Moving On

My first fic ever, and with thanks to Silverquill for editing it.

When she goes to the cafe, Ditzy manages to snag the last seat in the house. Twilight ends up joining her, and Ditzy has to open up her troubled past.

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Jade Mer

Jade Mer #1 · Nov 7th, 2011 · · ·

Guess who finally succeded in making me cry. You did. Congratulations on writing a very good story.

Kamineigh

Kamineigh #2 · Nov 7th, 2011 · · ·

I assume more character tags will be added as the story goes on?

Ahem, as for the story, I like it. It's definity not all that sad though, but more of a sincere feeling I got from it.

As for the characters, will Dinky make any appearances?

dastrdlyW

dastrdlyW #3 · Nov 7th, 2011 · · ·

26242 Story says its complete, so I don't know if there'll be any updates for it.

DreadedCandiru2

DreadedCandiru2 #4 · Nov 7th, 2011 · · ·

Crap. This is sort of depressing.

#5 · Nov 7th, 2011 · · ·

Anyways... I think that, thanks to the "/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\" scene break as well as Twilight's fairly understated reactions to Ditzy's story, that Ditz may be a bit more brain damaged than we are being led to believe and may well be making little to no sense to Twilight.... which made it kinda awesome until the end where this seemed to be disproven.
I read funny, I think... that or I just like narrative twists.
Well... aside from that tangential misreading, it was a decent start with it dropping a helluva lot of background in setting this up... but something about it is just a little too difficult to buy into. It's sort of depressing, but moreso it seems a little bit absurd (which seems to be my standard take on "you ruined my life" set-ups, so that might not mean too much) to me. Can't judge too harshly though; this fic seems to be still in the set-up phase so you've got plenty of time to sell us when you've got Ditzy having some proper interactions.

26299 It also says "Chapter: 1" so perhaps there is more and it's simply mislabeled. Certainly is set-up for more.

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