My first fanfic so helpful comments are appreciated!
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This is NOT Going to be a clopfic!
I'm liking it so far! Good, no great for a first attept. Mine crashed and burned... But my second one seems better so far... Ah well, I'm rambling; wish you luck!
I cannot agree more with SparkCloud. This is a very nice story for a first timer.
Just mirroring SparkCloud's comment: The first chapter of my fic literally sucks... I had so much in my mind that I couldn't make it... right.
For a first time story this is pretty damn good my first fic was crap but then my second story the story of stardust is much better
I forgot to mention tracking!
Sensing.... ROMANTIC TENSION? Great start!
Thanks for the positive comments
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You'll see, although I'm not sure what I have in mind for the next chapter yet.
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Thanks for the friendly responses!
Love & Tolerate
Not bad! Good plot!
Although, to give some feed back, the characters don't quite sound like themselves. Their speech patterns are just a little off from what they are in the show.
Excellent and funny, please continue
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Anything or Caboose ^-^
for, I meant lol
I'm likin' it as well! Can't wait to see what happens next
There were only a few errors, such as lack of comma and spelling mistakes. Good job!
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Thanks, but I did check through it a few times, is there any chance you could point out the spelling mistakes please?
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I spotted "councillor" instead of counselor. There were also some issues with run on sentences in this chapter. But it was still pretty good.
29512 Yeah, I was tired, it was 2am when I had finished writing. Thanks for the tip, I'll correct it.
Don't you mean 12pm noon and not 12am midnight?
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Damnit, thanks for the help!
Lol
Yep. This is pretty good!
Sorry about the lack of updates! Been very busy, I hope to get another chapter up within a week, got to sort out some exams!
This is good. I enjoyed this story about Quinny.
great as always
You forgot the " in Rarity's last line.
58388 okay thanks
