Twilight floated a second fritter up to her mouth when she realized the first was gone. “What is in these things?” “Mostly love. Love ‘n about three sticks of butter.”
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Twilight Sparkle was thrilled to find her place as Princess of Friendship. But what is a Princess of Friendship without her friends? When Applejack comes to her to have an important conversation, Twilight is reminded that some of her friends have places of their own.
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Reading it again is no less feelsy than the first time. Stupid eyes... stop burning!
I am so glad to see this again. Here were my exact words.
Faving this so hard.
This story comes down on the feels pretty heavily, but I am not sure if it really feels tragic.
That must have been an incredibly hard thing for Applejack to say.
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That was actually a mistake. Baby Trixie grabbed my mouse as I was putting it in Slice of Life, and the next one down was Tragedy.
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it (and equally glad I didn't ruin it by extending it bit. I admit I was the tiniest bit worried.)
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That is so adorable I think I might die.
A very interesting little look into some of the ramifications of season 4. Applejack's always been Twilight's second-in-command, and knowing her, there really isn't a different answer she would give, but you know it's a hard answer to give, anyway. She's a pony who's always all-in when it's something she believes in. It's somber and thoughtful without getting maudlin. A lovely little story.
Wait, actually, I do! I liked it a lot, and I feel really bad I don't have a ton of words to dump here :/
This... really liked it. The kind of great story that says so much in so few words. I feel like the conversation could have gone on for pages and pages, but it didn't. It was succinct, to-the-point, just like the ponies involved.
Great job, Book!
Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here. Also, will this be part of a series?
Excellent work, as always. I really enjoyed this. It felt so real. Good job on making the characters feel alive, and adding depth to them in such a short story.
Feels nice with the expansion. More of the whole picture when you throw in the other points to consider including some of Twilight's thoughts as well.
Oh my freaking god, why are there so many stories about the mane six beings friends?
I swear that every time I load the main page there's another story about Twilight and Applejack, or RARITY AND RAINBOW DASH!! And they're not even giving so much as an eye flutter?? 
It's like, do you people really think these characters don't spend all their time kissing???? 
Like two characters can ACTUALLY get together and not have it devolve into sloppy, ill-considered makeouts?! 
This makes me sick to my stomach. I'll be taking my viewership AND MY UPVOTES ELSEWHERE.
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I liked it. Short and sweet. Well, not sweet as much as kinda sad but short and sad sounds lame.
I always think people downplay Applejack's wanderlust. She did leave home when she was a filly for a reason, y'know. She likely came back because she was only a kid and understandably, felt a bit lonely and scared. She hadn't even earned her cutie mark back then. So I think part of her reasoning for 'serving' Twi (I use the term lightly since I can't think of a better one) is because it gives her just the right amount of adventure without her having to abandon her family duties.
5513922 I hope you're not serious, but honestly sometimes I can't tell. Internet people are strange creatures with no determinable boundaries to their behaviors, and nothing can be ruled out.
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I'd like to give you a definitive answer, but I feel that it might ruin my mystique. You be the judge.
5513922 You're trying too hard.
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Now you're catching on, pumpkin. Gold star.
This is a pretty awkward sentence.
Anyway, this was still a nice piece, apart from a little bit of awkward exposition at the start. Good job.
5514138 Well, you've pretty much cleared it up regardless.
You cheeky bastard.
I wrote a review of this story. You can find it here.
Agree with 5514324 about there still being a bit of clunkiness here, but I definitely enjoyed it. Seeing your characterizations of Applejack and Twilight is always a pleasure.
The Applejack stuff was good, but to me the best part of this piece was the bit at the end where Twilight thinks about Rarity and Rainbow being faced with the same choice. It's powerful because it's so personal, which you've done a great job setting up with Applejack. There's very little exploration you can really do on their situations, because neither Twilight nor Applejack have much standing to address them. It's a small thing, but it fixes a lot of narrative tension in my mind, because I both want more and know that more can't be satisfying unless it's told from Rainbow's or Rarity's perspective. That lack of resolution is what's sticking with me most, in all of this.
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Yeah, the uncertainty there - and knowing Applejack has her back - I think really helps to seal the deal on the piece.
OH THANK GOD!!! A story in the feature box that's actually GOOD!
*weeps with joy*
Short, but a proper and well-reasoned slice-of-life.
5514592 I can be forgiving about an awkward sentence here and there when the story's plot is well-constructed and the characters are true to their natures.
Those traits are becoming a 'rarity' these days.
5513922 I see what you did there.
I have that rare ability to read sarcasm.
But I'll bet someone will write a sequel where they have an orgy later. Ah heck, it's probably already been written and posted by now.
This is a good examination of one of the big themes of the show - growing up and taking on more responsibility. Especially for Applejack - responsibility is one of her major themes. Being a team of magical heroes who keep saving the world is actually a big responsibility and they shouldn't be surprised that it takes time away from their other pursuits.
I'd love to feature this in Nonpareil Fiction, if that's okay with you.
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I'd love to second this, even though I'm not a member of Nonpariel Fiction.
Loved this story. You got the tone just right, and Twilight's reflection on Rarity and Rainbow Dash at the end really tied everything together. Thanks for another great story.
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I don't usually submit to EqD, but I'll consider it! Thanks for the suggestion!
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While I realize the show is primarily about shipping, sometimes writers will look past all the meaningful glances and obvious romantic tension and write about the characters being friends. I know it's a different take on things, but I hope people who are interested in that can enjoy it!
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It's absolutely okay with me! I'd be honored.
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Thanks you guys! It's been a while since I wrote something without shipping, it's nice to know that I can still do a decent job of it. Heck, it's been a while since I posted anything at all, so I really appreciate all the nice comments!
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EqD have a word minimum of 2500.
However, maybe you guys could figure something out...?
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As with much of what EQD does, the 2500 minimum is less of a rule and more of a guideline. We're willing to publish things under 2500 words if we think they're outstanding—we just don't publicize this much, because we don't want a huge spate of these things coming in, and stories under 2500 words have a considerably higher bar to clear (just like stories that don't follow the other guidelines).
I'd be unlikely to evaluate a bookplayer submission if one came in, simply because I'm biased, though personally I think (1) we've published less worthwhile stories at this length, but (2) I still think this'd be a hard sell, and I'd much rather see some of bookplayer's other, stronger work at EQD personally.
I do like this story, but that's my opinion on this one.
5514324 I'd probably amend the comma to a semi-colon.
i.e. Hoofsteps echoed through the nearly empty room as Twilight approached; she didn’t need to announce her presence, but Applejack didn’t look up.
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That would fix it from a grammatical standpoint, but the sentence still remains rather awkward.
I liked this. Applejack's dilemma, and her reaction, reasoning, and decision all made sense. I was tense, reading the first half, wondering along with her about what really mattered—not just to her, but to everyone. I wasn't sure if she would or wouldn't. In the end, I do believe the choice she made fit her character. Quite a lot, done with a few words.
Well this was really nicely done, I can tell why our fearless leader wanted to feature it on Nonpareil.
It really made me think about the effect Twilight Sparkle as a whole has had on her friends' lives. I'll see you at the next chapter.
This kind of something I've thought about ever since the end of season 3. It's one thing to get wings, it's another to be a "princess", and it's been profoundly unclear what this will mean to this day, but it seems quite likely to be a somewhat engrossing responsibility. I remember reading fimfics that had Twilight becoming headmaster of some school, or archmage, or just a generally respected field researcher of some kind, but those kinds of stories stopped appearing (at least as frequently) when the princessification rolled around. I kind of miss the things people would come up with, worldbuilding-wise, before this narrowing of the possibility space. It's a good point that this is something that also affects all her friends, in ways that are harder to quantify.
Such is progress.
Sigh.
Thanks for writing this.
This was a nice read. Thought-provoking as well, as to how the others would react to the change
It was a nice surprise to see this pop up in my notifications - it's always a pleasure to read your stories
That was actually rather painless. I went into this thinking AJ was going to pick farm before Twilight.
I really liked this story. Applejack is just perfect here. Tough decisions. Realistic goals and ambitions. Alltogether strong.
I like it.
As a general observation (not aimed at this fic), it seems kind of strange that the equestrian government doesn't have them on retainer or similar. In short, it seems obvious that they should be paid in someway.
Growing up, taking new responsibilities and managing old ones, and not making a drama out of it, I like it.
I didn't read the original story, but the length seems about right now.
I reread this today after reading another story about a similar subject matter. This story set a high bar for such things, and I'm glad for it, and was sad that the other story didn't end up measuring up.
Incidentally, well played on anticipating Applejack's views of duty in Brotherhooves Social.
Reading this and Good Ponies Don't, Do They? back-to-back really showed what a difference a year could make in terms of writing quality in a conversation piece.
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I was going to read this one now because it's short, but Bookplayer just made me cry earlier today with "Wisdom is Just Growing Old", and my nose is only now finally getting unstuffy.
Great interactions between characters