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When Fluttershy begins to have serious migraines and develops a lump on her head, she begins to worry she has a tumor. But when Celestia calls for a private audience with the shy Pegasus, it is revealed that they have a distant Family Relationship.
Fluttershy now has to deal with being an Alicorn, and learning all the skills and abilities needed to be one. But with her newfound ability of Foresight, will she be able to save Equestria from the return of the ruthless Alicorn Race, or will she choose to become a regular Pony, like everyone else?


Part Two of the Scratched Universe Saga.




Cover Picture by me. <3

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 52 )

Keep going with this! Amazingly inventive plot!

so now the librarian becomes the twilight princess?

I got to say, pretty good.
Some grammatical issues.
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I see some potential

seems interesting so far.:moustache: one of those for you!:heart:

twi and shy as alicorns!?:yay:! can't wait for moar!:pinkiehappy:

I can see where you are going with this. :raritywink: The entire mane 6 as alicorns :rainbowkiss:

ohhhhh :pinkiehappy: KEEP GOING! MUST KNOW WHAT IS GOING ON!!!!!!:applejackconfused:

This is interesting.

looking forward to the rest

This is a cool idea, but your pacing is a little off. You seem to have an in-story explanation for why Fluttershy isn't acting like herself, but a lot of other characters are acting strange, too. Like, I think the undisputed thousand-year ruler of Equestria would have a little more grace then to say "Hey kid, your life 'til now's been a lie. Here's your real family! :trollestia: "
Also, abusive Twilight is best Twilight.

is the spell used by fluttershy one that actually physically transforms the body into another species or just casts an illusion?

Loving it so far!!! Can't wait for more.
:heart: :heart: :yay:

I'm in the process of cooling down after a Marching Band Performance streak :v

I'll be getting more up sometime this week.

Damniittt, 4 days ago I promised to get Chapter 3 up. Procrastination is winning.
I'll get it up tonight.

That prophesy amazing kant wait to see more

wow dark twist.

niceee

Fair Warning:
Chapter 5 is going to have ties with Octaves of Time. I suggest you go read that if you want to understand much of it.
After all, OoT is the prologue of the Re-Written Equestria Saga, so...
:rainbowkiss:

o_o


...this is getting dark. really dark.

this is the most confusing part yet. my mind can not process anything related to bending time or changing it. especially when alternate universes are involved.
:/
i would have preferred if time manipulation would have been left out.

its just my opinion.

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Aww, but the time manipulation is the whole point of the Saga :yay:

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sorry but my mind is incapable of fully understanding time-related plots without somesort of visualisation or an extended period of time. :fluttershysad:

Especially with so much going on in the story.
But despite my incapability to understand time manipulation, this story is awesome.

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No worries, I'd be surprised if someone actually did understand what's going on right now. :rainbowhuh:

This chapter was pretty confusing for me as well, I didn't really understand the time manipulation it too well. But I do like your story so far, even if dark fics aren't really my thing, I can't read one without having to stop midway at the dark parts xD

I find it interesting that you are using this theory of time travel related alteration, instead of endless paradoxes or time loops. Still a good story though

" ‘Rise, Rainbow Pyre.’ Twilight bellowed, as slowly the bindings around Rainbow’s hooves and mouth broke, under Twilight’s magical suppression. She gave a wicked smile, and chuckled as her obedient Elite Slave rose from the cave ground, her flowing multi colored mane painting the walls of the cave bright colors. Rainbow’s eyes almost poured hatred, but not hatred for her master. She would be good to her master. She would make Master happy.":pinkiegasp: *BOING*:twilightblush: yea that entire paragraph seemed dirty :ajbemused:

This was a confusing chapter from what i understand....
Shit just got real

LOL You are now the most important alicorn ever. Way to put it lightly.

I think I get it:pinkiehappy: but I want more!:applecry:

I always heard that if you leave your dimetion the dimenion you were in would blow up.:unsuresweetie:

614148 Books/cartoons/movies/AndSoForth all do time-travel and it's consequences with a slight difference. Speaking of which, where did you hear that? I've never heard it....

614448 I saw it in an old book (I forgot the title) then I saw it in an episode of t.u.f.f. puppy in witch they save the world (who knew that a group of singing monkys could open portals). However everyone has their own opinion. Use whatever you like it won't make a diffrence this early on.

Put the story on Hiatus. Just not enough inspiration at the moment to continue, and I'm gonna take a small break from the Re-Written Equestria Saga.

:rainbowkiss:

Celestia being preemptive for once? and miss out on Twilight learning an important lesson on friendship? Fie!

546238 AAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.... that pun was like driving a serrated, superheated knife into my nose and twisting it! why... why?!:raritydespair:

594716 and she said it to THE MLP deity of shrinking violets... Cadence Y U so clueless?

TARDIS exploding, is that meant to happen? is that bad thing? its normally a bad thing when stuff explodes.

Finished it.
Enjoy the 'Atmospheric Music' :D

B'D'AWWWW :fluttercry:
That's so sweet :rainbowkiss:

So now I'm wondering...

Will there be a sequel? :trixieshiftright:

~Rosalynn~:yay:

“We’re terribly late for our wedding, aren’t we.” NO QUESTION MARK WHY THIS RUINED THE AMAZING MUSIC ANDTHEEPICSTORY WHYWHWYWYWHWW WTH WHY WHYW HWYWDW&DWi8wjmfiegjergh89trbhi8jrth- Awesome story. And it's sad too. The music definitely helps you enjoy the story.

prophet whooves haha lol

I have no f@$ing clue what happened in this story!

I dunno... I'm not really convinced on Cadence's role in this chapter or story so far. She's just kinda there and the connection between her and Fluttershy doesn't seem all that strong to begin with. It's just kinda "BOOM" accept it. The story is not bad so far really.

Wow, that certainly took a turn!

Onward!

I love that this story is so unpredictable!
As a wise mare once said, "It's a spectacle."

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