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Everyone would like to be a millionaire, but was is it like when you end up in an alternate universe after an accident occurs? For Matt, just that has happened. Just how will he manage life in this new world known as Equestria? Lucky for him, a sweet, young mare named Apple Bloom found him and things start to look up. Or do they?
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I'm enjoying it so far!
Admittedly I haven't finished it yet, but I like what I'm seeing. Now, on to the nitpicking: I'm curious about your use of "I aren't" instead of "Am not."-Why is this? I'm also wondering why Applebloom isn't a little nervous around a human, something she's never seen before. Also, Applebloom seems to blush a lot around him; this might just be my head-canon,but I don't see her getting all love struck/embarrassed at a simple "Thank you."
Great job so far! I like your premise, although I think the pacing could be a little slower. 'I love you' in the first chapter (and so soon after first meeting) is really quick. There are far too few longer fics similar to this, and we need more of them. Looking forward to the next chapter and Matt meeting more members of the Apple family!
is this going to be a foalcon story?
5500053 That is just another way of writing it. ''Aren't'' and ''Am Not'' are common, just written different sometimes. Also, though she may be scared of him, if you think about it, she sees him as another harmless critter but gets to know him more and more as time progresses. I didn't really intend on having two chapters (still to come) but viewers of the story think it would be better if I did. I have been meaning to rewrite chapter one and make it more apparent to the feeling of AB and Matt, but I guess that can come up in the next chapter.
I don't think it will be as long, but we'll see.
Oddly, I somehow feel that I failed miserably with this story.
Originally, I did have an alternative to what it is now and it was a whole lot more better regarding Matt and Apple Bloom's feeling for each other as time progressed from their first meeting. I wanna edit it so it turns out like that but it is too much work and will interfere with my college work. (In other words 'God f***ing dammit!')
It's back!
5501865 Don't you hate it when your comments don't get a response?
Why is this on hiatus?
7075898 Didn't you see the box at the bottom of the chapter? All details are there. Originally, I didn't plan for this to be a long story to begin with (at the minimum of around maybe 20,000 to 25,000 words instead of over 50,000) and I did kinda go a little overboard with this. Although I can't guarantee anything, I was thinking about going through the whole story and narrowing it down before any of the deeper romance stuff to give a better emotional and more compelling experience to the reader.
He seems really accepting of the fact that ponies talk... A bit too accepting.
Plus... You stated the Mustang was a V6... And later on you state it's a GT (which implies a V8).... Driving one myself I just wanted to point that out.
Wat.
It's marked complete now, does that mean you ARE done with it?
How am I the only guy who comments on this story.
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Nah man the story is fine.
He almost dies in a car crash but he thinks that it's a good idea to teach AB to drive.
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But why you done with it
Awe, cute, Applebloom’s got a crush.
I kind of wish there was more, this to me felt like it could be a longer story that wasn't complete yet.
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Same. But I think that at this point, the story has already missed that opportunity. A good way would have been if Matt returned to the human world after his second car crash in Ponyville, that would have been interesting as he reunites with his family (even if his family don't become formal characters) and wonders if everything previous was some kind of dream or something. There it could try to explain what transported him to Equestria in the first place, and obviously how that happens again and he meets AB again, assuring him that he is alive and all. Even if it just boils down to something like "one of the princesses did it by mistake while experimenting with magic", it would be better than leaving that mystery unsolved, considering that the story does emphasize what that event might have been.
But since that line didn't occur, I think that at this point the story would only be extended with romantic and comfy situations. Unless there is some creative way to create more tension and mystery. It's a pity that the author left the community
DDAAAAAM !!!!!
I wonder if AJ may be jealous of AB, having a special somepony.