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    Resolute on absolving herself, the Princess finds it in her duty to prevent the death that she foresees: she cannot allow herself to let the darkness of Chrysalis to reconstruct itself outside Equestrian borders.
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  • 18w, 4d
    Totally not dead! (By most standards*)

    So, the thing is, I've had a pretty rough year. I'm talking the kind of year that leaves you with literally no free time at all, and you end up completely forgetting about everything else. But hey! I feel like I came out on top after all that, and I'm in a situation where I'm able to devote my time to one thing or the other. The thing is, I'm not entirely sure what I should do, or more importantly, what I should prioritize. I've been gone for so long, that I'm pretty sure that most of the people who followed my stories have completely forgotten I exist (Which is understandable) and almost all have moved on from the stories I wrote. Now, I do enjoy writing, but there are venues that I could, and still might, write through, so I'm interested in knowing if anybody is still around for my sake, and if there is anything in particular they care to read now that I can write again.

    2 comments · 29 views
  • 76w, 7h
    I don't know what I'm doing.

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  • 112w, 1d
    The Greatest Excerpt Ever

         I looked through the Gideon bible in my motel room for tales of great destruction.The sun was risen upon the earth when Lot entered into Zo-Ar, I read. Then the Lord rained upon Sodom and upon Gomorrah brimstone and fire from the Lord out of Heaven; and He overthrew those cities, and all the plain, and all the inhabitants of the cities, and that which grew upon the ground.

         So it goes.

         Those were vile people in both those cities, as is well known. The world was better off without them.

         And Lot's wife, of course, was told not to look back where all those people and their homes had been.But she did look back, and I love her for that, because it was so human.

         So she was turned to a pillar of salt. So it goes.

         People aren't supposed to look back. I'm certainly not going to do it anymore.

         I've finished my war book now. The next one I write is going to be fun.

         This one is a failure, and had to be, since it was written by a pillar of salt. It begins like this:


         Billy Pilgrim has come unstuck in time.

         It ends like this:


    So yeah. I love that part of this book, which shall remain unnamed for the joy of watching you all revel in realizing you actually know good literature. Or not, who knows. Anyway, my challenge to you is this:

    Somebody, anybody really, take the theme, the juicy part of that excerpt, and make me a pony story. Do it son. Do it!

    4 comments · 152 views
  • 116w, 8h
    Steps to having no life:

    Step 1: Download Complete Works of Lovecraft

    Step 2: Read the fuck out of Lovecraft

    Step 3: Why are you still here? Read Lovecraft.

    6 comments · 124 views
  • 117w, 8h

    It's been like...what, almost a month now? Where the fuck have I been, you ask?


    You heard me, your brave, heroic writer pal has been braving the volcanoes of iceland.

    Okay, that's a complete lie. I've been doing stuff. Fun stuff.

    So, I'll ask you something just so I have an excuse to write this blog. Have any you of read Dracula? I've recently decided to do a bit of literary analysis on the book, as it when it comes to ideas such as Science vs Religion, it's an amazing piece to study. Seriously, the symbolism in Dracula drives me crazy. Now, you will never in a million years hear me say that I liked the book. I hate it. I don't like how it was written. Howeverrr~, as a book to study and learn from, I'd 100% recommend you read it. Seriously, if you haven't, run down to your local bookstore and pick up a copy and become edumacated.

    Err, yeah. Leave some whimsical comments below?

    3 comments · 101 views
  • ...

The greatest deceit in life is the illusion that all things are true. As Luna finds out, even the most tangible of things can be just a figment lost in time.

Art by White-Pwny on deviantart. They do excellent work, so go check em out there -->

Do it. You know you want to.

First Published
8th May 2012
Last Modified
8th May 2012
#2 · 133w, 3d ago · · ·

*clap clap clap*

#3 · 133w, 3d ago · · ·

>>559243 I'm guessing you liked it? :P

#4 · 133w, 3d ago · · ·


#5 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

That was sad, in a good way.

#6 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

>>563538 that's what I was going for! :D

#7 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

I see that my comment was removed for spoils.

#8 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

>>563605 indeed. took me long enough. XP

#9 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

This is the kind of story where I read it, then I immediately wanted to read it again and try to figure out what was real and what it all meant.  And after reading it a second time, I'm still not totally sure.

#10 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

>>563618 Ahh, that is the thing though! Who is to say what's real, and what's not? That's probably the main thing I was trying to go for here. "The greatest deceit in life is the illusion that all things are true"

#11 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

That...was a very good story. It had happy moments, then it turned to sad, I still enjoyed it very well.

#12 · 133w, 2d ago · · ·

Good story and good use or repetition, but would you please add the alternative universe tag?

#14 · 133w, 1d ago · · ·

:raritycry: Tears have been shed.

#15 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

Added to read-later queue. How does something with this much promise have fewer than 500 views? Everypony that reads this should be spreading the word, or something.

#16 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

Well written, powerful emotions. I enjoyed it, bravo! :twilightsmile:

#17 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

A very enjoyable read! I actually had to stop a moment and notice - how does a 2k word story possess the ability to so move its audience? It would have to be awesome. From setting to structure, circumstance to characters, everything would require a near perfect alignment.



#18 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

That was amazing, it was deep, and yeah, it brought up the question asked in the description. Just, yes.

#19 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

An excellent story my good sir, an excellent story indeed.

#20 · 132w, 3d ago · · ·

By Celestia's Beard!

#21 · 132w, 2d ago · · ·

Very heartwarming, very sad... and simply beautiful

#22 · 132w, 2d ago · · ·

It's heartbreakingly beautiful. The physical contact between the two of them upped the poignancy of the dialogue; coupled with Luna's realization it turned into something so bittersweet.

Have my +fav.

#23 · 132w, 2d ago · · ·

The amazing thing is how after the reveal... you can re-read the story and realise that EVERYTHING THEY SAID MAKES SENSE, but the meaning behind the words is so different. The illusion was not just Luna's, but ours as well.

#24 · 132w, 1d ago · · ·

I won't deny, the twist at the end is really clever, and I don't know of many fics that depict a dead Celestia alongside a still-living Luna, but...

The biggest problem is that far too much of their emotions are told. Indeed, this story is too sparse. It's in dire need of some fleshing out so we really feel their bond and the issues passing between them.

As touching as their reunion is, it and the twist raise a number of questions that undermine the moment.

If Luna never really went to the moon, why does she have memories of having been there for a thousand years? If she’s been on Equestria, ruling it alone for a thousand years, why is it only now that she has fake memories? It’s one thing to live a lie, it’s a whole other thing to think you’ve been somewhere you clearly know you haven’t for a thousand years.

At first it seemed like Celestia was a hallucination but the ending paragraph states that her spirit is watching over Luna—if she’s a hallucination, why did Luna only see her after a thousand years? If she’s really Celestia, why did she wait a thousand years to absolve herself and talk to Luna?

Speaking of the ending paragraph, I won't harp on that too much as I know why you added it, but, again, this story could really use some fleshing out. Unfortunately, the ending paragraph greatly weakens the poignancy of the repeated opening monologue. Rather than an infodump at the end, more attention should have been placed on gradually revealing and clarifying everything from the moment Luna's maid brought her back to reality.

“but I know that is you’ve always been at heart.” – Missing word.

“My endearing existence” – Are you sure you didn’t mean “enduring”?

#25 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

Look what you've done! You've gone and made me depressed :( . Excellent little story.

#26 · 129w, 9h ago · · ·

i feel like listening to the game of thrones them in a corner of dark room.

mind Fu****

#27 · 116w, 4d ago · · ·

"since that faithful day" I suspect you mean "fateful"

#28 · 116w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1209888 I can't remember exactly why I picked the word "faithful" instead of "fateful" but I know it was for a reason!


#29 · 70w, 2d ago · · ·

I'll be honest, to me it seems a bit excessively pretentious. But I am but one person, and I have no doubt that what appears too pretentious to me looks just right to some.

Celestia knows there are some stories I think a lot of people don't get; I would be a fool to not consider the possibility of others classifying me as one of the ones who fails to get a story.

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