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Cocaine


Part of a machine, I am not a human being.

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Sequel

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Comments ( 103 )

5659436 I've seen all of those charts, and I almost cried at how bad some of them were. Please, don't make another one of these.

Scratch All of that... Make a sequel.

Five chapters in a row with less than a thousand words each, one with a word-count of just over 300?
I'm not reading this.

I wonder if this is how you are in real life........

...I would say the ending is the main aspect of this story that needs further exploring. Holy hell I skimmed through the beginning and well... let's just say I skipped to the end.

Brilliant ending, by the way.

The twist you throw at the end was a fantastic detail. Which is why I think a sequel could easily be written along those lines.

To be fair, leaving this in by itself is fine, but you'd only get it if you knew both sides of that darn meme. Which is why I think doing a second tale with the other side of the tale would be an excellent idea.

meh maybe I'm just a cold-hearted bastard, maybe it's that your story was too OOC and lacked any characterization. Either way I don't feel particularly sad or any emotion at all really. It's just meh.

5659468 Ahh, someone that gets the idea of the tale. Thank you, and YES, a sequel is in order. "Doing Lovely Things To Your Waifu", and will be available on my stories list sometime soon. Thank you, and bless your soul.


5659467 Absolutely not- that is positively disgusting.


5659464 I understand your reasoning and I bid thee farewell.


5659462 Ahh, well...because it is how I generally feel right now and on the subject of, "Doing hurtful Things To My Waifu"

5659464 To elaborate-

Take my perspective. I write it out with one chapter, just how I did here but all in one. Step 2:, Step 3: each with their own sections in the same chapter, same amount of words.

I knew the story was going to be short, so I decided to be as critical on the short bits of dialogue as I could, given my amount of time to write (Twenty five minutes), as well as formatting and such.

Now look at it like this- if each chapter were to say, have 1k words each, then would you have read it? I certainly could have done that - fleshed it out, or thinned it in this case - but that would make it excessively long.

I wanted this to be short and to the point- just like the meme.

Yes, I could've put it in one chapter and more..I dunno, a better first impression? But ultimately, to the reader, you KNOW what you're getting yourself into upon seeing things like this. And for that, I take my leave.

Fine... This was saved at the end... You'd better write that sequel, and it better have Rainbow Dash being loved as much as humanly possible.

This story... Has somehow earned my like, and you a follower.

(That Like will be gone if I don't get my sequel!)

TLP

I have a sudden urge to go to where you are located and do some hurtful things to you...

Really though, this was dark, but... Actually pretty decent. Props.

Wow...I hate the Hurtful Things meme...but you wrote this well. Good Job.

TLP

5659576 Yes. Or else...


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5659576 Look at that BEAUTIFUL like right there. Mmm, I will treasure it dearly. No fear, my friend, the sequel will be released tomorrow at some point. And, you have no idea how much I love it when someone takes a second look. Thank you, very, very dearly for that.


5659577 It genuinely hurt me to write this, but I did it because I know that as a writer, it would get to you somehow. And thank you, your love and affection is appreciated, even if it goes hand-in-hand with grenades.


5659578 Thank you, good sir/madam! Feedback gives me a all these butterflies inside.

5659601 Mmmm...seeing that vid makes me wanna watch PeanutButterGamer now.

and eat peanut butter. brb

TLP

5659615 Regardless, I still like to enjoy something dark occasionally. Putting RD in a situation like this is about as borderline as North and South Korea. Y'know, because..

Anyways, I didn't say I hate this story to the motherfucking core. I like it. I can resist the urge to kill someone. :rainbowwild:

Hope to see the sequel soon. More power to you.

5659639 eyy dude, more power to YOU for seeing the silver lining. To be honest, this isn't even that dark for me, but I won't go into that. it's like braggin that, "oh im so edgy hur hurr". Only posers do that.

In all seriousness- thanks for the support. Stick around, it'll pop up sometime tomorrow.

5659645 I like you a lot, too.

TLP

5659648 At first, my first intentions were to bash you in the gabber, but then I actually realized I have a few brain cells in me.

I'll stick around for the sequel. It's been a while since I've read something heartwarming. Hope others realize that this isn't so bad as they might think it is. Assuming that they have the decency to look beyond it just looking like a dark asshooe-like story for the hell of it.

5659684 I am used to those initial responses anyways. I do write these fucked up ones for the few (the people still reading) to give feedback and see my point. Now I need sleep. Thanks <3

5659490
>not 'absolutely disgusting'

Woah...That ending...I mean, God. I read this because of how the rating was split down the middle, and now I can see why. Most people that dislike this story either thought the ending was a last minute attempt to make something of this story or just didn't look at it at all. I'm glad I did read it to the end though.

Because now I want that sequel. So don't you dare pull a Half-Life 3 on us. :flutterrage:

I am so intrigued by these comments...I want to read it, but at the same time I'm really scared too...

I will seriously kill you.

I hated this, but the ending saved it.

Well hello, fellow Jerk!

5660221 Haha, I assure you, I am working on it as soon as I'm done working. :twilightsmile: Thanks for being one of those people that read through. I love you for that and you deserve all the women.


5660276 Haha...Well, if you did read, I hope you enjoyed. If not, I understand and bid you farewell.


5660466 That's exactly what I was aiming for.


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This story is too short, but then again like the bastard I am I LOVE seeing Rainbow Dash suffer like this. While it was short loved I enjoyed it more than I should. :pinkiecrazy:

Funny. Your post inspired me to use this meme for a story of my own (no worries - I am not stealing anything of you. Its a complete other premise than yours)

This goes in my "read later" folder, for I have no time right now.

5661091 That's great! I love inspiriting other writers. :)


5661069 Thank you, good sir/madam!!

GRAAH! Dammit! Need sequel now!!!!

5661137 lol chill im at work. let me do life first. <3

Wow, this guy is sick, breaking up with Rainbow Dash? Insane.
Good story though.

5661201 I would never dream of it.

5659436
You, Sir, are a genius.

It's the very end, what makes the story worth reading.
And yes - a sequel, with the foreshadow shown in the story's end would be highly appreciated. :pinkiesmile:
(I don't mind if loved characters are sent through hell - as long as there is a rewarding happy end.)

Oh, nearly forgot... have my like and my fav.

5661329 Thank you dearly! Every like, fav and dislike is appreciated- but not as much as feedback!

I promise to have the sequel finished by the end of the day. :raritywink:

I'm not sure how I brought myself through reading this. But the ending is what got me interested. Have a like.

I'll be keeping an eye out for the sequel. :twilightsheepish:

5661369 Cause you knew something good had to come out of this. And, cause you're possibly a little masochist. Which I very much like the idea of. Mmm....Crazy.

5661502 To be honest I wasn't sure how it was going to end. Towards the beginning the only thought that was going through my mind was "I'm not reading this."

...And then I clicked on the first chapter anyway. :facehoof: Though I'm glad I ignored my first impression and read through it. And it's all because of the ending.

You evil little genius.

First I was like...
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Now I'm more like...
...well, it actually was good.

It was about time someone gave those charts the story they deserved; I'm glad it was you who did it. Nice idea by the way.
As always, nice to read, nothing to complain about, yadda yadda yadda. Gave me several good laughs simply because of its glorious predictability.
I'm kinda looking forward to the sequel, if only to see if the stream of "I didn't read it but I'm gonna judge it anyway!"-responses is going to come to an end anytime soon.

So, yeah, as always, good work!

Oh and you're a heartless monster for writing a story in which a main character gets emotionally hurt. Shame on you for creating such abominations!

5661516 Hehe...thank you for being one of the few that read through. You have balls.


5661815 you knew what you were getting into lol. Was waiting for when you'd finally make your quickie review.

btw I'll be doing that super secret twilight thing when I get done with the seque lcause, well....kinda important and I promised, ya know? :p

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