stone would mean that, if nothing else, I could get some peace and quiet. Unfortunately, it seems that Celestia has other ideas.
She has appointed these ponies... these 'Keepers', as she calls them, to keep me entertained during my incarceration.
Honestly? I'd prefer the boredom.
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This idea has been bouncing around in my head for a long time. I struggled a bit trying to make it work. Hopefully, I did a decent job. Writing a character who can never move is more of a challenge than I thought it would be.
The timeline that I made for this story gives a range of 95 years that Discord was stuck as a statue, if anyone is curious.
A little bit of the inspiration for this story came from the old Doctor Who episode The Keeper of Traken. A few story elements were taken from that, though the overall story itself is pretty different.
Since I love the Pony Creator, here's the quick reference I did for Sunny Meadows:
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one downvote already? Really?
:EDIT:
For context this was 1 up 1 downvote when I commented after reading ch.1
Wow, I was still poking around editing this here and there, and didn't even notice that it had been published. Guess I'll stop
1581107 ...you published by accident? Huh, took me forever to even figure out how to submit
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I misspoke, sorry. I meant that I hadn't been aware that it had made it through moderation
I was just cleaning up some dialogue and stuff, but now that it's live, I'll leave it be for now.
That was... not sure if 'intense' defines it properly, but I'd say it's pretty damn close. o:
Only partway through, but I had to stop and tell you how much I love this!
...um, a lot. It's good.
Edit: finished the chapter. Incredible
Ohh friggin GAH! You actually had me crying there! For Discord! Bravo good sir, bravo! ~With regards, the Current Student of the Second True Magic.
I won't lie. I cried.
I wish I could say I cried. This story was too fantastic, too well written for me to not cry and yet... my eyes are dry.
Words cannot properly describe how I feel about this story. Your stuff is always well written, but this was different.
Kudos to you, Hoopy McGee, for writing such a wonderfuly tragic and deep story about mortality.
I enjoyed that.
Incredible
no other description does it any justice
You actually made me cry.
I've never felt so helpless reading a story. All Discord could do was sit and watch and before he realized what he needed, it was gone.
For once, I'm happy I ignored the sad tag.
Wow... Amazing. Just amazing.
1581269 Me too
I ... I think I just got emotion-raped...
What we have here is just another reason why Hoopy needs to get a publisher.
this... was.... amazing, incredible, outstanding! its one of the best stories i have read in quite some time, id say you captured discord perfectly, i never expected the story to be as sad as it was tho. thank you for this amazing story :P
Wow... wow. A touching story, about Discord
...damn you Hoopy McGee.... damn you. I have to say about half way through the 1st chapter I had a pretty good sense of where it was going. However, that didn't make it any easier to deal with. This was one of the better stories that nearly drew tears out of me (I don't often cry when I read.) The question of immortality and watching your loved ones grow old and die has been something that's always haunted me and has always made me think "getting immortality is just stupid" and so it was a wonderful thing for me to see Discord learning about it the hard way. Learning to Love and then learning the pain that comes with it... of course I see a certain family getting the protection of a certain spirit of Chaos. That... that could be some interesting short stories to create...
Anyways, you have my thumbs up, and my favorite.
By Odin's magnificent beard, was this an incredible read. I never thought of Discord as anything but a goofy villain, but to make me FEEL something for the guy? You, sir, have earned all my respect, all my internets, and all my moustaches.
EDIT: Also, love love LOVE the character of Sunny Meadows. I fear, because of this story, I'll have trouble referring to Discord as anything other than "Mister Funny Face".
This deserves to be narrated by John de Lancie.
I didn't see the sad tag, I came from the featured box. I never read sad stories... all I can say is wow.
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It takes a certain kind of melancholy to make me tear up and this is it.
I know you can't see me, but I'm giving you a standing ovation.
Was Discord late for the funeral? If not, I would love to see a chapter on it, even if its just short. This story was great, and I need more
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curse your existance! Ah but such a good story! Ah confound it all! Im getting cotton candy...
This is a fabulous story. I love the idea of taking advantage of Discord's immortality and making the mortality of the other characters painfully realistic. I don't like sad stories usually, because they tend to be 'Hey, let's see how long it takes to make you cry' fics, but this actually has meaning, and it's great. Wonderful job.
I love that last line. Ha! Don't get to comfortable around Discord or he'll go out of his way to make it true!
One of the most touching fics I've read, and centered around Discord nonetheless! I know you can't see this, but I am slow clapping through the tears right now, keep up the good work!
No manly tears were shed, but that's kind of common for me. However I would love to see a kind of Slice-of-life series to come after detailing any further lessons (and antics) with Discord. Plus it would be kinda interesting to see how the world is at this point.
ALL OF THE FEELS.
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In all seriousness, though, excellent work. I truly enjoyed that little nugget of joy (especially what you did with the Chaos/Order relationship. Personal bit, that, in case my name didn't give it away.) Discord has always been my favorite character, and I could almost hear John DeLancie's voice in my head as I read your portrayal of the big guy. Bravo, fine sir!
Excellent story, my good sir. Excellent story. *Wipes a manly tear*
Such a magnificent, fantastic, amazing story, I say I shed tears reading this, I do not regret reading this at 4 in the morning. On a side note: My avatar thanks you for that chaos vs.true evil tid bit.
See, this story right here? If I can write anything CLOSE to something like this, I will be happy.
Stellar job, mate. This story doesn't have enough attention.
As expected of the Spirit of Chaos
This was really good. How it ends makes me sad
But good writing, nonetheless. Rest in peace, Sunny Meadows
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Well, that was depressing. It's not bad, but INCREDIBLY... sad. He loved her, though they never truly got to meet each other. Even so, he didn't need to, because he knew her, and she knew him; even if only in her own mind.
This story should be called Hard to Read, because that's what it is.
Even though I saw the ending coming a mile away, it doesn't make it any less heartbreaking. Because that's how it always ends - everyone dies. Well... Except for the (un)lucky few. 
It's been a long time since I last cried like this. Your story was so well written that if there were any grammar or spelling errors or typos, I missed them all completely or didn't care. I was too distracted by a wonderful story that was as sad and as beautiful as the movie Bicentennial Man. Thank you.
Ha, I find great irony in me having read this.
At first I didn't really want to read it, I sort of clicked on the story on a whim and decided meh, may as well. I found that I actually kind of liked it by the time I was halfway through. Nearing towards the end I had decided I loved this, the way it showed the family, the things they went through and such.
Then... the news sunny had died, and discords reaction. I found that it stole some tears from me and made me cry.
Looking back, its sort of like what discord felt towards the idea of his keepers. At first he didn't care, but ti grew onto him.
that was a wonderful story, I very much enjoyed it. I laugh, I cred, but in the end I am left a warm, happy feeling. I love a good heartwarming story.
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...such a story...long...the monster learns to love...no couldn't be...
...no mouth and yet must giggle...hahahaahahahhAHAAHAHAAHAAHAAHAhAHAHAH...aha aha aha...*silence, as if to reflect on the matter*...
...even he gets touched by the Immortal's Dilemma...amazing...sad...yet...
...*spends the remainder of the fanfic reading in silence, clasping my palm over my eyes as the final words of the letter*...
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you... you bastard ... why .. why did u give me these feels?.... damn all these feels.....
take my fave and upvote... and damn these feels
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Incredible doesn't do this story justice.
To be honest, I didn't have high expectations of this story when I saw it, but I was insanely bored.
I am very glad to admit that my low expectations were proven very wrong indeed.
That was very nice. Thanks.
Excellent job on this. There's been more than enough comment on the emotionally evokative side of it, so I'll just move on. I don't think that the pathos was even the strongest element of the story, anyway. What really blew me away was the pacing and the character voice.
All of Discord's thoughts and reactions to everything always felt real and true to his character. He's sarcastic and tetchy the whole way through, and even as it lessens by the story's end, it's still there. He never sounds like he's a whining child, he's just grumbling over the annoying setback of being in stone and the constant annoyances of his Keepers. Even the way you handled his burgeoning emotions felt appropriate, being somewhat confused by the new feelings and rationalizing it as just a type of possessiveness. He never starts being "nice" -- or even stops being cruel in terms of celebrating the deaths of the Bearers -- he just changes the way he approaches the nature of life and the world and the merits of balancing chaos and harmony.
(On that topic, the inclusion of the whole "balance between chaos and harmony" theme is my only major gripe with the story. It's majorly overdone. Which isn't your fault, of course. The story would go in an entirely different direction of that theme was changed, and to your credit the ways you illustrated the message were a refreshing breath of originality. And it was also made more forgivable that you went for a simpler approach, keeping it as just a few mentions of the idea and then moving on with the rest of the story. It's always groan-inducing in any story where the message is treated very heavy-handedly and shoved down the audience's throat. An entirely new idea would have been much more welcome, but as far as banging out the same old theme goes, it wasn't too bad.)
The pacing of the story was pitch-perfect. Hands down the strongest thing this story had going for it. There's no magical instant metamorphosis for Discord's attitude, and it wasn't as if there was even a single pony who changed him. It was mostly Sunny, obviously, but I still felt that Ember and all of Sunny's children were still important characters for their contributions, rather than just extra names thrown in. Sometimes the little vignettes had some greater importance, but usually the little episodes' "deeper meanings" were more shallow or hardly significant at all, which is exactly how any story should read. There doesn't have to be a constant bombshell or sudden turn of events when more impact can be made through delicacy and moderation. But best of all, time flowed. It didn't feel like five generations of ponies were passing by, it felt like it was over, as Discord put it, "in the blink of an eye." The meat of the story was 9,000 words and it never once felt like it was dragging on longer than welcome.
One last thing that I'm surprised no one else has mentioned, I thought that the Keepers were wonderful characters. At least the first three had very memorable personalities, and their own life stories all felt believable. There were ups and downs, sudden surprises, the cycles of pregnancy and raising the kids around Discord, it was all very real. It wasn't like a roller-coaster of drama, it was just ordinary life with some spices of excitement. (Like I said before, I'm not crazy about the chaos/harmony message, but I still liked how it was shown.)
As a big fan of Discord, this story wound up being a rare gem and a fast favorite. I didn't quite get much of an emotional response to it, but I found myself enjoying the story too much to be disappointed in any regard. Top-notch work.
Manly tears. That is all.
I... Have feels for Discord. congratulations.
1582342 I wonder if anypony could make this happen. Because it would be awesome in ways I can't even describe.
Another wonderful piece of work Hoopy. I always look forward to seeing something new from you.
Nice. Seriously. Amazing!
This is very good.
It the the feels with a hammer. A sledge hammer. Made of candy-cains and bubble gum.
Good job.