Craft is just your normal teenage colt, good grades, a few friends, forging Celestia's signature to train with the guard. Okay normal might be a little too much for him.
Good thing that Celestia can't change fate.
But nether can Craft.
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In two short chapters you have caught my interest, please do continue
Found these, you might try waiting a day and rereading the chapter. Also don't trust spell check it doesn't care if it's the right word, just is it spelt right. Example; [won ore to off these words mite bee spelled wright.} ( One or two of these words might be spelled right. ) Spell check was fine with both
Next to the throne stood a tall, lathe figure, [lithe] ?
When she spoke, she spoke with a kind mothering [ voice] ?
Don't blame me for for her humor [repeated word}
But how do [ ] top turning him pink?" [ we]
will follow to see what happens
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Thanks for pointing those out.
better, still a little fast paced, I think that's the term.
"I'd better get home,my mom cooking [ mom's]
Both ponies stop in front of large doors. [ stopped ] just sounds better to me, your call
Craft pases the princess and opens the doors. [passes ]
Celestia follows Craft through the doors and closes them behind them [followed] [closed]. Just worked out why I think the changes sound better ( my opinion only ) the original sounds like instructions for a stage play. if you are into writing them as well that would account for the cross over.
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Would you like to be an editer?
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while I am flattered by your request I do not have the skills needed to be an editor. I can catch some of the spelling errors and such, but my punctuation skills are sadly lacking. my suggestion would be to look on this site and check the FAC for information on prereaders and/ or editors. You will find a large number of authors willing to help who have much better qualifications than myself.
I will continue reading this story and will point out what little I find and offer suggestions from time to time, feel free to do what you will with .
Thanks again for the request and good luck with your writing.
B.D.
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Thanks for the info. Any help is useful