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When Twilight Sparkle realizes that her time is soon to come, she writes a letter to Princess Celestia as her final thank you.
Reading: Reading of "The Final Letter" Provided by Slashawar.
That was really sad, I shouldn't have read it in school because I'm almost in tears. 
Just one thing though, was there a romance thing going on?
"I have always loved you, I always have. I love you more than a friend; I always wished that I could be your mare. Just as I knew we couldn't be together, I kept my feelings for you suppressed no matter how much it pained "
That was really odd, not even just because of the pairing but because it was out of nowhere and it didn't match the rest of the story as the rest of the story was heavily in-character.
Other than that, a great story. 
i was all geared up to critique the shit out of this. i looked at it and said, "ah, great, another "final letter" story". i enjoyed the idea a first couple times it grew old. ive seen so many since then that everything that people write has been done before, and done better. not to say that they are bad fics by any means. theyre not bad. what they are is average. expected. run-of-the-mill. but this one actually struck an emotional cord on me. thank you sir, for bring the life back to the "final letter" fics.
Oh man, I hate stories like this. They make me way too sad. 
The only story that could be more sad would be from Celestia's view point as Twilight is dying. It would be so sad to be immortal and love people. That is the exact reason why I would be fine as an immortal; I don't love anyone or anything (except this story ofc 
)
My heart bleeds for this story, no matter how many stories I read involving Twilight saying goodbye it feels as fresh as the first.
"Yours Truly" tore my heart to shreds, but your letter kept it short, bittersweet and reflective just as Twilight would be. I feel if this show ever ends; it's fan base drifting outward in time as all shows do I will find myself thinking of letters such as this, the letters our pony friends will only ever wish they could write as their lives are forgotten by those who love them.
If I can give you anything, it will be a thank you for making this. It may not be the the first but it truly was a touching letter.
v Hello everypony! Stalin and crew are here, bringing yet another installation of stalinview!... Althou not all crew present here today. PD, can you explain why Misha isn't here again?
*GROAN* uggg hoqw much i need to tell you?! He found his rubber ducky and now drinking for it's health! But where did he found it? I thought i hid it well... By "well" you mean frigging refrigirator? Anti-nuke machine, yes. BOSS! HOW COULD HE NOT FIND IT?! He's keeping vodka in it! But i hid it behind the vodka! Urggh boss... Why are you so stupid sometimes..? A-anyway, let's get back to our stalinview. Today we have a particullary interesting story to look at. Let's dig into "The Final Letter" By the way, is this name reminds about Aviator's "One Last Letter" only to me?Let's find out! Ooh, from very second paragraph i can ALREADY say that this concept is very interesting. Yeah... Althou we can't possibly make fun of this story in any way. Wait for overview."Ever since Spike left"
Aren't dragons suppose to live longer than ponies? I thought they live for hundreds or even thousands yesars. Besides, Spike is MUCH younger than Twilight.OVERVIEW:
This is... hard story for us to review. I don't know how to even put this: it's too good and too serious to make fun of. It's emotion-investing and really sad.I don't really think you asked stalinview for the right story. There is no flaws. There is no possible jokes we could make. This story is flawless. And thing you reading now IS NOT a proper stalinview. Better tell me another story i CAN make a Stalinview on.
VERDICT: Those two guys who pressed "thumb down" are morons.
Great stuff, is all I can say. All right, maybe I can say more. Well written, good story, can't even tell if it's happy or sad because it's both at the same time, and that's something I call beauty, well, when it's combined as well as it is here. The calm, relaxed, happy feeling is beautiful, the sadness of the basic idea is beautiful, though I can't say the story itself is sad. Anyway, the successful combination is especially beautiful. I just killed the word 'beautiful' through overuse, didn't I? Happy 
to me. And yeah, the thing with the afterlife was a nice touch.
The only criticism I have is that a lot of the letter repeated itself. The last 4 paragraphs of her letter had a lot of the same stuff in them. Idk. Still a great story. 
>>546390 I know it may be somewhat repetitive, but when i was writing it felt... right if you know what I mean. I think that Ch2 could have easily been published as its own fic, but I kinda think it fits better in this story. Do you think I should delete Ch2, and post it as its own fic or keep it as it is?
>>548000 I was at work, and was thinking about the first part of this fic, and how it could be expanded even though it was meant to be a 1 shot. I got to thinking... and then I was all, end with smile, smile, smile, it makes it happy. Thus, the second part was born!
That was... beautiful.
Alright, I'm going to start out by saying you've made an awesome improvment since I reviewed your first story. It's awesome to see a writer on this site that takes the criticism given to them and improves themselves based upon it.
Let's start with the stuff I think you need to work on and then work our way up.
Your grammar was pretty solid here and I'd be hard pressed to find a typo. However (I'm not sure if I've mentioned this to you before.), try to be a little more conservative with your commas. You'd be surprised how often I proofread and happen to find commas in the middle of sentences when they shouldn't be. Also, don't be afraid to make some of your sentences a bit choppy. You don't need every sentence to be a mile long. Sometimes more blunt statments are more effective at getting the emotion across.
The second chapter? This may be just me, but I don't really think you need it. You got your point across in the first chapter quite clearly. A lot of the time, less is more. One of the commentors mentioned that you were a bit repititious, so be careful not to go off on a ramble unless the rambling contributes to the story. Actually, everything should be contributing to the story in some way, but I digress.
But enough of that, what did I like?
The story was very sweet, and the relationship between Twilight and her friends was well done (Celestia was also fairly well done.). I could really feel the pain of her loss, and that is probably one of the most important things to convey in a story like this (Although I was a bit confused on how Twilight knew when everypony was dying. Shouldn't Rarity have known as well? And Celestia?). While I didn't shed "manly tears" (Not your fault, to this day only a rare collection of writings has made me cry. Oh, Five People You Meet in Heaven, why you so beautiful? ), the story did make me smile. In general, this was just a well-written work. Seriously. Keep it up. I giveth unto thee a thumbs up!
Wow... Just wow... The feelings that you can create with your writing... I could just picture the scene in my mind... Tears have been shed. And more tears will be shed. I know of fellow bronies who will love this. As much as I did. Great work on this piece...
I still say it - whoever once started with this heaven-idea, it's brilliant!
..Okay, to the story. Since I love sad fics and this one wasn't scrap, I love it.
Liked the idea that they are at full-consciousness whereever they are now, not because logic or something, but it supported the feelings very nice.
(What also means, that everything before that point followed a certain flow somewhere, what is clearly good.)
Some mistakes here and there, nothing fatal.
Hm, yea. Nice read!
My feels have been brutaly murdered.
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