EVEN B4 YOU START, THIS IS A PREEMPTIVE "NO SKILL" ALERT! (Ya so, this my first time trying)
Majora and Derek are two stallions who live in secret. They help protect Equestria from evil fortold in ancient prophecies. Their existence is unknown to all but Celestia, until they are caught in the act of stealing from a purple mare, starting a chain of events leading them out of hiding and into the fray, confronting evil and the Princess herself. It's not easy being hated and hunted, but when you have nothing else to live for, you may fight for those who hate you.
(Rated TEEN for some mild language and blood)
Chapters (10)
Criticism is much appreciated, but keep it in moderation.
UPDATE: Almost done. Bring on all feedback, be it Positive or Negative. I need it.
sounds good ill read it when im done browsing
you know it would be a nice twist for twilight to be a secret badass due to Celestia training her "most faithful student" how to defend herself granted why waste it on thieves any ways you get my thumb
I like it
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Thank You (/^o^)/
That means a lot to me. Cause at first i was afraid of FAILURE XD
So far so good, can't wait for more!
LOVE IT, LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT IT
630105 Orly? I wonder why....
First... I like where this story is going keep it up
First.... Celestia calm. The. F**k. Down
633517 Sad part is, we never did get the full picture of her rage in the show. Had to think hard about those parts.
Celestia is PISSED
good story granted you suck at displaying emotions (dead sister oh ill just pretend i dont care after 2 mysterious stallions show up
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649746 I see your point.
Thank you. 
...what?
that ending. And please tell me that that was not all o it. If the CMC die, at least give us a more epic fight scene. Sorry, just a little sore about that.
658278 Ahhh, there is a lot of story left....
Yay, character interaction!
Celestia is a douche
First
nuff said
708692 Seems like more like an insult than a legit comment about my work
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uh sorry I do that when I get the chance your story is great I always pass this fic while browsing and one day there was nothing else interesting I chose this one and got hooked
Not bad at all. It's a good story. Unfortunately, there's just not enough to get attached to Majora and Derek. All we saw was them in action. We didn't really see the other side of them or more of the past that forged them. Other than that, this story is indeed very good.
752608 Being my first story, that means a lot. I still feel like there were a few parts I should've expanded on more (ie their past). Maybe I'll give this writing thing another shot after all.
I'm just glad at least ONE person enjoyed it.
Guess who? Lol that's right I made an accout for the main purpose of commenting. Notice how the only real constructive criticism is basically exactly what I told you during the writing before the two falling outs. Just wanted to say that lol.
1095397 Hush Coffee, hush