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[TwiLuna Fluff] It's tough being a princess. Twilight Sparkle and Princess Luna both know this. During a time of solitude, Twilight and Luna spend some much needed time together, for a couple cannot go without meeting, and sharing at least one kiss on Hearts and Hooves Day.
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When you wish upon a star... you still can't grant more than one thumbs-up...
This was such a great little story. Cute and fluffy. I don't feel like Princess Luna was quite in-character, but unless you're writing a multi-thousand word fic, it's not too important. She was good, Twilight was great, and the setting was really nice.
The only problem I can really find is that there's not much substance to review. It's cute, but I already said that. It's written well, so I can't critique the spelling or the grammar. It's just long enough to provide just the right amount of content for a short oneshot fluff-fic.
Overall, I'm gonna grant you a thumbs-up. And I may just follow you as an author. I don't do that too often.
5676476 May just follow. Haven't yet. I suppose "I'll be watching you" would be a better phrase, if slightly more creepy.
so love this TwiLuna Rules!!!!!!
Reading this story was like eating a cookie. It's short, it's sweet and makes you crave for more.
After all, you just ate one cookie from the entire pack...
Very fluffy indeed but still a nice story.
Well, let's start with the positive. This was well written, had very good description, and because I sink into a characters head, I could easily feel the emotion that you portrayed, albeit in a little hand in fist fashion, so I got some cute little feels from it. The problem is then I stopped and asked myself "Why?" I understand this is fluff, and as fluff it is quite good, but if one wants it to be more then that, you need to answer why.
Why did that kiss in the possible dream tell her the love was unconditional(a word you can never use lightly as it takes a lot for unconditional love. Hence why only animals can really give unconditional love.) in just a moment? What about Luna's actions or characters told her that Luna was right for her or vice versa? You have Luna say it is for more then her looks, but then only comment on her looks. Not only that, but the whole setup was apparently pointless as Twilight doesn't even question why Luna suddenly appeared or what happened to her duties. All of this made me realize I was just reading fluff, quite akin to porn. Sure I liked it, sure it could fill a craving I have when I feel like it, but in the end, nothing was done, nothing was built, you just watched two ponies do something with minimalistic characteristics and motivations past the hand of god.
But as I said, not necessarily bad, and short enough not to make these problems exaggerate to where I had to stop myself from using a sledgehammer upon my computer. So yeah, not a great read, but not a bad read.
So romantic.
That was cute