Hmm........ It was quite long to read, maybe, separate into parts?

it was okay but i didnt like the part where they were browys

You would be dead wrong if you said this needed to be 20% cooler. This is a beastly story!

Im glad People like Indies story.

Yeah but more people are not liking it than liking it...

It's okay though cuz it aint technically finished yet

Oo how could this story have more dislikes than likes???? and for those of you who said that it needs to be twenty percent cooler it is already fifty percent than most of the fan fics i have ever read.

Well, to be fair it is still going through editing, But the reason why people don't like it is because; one, it's long; and two, it's mainly because the characters are humans in equestria which is not canonized so people complain... But i'm planning on submitting it to Equestria Daily when it's finished being edited

Thank you for the positive feedback

I'm also working on a kick flank cover picture for when the product is finished

awesome just plain AWESOME

I haven't decided whether I should make more though... It's sorta exhausting to make a good story.

That my brony friends is a great story

After reading this I cried, long and hard.

I have sensitive feels.