A patchwork story about a somewhat different Vinyl Scratch and Octavia, who learn what it means to be in a relationship, to work, and to live together. Finally complete.
Quite the interesting look into Vinyl and Octavias relationship. Interesting is good.
good writing, your style is... different from what im used to. different, but still good. i guess we just have a little bit of different styles of writing, mine is mostly based of being able to truly put you in the characters shoes, and ive learned alot from what somber taught me. so good job, i enjoyed it.
Just want to say that before I go any further Hasbro made it canon that she has magenta eyes XD sorry bout that...
Love the way it's going. Keep up the good work, I want to see what happens next.
Thank you kindly. I know fanon divergent characters aren't everybody's cup of tea, but they're at least a little different, a little new.
Yup, everyone's got a different way of stringing words together. Can't say for sure what the strengths of my writing is, although apparently it must have some.
HAAAAAAAASBROOOOOOOOO! I shall solve this by adding the AU tag, and setting the story in an alternate universe where the only difference is that Vinyl has red eyes. Or, alternatively, by just tagging a little note to the first chapter explaining the whole situation. Thanks for giving me the heads up, by the way!
Well, I've got a few chapters pre-written and still waiting to post once I've edited them for the site, so you won't be waiting long.
To all: glad you're not completely disgusted by the story thus far, and thanks for taking the time out to comment!
It's no problem, i don't mind either solution but the AU tag is a bit excessive...
Ahahaha. I was kidding. I'll edit a little disclaimer into the story when I put up the next few chapters. Too lazy to do it right this second. Hope it didn't spoil the rest of the story for you.
It didn't spoil anything, also its sorta funny I switched to this tab right as the alert popped up. Im so lucky!
...what. I proclaim you a wizard, sir. The inqusitors will be over shortly. Do not be alarmed.
... If you consider snipercraft magic then yes... They won't get within 500 yards of me anyways... Lol jk but I am aiming for joining the Marine Scout Snipers.
Wow. That's a pretty intense ambition. I would say good luck, but it's probably one of those things where luck'll get you nowhere- only skill and determination. But have some good luck anyway, since it never does hurt.
Yay! I think this is my favorite of your shippy drabble collection things, so I'm really glad to see it hit Fimfiction. Sadly, the formatting is a bit wonky here--I'm seeing wall of text, which is hard on the eyes.
Aww, man...I'll go back through and do some formatting after I've had dinner, play around with horizontal rules and line breaks. Thanks for giving me the heads up!
I'm liking your take on Vinyl, a lot.
Can't wait for more!
Story is under reformatting to make it look a little less wall of texty. Do not adjust your sets, folks!
Hasbro also made it canon that she is light yellow. No one has cared about that in the >year that we've known about it, so it probably isn't a big deal what someone wants to call them. The excuse used for her being white was that the lighting was off, and this has also been used to argue that she has red eyes (in the episode she is clearly in the shadows)
also, for reference, the artist who worked on it says that they are about the shade of Rainbow Dash's eyes, which, while they may technically be magenta, are damn well close enough to red for fanon that claims it to be well in line with canon
I'm told it's quite different to the standard, gregarious fanon Vinyl. (And yet, despite having done this story, every time I write her name I want to call her Vinly...) Glad you're liking it so far!
"Not arrogance. Not until you prove me wrong,"
Octavia never said arrogance, she thought it, so vinyls response is a bit odd
Aha, that was the point. Vinyl predicts her thoughts on the matter. (Used to having people think she's a jerk, I guess.) I think I clarified it, unless I was using the word prescient wrong when describing Vinyl's answer.
I can't tell, was Octavia missing the concert or resting before it? It isn't particularly important, but it confused me a bit
("Yes. Normally, I would cut you here and now, but...you really are one of our best, usually. Please, take the rest," he urged, and she found herself nodding. A day or two without concerts gave her time to go and fix whatever mistake she'd made with Vinyl.) Yup, just resting. Sorry if I made it unclear; I know I was talking about her being cut and then having her rest very close together. D'oh.
fair enough, it just struck me as a bit odd
the bigger problem is that the conductor asks her if she would like a few days off instead of performing in the concert
You're right, I should probably change that to make it less ambiguous. Good catch!
I like this. Here's a derp.
I'll see your derp and raise you a moustache. Glad you liked it!
Actualy even tho she is in shadows if you briten up the picture it still won't be red XD. I've seen the scene adjusted to where her eyes were red but the rest of the scene was f(yay)ed up.
Thanks, you know that the failure rate for the Marine Scout Snipers is around 50% i believe right? I'm nervous and I'm not even close enough to the legal age, but I'm gonna try my best to join an elite little group of soldiers.
I like this. I'm not used to this new Vinyl Scratch you're writing, but she seems good. Solid. And strangely extremist. A part of me hoped she had stopped going to the concerts to get money to pay Octavia back. Then I thought she was sleeping with the saxophonist and a shitstorm was coming. Glad I was wrong on the last one.
I like how you've made her two different ponies, merely by having or not the glasses on. Your writing, too, is good. I'm not used to so much being contained in so little words, but hey, it works. Works really good.
Like I said, the rinal color should be about RD's eyes. The point about them being potentially brightened to red was a comment on how fans take insufficient reasons and excuses and make then into fanon. She is a light yellow if you want to want to argue technicalities, but fanfiction and art has generally stayed with her being white despite this.
And if BonBon has five or so canon voices, fans can continue to argue for different interpritations of background characters. None of it is necesarily a constant
Thats true, and I'm fine with fans doing their own thing, I just wanted the author to know about the "official" information.
I'm just saying that there is fan 'official' and artist-posted-on-a-message-board 'official'. It is an argument unto itself which should be preferred.
I don't get the "interested in this strange unicorn with the odd chip on her shoulder". Could you please explain?
And I like how you hint Pinkie had a one night stand with Vinyl. Subtle, but effective.
You cast a wide net posting here too. Still a good story is to be shared.
Nope, didn't know that. I don't even really know about the outfit at all. The Marines are an American military organisation, right? I'm British, so, whoop. Way over my head.
Yeah; I basically characterised her based entirely on her appearance. Then flailed with Octavia's characterisation until I cried. She's...different. Regarding the concise writing thing, that's turned into a little bit of a habit nowadays, ever since I started writing drabbles. The problem is that when you know that you can basically render any given scene into 100 words if you try hard enough, it becomes difficult to not do that. Every time the wordcount peeks over 500, I start going nuts because I'm losing the concision. So annoying. Also, sleeping with the saxophonist? Wow, that's an interpretation I've not actually heard before. That genuinely took me by surprise.
In terms of chapter 3, iunno if you're familiar with the term 'chip on your shoulder'- if someone has a chip on their shoulder, they have a belligerant or aggressive attitude, or act as if to provoke a fight. Seeing as Vinyl was essentially talking smack in the last chapter (look forwards to beating you, much?), I think the terminology is correct.
Thanks to everyone who commented, and...whoa. I only just got up after a nap, and I've already gotta do cleanup on those notifications. Better than being bored, though.
Posting here too...? Wait, did you read this on ff net? Sorry, I can never remember things from that site. So many emails, so many names! Glad you liked the story, though.
Yes, I guesse I should have refered to them as the USMC, cause I knew that alrdy...
>>561078561078 I'm used to the party-animal-mess-of-a-pony-full-on-DJ-full-of-sarcasm Vinyl I read on my second favourite OctaScratch, Mixing Relationships. I love the comedy of that Vinyl. This take on her is... well, different on a few keypoints. She seems more mature. More responsible. I like that.
Ok, here's the thing in my mind: monetary crisis saxophonist get big bag of cash from veeeery sexually open DJ pony who just got turned down by her, say, new romantic interest, although she doesn't really show much romance until the last chapter so far. And I'm raving. Anyways, I thought Vinyl was looking for a rebound to shake off the sadness, and the saxophonist would be way too grateful for her generous donation.
So if she's not sleeping over at Vinyl's, the question rises, where is the poor saxophone girl?
Mixing Relationships? Can has link? I'm always looking out for stuff that has good characterisation that I can assimilate. Stops me flailing so much. Good grief, if I could've found a good model for Octavia when I first started this story...
Oh, I see. That makes sense. I didn't even think of that angle, but now it's been pointed out to me, I really like it. I think I said something about the saxophonist in a later chapter, so I didn't end up forgetting about her completely. (And yet, I sort've did, since I spent more time feeding background character moments to the unnamed, undescribed security guard...)
>>561249561249 Mixing Relationships enjoy~ if the link doesn't work if't because I suck at this :( but the fic is here, so you can find it on the browser.
Far as I recall, you pointed she wasn't in her usual working place. Might have to re-read to be sure. Not that it bothers me to do so
I meant chapters that I'm yet to post. So far, it's all been backlogged work from my ff.net account that I've been posting. Because I've had to edit all the chapters, though, I'm not posting all the ones I have done at the same time (so I've got a little while to look through, format, primp, clean, etc.) The next few chapters of this should be up later today, though.
Also, the link works! Yay! Added to my read later list, as it should be. Thanks a lot!
Character development time! And we start seeing under Vinyl's mysterious mantle of mistery, some of her insecurities and flaws. And her sugar-adding habit
You think she's had enough sugar? SHE'LL TELL YOU WHEN SHE'S HAD ENOUGH.
>>563767563767 Oh I don't think we're nearly close the level of sugar this pairing requires
I love this take on Vinyl. It's like a mix of Abed, Tony Stark, and Santana.
I know who two out of three of those people are. I feel proud of myself. Glad you like it!
I did read it there. I actually had no idea this site existed until a few days ago. Now I never leave.
keeps getting better