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Very nice. I like the connection the three of them had, and how Moonstone was portrayed in this chapter. Now I find myself curious as to what happened between the three of them. Until then, I eagerly await the second chapter.
I like the Story so far and like 5518996 I'm looking forward to read the second Chapter
Oooh a new fic by Naughty_Ranko? This gonna be good... *Sits down to read*
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Yeah, good thing it was finally uploaded
As you might have seen in the Authors Note it was suppose to be uploaded on Darkhanos' Birthday (18th of January)
And done! Off to a nice start there
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So I see. Belated happy birthday 5518996 then!
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Thank you, I appreciate it.
Really loved the Chapter and can't wait to see what's going to happen next
But I would like to ask Moonstone what's so wrong about having Shooting Star feat. in Playcolt? I mean with a Body based on Naughty Ranko's Avatar I wouldn't mind having other Stallions seeing her and it's not like she offers her Body for Sex with this Shooting. Also I personally wouldn't mind sharing her, as long as I could be Part of the Fun (or at least watch it)
Last, but definitly not least:
Even though I already congratutated you in a PM
Hm. I'll be honest, the cheating part didn't sit right with me. Granted, Moonstone shouldn't be so presumptuous as to forbid someone to do something, but that's hardly any justification for cheating. Missing Nail seems to be the bad friend here, yet it's all Moonstone's fault. And Shooting Star is in no way to blame and totally justified in her actions. How typical
I can see why it would bother him about the Playcolt thing to a degree, but as Nightmare_Shinigami said, I would've also had a small sense of unspoken pride about it, kinda like "That's right. That's my mare, putos!"
Having said all that, it was a good chapter.
Oooh drama
So Moonrise is upset at Shooting Star posing for Playcolt... I can only assume he doesn't know she sleeps with his old friend whenever they have an argument 
I'm guessing The Incident somehow involved him finding out.
Happy birthday Ranko \o/
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Well, obviously this flashback only gave the events from one side. It's certainly possible that Moonstone came around on the topic of the photo shoot eventually, and personally I feel his stubborness here comes more from the fact that Shooting Star discussed the topic with Missing Nail first, feeling he should have at least been the first one to be told about it. Who is to blame comes down to perspective, and this chapter obviously had Missing Nail's perspective.
The upshot here is this: All three of them are to blame to some degree.
-Moonstone is too controlling in the relationship
-Missing Nail takes advantage of the situation, even though he won't commit to a relationship himself
-And Shooting Star's inability to choose between the two stallions has led her to make some bad decisions
(No doubt in her mind she isn't cheating on Moonstone. She considers the fight a break-up, thus leaving her free to simply have some fun in order to blow off steam, but that's only a justification for herself. Clearly Moonstone would feel differently about that.)
Moonstone is no more at fault here than Missing Nail is. Diamond Dust says as much. But it's natural for Missing Nail to shift the entire blame on him. There is no one bad guy in this story. Mistakes are being made all around, because these characters are (for lack of a better term) just human. That's what I've been trying to convey.
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Thanks.
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Well we will see how this Story ends
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That goes without saying. You've conveyed that flawlessly from the different perspectives thus far, and you've made it work well with the story. It still just rubs me the wrong way, which in turn makes me all the more curious how things came to be, and what will come.
I must say, this is quite an excellent story so far.
I admit the subject matter isn't always my fave - emotional turmoil, break ups, and cheating - but it feels so real that I can't stop...and being told from only one perspective at a time helps keep any of it from feeling truly bad in the moment. I can hardly wait for the final chapter...with, I'm guessing, Major Shooting Star.
Also, Happy Birthday!
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I know. It's a lot more heavy on the drama than my usual stuff, which is strange, cause I didn't set out specifically to make it that way. It may be in part that I stretched it out to three parts. When I initially conceived it as a one-shot, there wasn't that much backstory to the characters. So it would have probably ended up a lot more light-hearted. We'll see how it turns out in the end.
Thanks.
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Oh, it's quite all right. The drama gives it a great deal more depth, and, as I said, makes it feel all the more real.
It's amazing how many real gems come from minor decisions that snowball.
Best reunion ever
Life's so much better when everyone learns to share and play together, right? Great story, and happy birthday Nightmare_Shinigami
Well done. Lol, I like the references too. Great story, I'm just sorry I don't have the time to enjoy it more.
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Thanks and well "you gotta share you gotta care"
And I have to be honest
Those might have been Moonstone's aka Darkhanos' Line, but I was thinking that too
Nevertheless I really loved the Reunion and hope those three will have some good Time together... and some awesome Sex of course
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I know. I really intended Shooting Star's words to be just some comedic banter, and making sure that she wouldn't get in trouble for what she was planning for Moonstone and Missing Nail. But I knew exactly what other implications it could have.
That's why I added that line from Moonstone, so it was clear that she never slept with Starfire. And it was kinda more in character for him to ask that question. Basically Star had no reason to come on to him at that point, since she had the promotion in her pocket already.
But Shooting Star was shrewd enough to use some flirting tactics in order to throw the Colonel off his game, which is something he isn't very comfortable with. Sticking out her chest while leaning in on him was a deliberate move on her part to make him nervous.
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I figured she didn't, but perhaps that was just me being optimistic because he seemed like a jerk
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You have to wonder if Shooting Star would have made Major in such a record time without the added incentive of proving his words wrong.
Or maybe he just acts like a jerk to constantly challenge his subordinates and bring out the best in them.
That was a wonderful conclusion, and great to see them repair their relationship.
However, given how Shooting Star and Spitfire were talking both as equals and - unless my ears deceive me - friends, I couldn't help but picture this ending.
The door swings open. "Star, there was something I forgot to ask you about-" Spitfire stopped and stared.
Shooting Star, Missing Nail, and Moonstone all looked up guiltily. Both Missing Nail and Moonstone tensed, ready to try and leap to Star's defense, whether verbally or physically.
Spitfire smirked. "The two old friends you're always talking about?" Star nodded helplessly. "Then I'll ask tomorrow." Her eyes roved over the two stallions. "I see why you were so eager to rekindle the...friendship." She then turned and walked out. "Though you should remember to lock the door next time."
As the door shut, Star put her hand to her forehead and groaned, grumbling under her breath, before all three friends began to giggle helplessly at the absurdity.
Of course, now looking back, I see she locked the door at the start of the meeting.
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Mmm... still wouldn't fuck him
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I like it. We'll call this the alternate ending.
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Glad you like it.
An alternate ending? Wow, that makes me happy.
LMFAO! Now that I reread the fight scene, I can't help but picture this
Don't judge me, I thought the movie was funny