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Five months later, Luna sat on the throne once more, playing her part in a political meeting between the Equestrian government and the Griffon ambassador, working out the last few details of a trade agreement. It was shockingly dull, but these things had to be done.
Just half a year ago, Celestia would never have allowed Luna to take part. She could do it, she didn't need any help. Luna should be out enjoying herself, or resting, or any number of things that weren't her royal heritage. Not now, though.
To top it all off, though the meeting was surely boring Celestia to death too, she was smiling. Truly and honestly smiling, not the fake smile she had so often worn, but the smile of somebody who is content with their lot. Luna had more things to thank Twilight than she could find time for, but that smile was the main one. It wasn't the practised, "could silence a room" smile, it was just an honest one.
Luna knew why, as well. Twilight was on a train even now, as they hammered out the last few details, and Celestia had taken the rest of the night off. Apparently they were going to buy a telescope and find a nice position somewhere on the mountain to gaze from. Luna had Celestia's word that should she pull any pranks, Celestia would have her thrown in the dungeons. Luna didn't doubt it. She considered writing another message or two anyway.
That was something else Luna had to thank Twilight for. The constant, unending stream of letters both to and from Celestia that made even the loneliest night so much more enjoyable. Luna knew that if a copy of the letter where Celestia had managed to insert three hearts into the word "Twily" were ever to make it to a printing press, Celestia would never live it down. She would never do it, of course, but she loved to see her sister blush when she threatened.
Luna smiled too.
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What I said before proved to be right: I want more! 
more Celestia not knowing what to do with herself, more Twilight freaking out over missed deadlines, more cuddley kissy goodness, and finally: more Twilight picking up Celestia with her magic. 
Looking forward to the next one.
To be honest, I kinda see this turning into a double ship fic... Like please, luna may be really happy for luna, but 1000 years on the moon, then doing all this royalty stuff while her sister is grinning like an idiot because her and her mare friend are going out star gazing in about an hour on the mountains MUST yank the jealosy strings so hard there a meter out of her chest!
This is good work. I would like more, and if you decide to add some sexy-time-business to the equation I would not be adverse to that.... but it hasn't suffered without it.
EDIT: Oh it's complete... well then I guess I will have to find another source for my twilestia addiction... oh well it was still a good read.
Alright, finished this behemoth of TAW-ness
Guess I'll write as I read.
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First chapter was perfect spelling and grammar-wise. Always great in my book, but often ignored;
All very in character.
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"Celestia help her, she had no idea." - Pretty funny when you think about it. At least Luna stepped up to help
It seems that the instances you used the é for café were changed to 'café', how unfortunate
I found it appropriate that "Can't fight this feeling anymore" by REO Speedwagon & Can't Lose by Shiro Sagisu (off the Bleach OST) came on during my reading of this.
'Somebody had stolen her coffee! "Prin- Celestia, where did my coffee go?" '
You used an actual salt bar
Excellent way to incorperate show canon elements
' "TWO THOUSAND YEARS, TWILIGHT." Celestia suddenly yelled.' - I actually laughed aloud from reading that line
By the letters exchange, I was tearing a bit. I mean smiley faces? Really
The verbal back-and-forth between Celestia and Luna while she tries to deny any feelings toward Twilight? Nicely done as well.
Spike in regards to getting sick from eating not only the muffin but the ice cream as well was a nice touch, makes him feel even more in character.
"It was just practise, going through the motions - not the e-motions." - I REALLY like this line, not only is it fun to read, but it also correctly uses "practise".
"Celestia sighed. This was harder in person than it was in letters - all she wanted to do was heart the dots on her is" - missing an apostrophe "i's"?
' "Celestia" and "Love" fitted together...' - Sounds alright, but maybe they "fit together perfectly in Twilight's mind", even if it does break from past to present tense for a second
Also, that entire paragraph of explanation? Very Twilight. It's reenforced by what we've seen from Twilight in the show.
'Twilight smiled. "Celestia, I studied under you for years. I already know you're worth it." ' - Awwww
'Celestia glared at him with the full force of the sun and over two thousand years of practice, stress, and repressed hatred.' - At this point, "Drama Link (b)", off of the Ren & Stimpy original music score, played. Very fitting (Old show sound bits will do that)
"Twilight, I made most of those rules. I can't enjoy them, it's like casting your own spell - you just see all the imperfections, it ruins it," Celestia explained.
- THIS. This line man, I know that feel
Anyone who's created anything knows that feeling. Probably many on this site as well. (Although in my case it applies more to art and music, rather than writing)
"When Celestia refused to move, Twilight picked her up and carried her in an intense magical glow. Twilight did not get turned down often." - "...And I'm not taking no for an answer!" Sounds very familiar.
' "Celestia!" she exclaimed, "You stop that this instant. Come on, look through this," she commanded' - Twilight retains her air of leadership, even when the subject is Celestia.
"It was 1500 light years away, was shaped like a head, played a large part in the Orion constellation, and oh gosh Celestia was kissing her." - I did a double-take when I read that. Nicely done.
What a light hearted way to end the chapter.
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Chapter 3 was nice & simple way to wrap up the story. That's all I really have to say about it.
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All in all, I liked the way you wrote Celestia. Too many parts that were fun to read. The way she reacts with Twilight is excellent! Looking out for her, but also having her fun (I wonder which irritating 'celebrity' couple was rained on due to Twi's haste/aero style spell).
TAW, you're aweso- scratch that, TAWesome
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This only proves once again that I can pretty much read and enjoy anything by you (given the time
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I may or may not have opened up notepad alongside reading this to take notes;
Sorry for this wall of text, and keep doing what you do!
(PS. Thumbs up'd and Favourited, if it wasn't obvious already)
(PPS. TL:DR - This is well done, you rock & you should do more of it)
TAW.... you deserve a medal ceremony
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Oh, there'll be more of that, don't worry.
I know, I'm crazy. Crazy!
Even princesses can make typos! It was totally intentional I swear maybe almost
A coherent story arc from start to finish, a self-contained piece. Length is proportional to how much you have to say.
I mark almost everything complete if it's a self-contained one-shot, but that doesn't preclude more, it just means that it ideally shouldn't leave any strings hanging
Thank you... I think!
Bueno.
The conversations were meant to establish a baseline for Celestia being more vulnerable than usually depicted, and everything else kind of spirals off of that, without them I'd completely agree with everything you said. I absolutely do ignore the complications, but at the same time they're never touched on at all - they aren't what this story is about. It's very much a generic >shipping tale with few new or interesting ideas, but we all have to start somewhere.
I WILL ASK AROUND!!! 
id rather read something about straight ones honestly.
At first I thought:
"TAW with no clop? Not part of the norm, but Unchangeable is good, let's read!"
During I was all:
"Man, I love ships"
"Twilestia is my OTP"
"So. Many. Gigglefits."
After, I feel:
"Must have more!"
"Clop would be neat, but not absolutely necessary."
"Yup. TAW still rocks my socks."
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Luckily, no one cares what you think about straight ponies and lesbians if they're reading a Twilestia shipfic. Also, mentioning the hub (who only air MLP, and have little to nothing to do with its creation), though I suppose you mean Hasbro, is pointless. No author EVER writes based on what they think Hasbro will allow into the show, it just kills creativity and makes their story seem like a sad attempt to get a job on the writing staff rather than writing for fun and their fans.
This out of the way...
TAW, this was fucking amazing. I want more. MORE. Twixie and Twiluna were my OTPs, once with a side of Twixiluna. But I think I might actually be falling in love with Twilestia now.
Which is odd that it's only happening now, as I'm an officer of the Solar Empire, and Celestia is my best pony. >_>
I switch between often, they seem to do so in the show as well. It makes sense to me that "person" is used too - they know lots of species, they'll need a word to describe just 'any' sapient being.
Awesome, thank you <3
I don't think we've ever gotten an official spelling, and most of the semi-trustable sources like the wiki are... well, the wiki uses both, for example, so highly untrustworthy. If we ever get confirmation one way or the other I'll go through and fix things, but until then I just hope that nobody thinks it should be spelled the other way too strongly! The 180 was very sloppy, I agree, it was meant to be a "Of course I'll get her to help, oh except that means that I'm driving Twilight even further away from me" kind of thing, but rereading it that didn't come out at all. A shame.
And yes, I love emotions too - as backwards as it might seem that's why I actually ever started writing, because all of the clopfiction I was finding was just far too clinical and never focussed on what I was looking for - making ponies happy. I suppose things like this are the logical conclusion of that particular pathway. Maybe with a tad more drama and a tad less "oh everything just happened to fall into place perfectly" next time, but this was a test to see if people would like it, and apparently they do, so excellent.
Thanks for the words <3
Expect more words. I'm on chapter 3 now.
I totally agree with you on not enough emotional clop. So far, Bonds of Earth and Sky is the best one for actual closeness I've found. It'a amazing and good and I have read it way too many times. I like to think my own minor addition to pony clop was passonate, but I since I wrote it, it's really hard to read it without feeling really weird. I have no idea if you share that issue or not.
Be prepared for comments about how the ending needed to be longer.
I love epilogues that are epilogues and not just another chapter. The only thing I can really suggest here is to introduce and hammer on Luna's desire to do her royal duty a little more; make it an actual thread that needs to be resolved, albeit, a minor one. I see where you mentioned it, but it never felt like something that needed fixing, or rather, it seemed 'fixed' the moment Celestia gave Luna the reins for the night. If you could either reintroduce that minor conflict or have it seem less resolved, then this would be a perfect wrap up.
ps. I know I'm crazy, but the smile just because Twilight is coming to Canterlot is hotter than the kiss last chapter.
Faved (why did faves and tracks have to combine ) and thumbed and would recommend.
While I personally quite like the cloppy stuff this was certainly some good good good quality shipping and I love it.
Also the fact that it's Twilestia and I absolutely adore this shipping is helping, but that's beside the point!
Hmm yeah I'd go so far as to say it's better than most cloppy stuff (but don't stop writing that! It's good). Simply because while I like the sexy parts it just doesn't feel as good without a proper story backing it up. My only real gripe with this is that I wish it was longer, but that's because I liked reading it and want to read more but it's over and I should end probably end this sentence now.
Good job =)
Indeed, I've always really liked Celestia as a more vulnerable person, even if she's fantastic at hiding it around 99.9% of people. Makes for a much more interesting character, imo, and while I took it a little further than "a little vulnerable" I hope it worked out as managing to make her semi-realistically cute!
I've always had a love of the "different" things in fantasy universes - the things that separate them from us - so magic is something I love to put to use. I'll admit I might maybe make Twilight a little stronger than she should be, but I generally justify that with a quick "uh it's set after the show I guess" so she can be a little more practised.
I agree that that sentence is awkward - some of that was intentional, but the intent clearly didn't actually come out. It was somewhat meant to be Twilight justifying an out-of-character action to herself even though she hadn't actually realised why she'd done it yet. Your rewording makes a lot more sense, but I think loses that - not, apparently, that it had it in the first place, so I may go back and edit that anyway.
Yeah, I've never really liked most of the fandom "Something-lestia"s - but I thought that given that she seems to plan everything in the show, combined with the more vulnerable side here, might end up in a completely failed plan like that, so yeah. Luna, I have no excuse for, I just wanted somebody Celestia would respect enough to listen to who could do the heavy lifting in forcing her into things - she's not particularly close to the in-show Luna, but on the other hand we only saw her being awkward, not how she would be with family, so... there are worse crimes, I fear.
I was really worried about the letters coming off as that, too. Originally I think they were, too much writing and not enough content, but I cut it back to the basics like they were just really quickly written letters shot back and forth over a day or so, and I think it turned out pretty okay.
The "unable to stop" thing was actually the original idea of the piece, I think its focus got lost somewhere along the lines, but the idea of Celestia accidentally teaching Twilight exactly how to get her into bed (metaphorically speaking) is pretty adorable!
Yeah, I was in two minds about splitting the third chapter off at all, to be honest. It's not very long, but at the same time it's meant as a "hey everything worked out pretty okay in the end" kind of thing. Thinking about it, there's a lot I could have left open to make a sequel easier, and I probably should have - oh well, I guess. As it is, the epilogue doesn't really do much, I just didn't want to leave Celestia mad at Luna for something silly!
Yes, please. The world needs more Twilestia. I'm happy to report that your goal of writing a good romance story without smut was a success. The cuddles and hugs were a more than adequate substitute. :D
I really like how differently their relationship began here than in most stories. I think I read another comment desribe it as 'quiet'? That seems to fit rather well. It's a nice change of pace from the usual Twilestia fare (which isn't to say the usual fare isn't enjoyable :P).
This story was so heart warmingly adorable I was laughing and saying "aaawwww" far too much to be healthy.
My goodness TAW, you really showed you knew how to write awesome romance without clop with this one. No criticisms from me, it was beautiful. I actually wish it was a little more drawn out, but only because it was such a good story I never wanted to see it end.
The comedic element was also perfect. Between Twilight's character reactions, and the reasoning behind them, to Celestia letting her mane down, it was all just brilliant!
This was easily my favorite line/thought though:
"I don't think I can say no to her, Luna," Celestia admitted, her face slightly contorted with worry. "She knows all my secrets. She has pages and pages of notes on everything I like. I don't think she'd take no for an answer, Luna, and she'd win me over, I know it."
The imagery, the truth of the statement... it's just so accurate, and hilarious!
taw lets be frank here , all of your works are good.
your clop fics are awsomely detailed witch is awsome.
this on the oher hand...........WAS STUPENDOULSY GOOD i really really enjoyed reading it. this proves to me that you are without a doubt a very talented writer, clop fic wise and non clop, you flush out romances excellently. i shall suggest you keep writing good sir, cause yu sir are talented.
I have browsed your more... *cloppy* works for a while but this is the first time I've really wanted to comment. I've been reading this and your chrysalis x OC fic pretty much in tandem, and I'm inclined to think they're my favorites out of the rest of your work. Really good stuff, you do an excellent, down to earth Celestia (who is still believable as an immortal with an infinite amount of experience). That balance can be devilishly tricky to maintain. I'm also really liking your interpretation of Luna as the meddler/trickster, it may have been done before, but rarely this effectively. If anything, previous focus on clop has made you significantly better than most at framing two characters and building tension between them, which really shines here.
Oh, and thank you for not going the: "I thought we were just pretending to have a relationship and now that she confessed we have to revert and go through this over-extended will they won't / they phase to artificially pad the word count" route. Massive irritation averted 
Finally! I'd been hoping one of your "Because..." descriptions wouldn't result in the usual smut. Not that your writing was bad in the past, its just that I prefer this over clop. Twilestia/Twiluna wins me over every time. Good work, I would read more of this, no question.
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The romance was very sweet and fitting for both of them (this didn't address any of the grand issues between them, but nonetheless anybody who thinks they could never work out ought to read this). The humour was great, too. What sold this story for me, even more than the romance, is your brilliant characterization of a very normal, flawed (and believably so) Celestia. There were a number of times, particularly regarding Twilight trying not to be late, when I kept thinking "Why doesn't she/don't they just teleport?", but that didn't detract from the story.
I loved this story to pieces and now I'm going to browse your extensive repertoire for more Twilestia. If there's none to be found, please do us all a favour by writing more Twilestia.
Okay, finally read it earlier today (but in .html form so couldn't fave or comment) and I must say, while I, too, would enjoy seeing more straight shipping, this is just so adorable and well-written I just don't really care.
Excellent job TAW, I haven't read any of your clopfics (and I'm not sure if I will) but now I'm going to follow/watch you and read your other non-clopfic(s).
Like & Fave everypony, you don't even need to read it (though you really should) just do it.
Though, yeah, the last chapter's kinda short.
Oh, and your moustache: 
Edit: this fic made it really hard to watch the finale of the first season. I kept misinterpreting Twilight's and Celestia's looks.
Pardon me, please, but I beg to differ (very politely ) on the usage of the word "practise", since it should more properly be spelled "practice" in that sentence, the straightforward usage there having been of the word as a noun and not as a verb. That aside, I agree: it was a very nice story, and I only wish it would have gone on longer.
I read this story knowing nothing about your 'reputation' (as according to these odd comments) so I was lucky to read it with absolutely no preconceptions or predjudice, which I am damned grateful for, as this was one hell of a good story! Very well written in my opinion, it flowed well and was very believable, I didn't once feel like anyone was miles out of character, as is the case in a lot of shipfics. Well done :) by the way, you aren't a kiwi are you?
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