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Celestia is unhappy, and who better than her sister to help with her woes? But when Luna is woefully unable to do so, and booze is added into the equation, the mess is left to the young maid who wanders in.
It's not as smutty as it sounds. In fact, it's not smutty at all.

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Good things first. The idea's funny, the story is sweet, and Drunk Celestia is best Celestia.

Now the bad.

The problem I have is, this story just goes too fast. We zip through everything without enough time to get a grip on the characters or their emotions. There's a great idea here, but it's just too poorly paced to be recommended. Having the sisters spend some time with their new Teddy Maid, perhaps mistaking her for an actual companion in their drunken stupor, would have made this fic even better.

That being said, it's not a bad fic by any means.

Guilty (Come Drink With Me) - Anarchy Club

What is with all the fics about the princesses getting totally shitfaced?

>now at its’ limit
You don't need that apostrophe.

That story didn't really go anywhere, I was surprised that you listed it as complete I'd figured this was just a first chapter.

Man, this fandom is turning poor Celestia into a total alcoholic

This is almost move for move the opening to "the Snit." Are you people all cribbing from the same notes or something? This is like the third or fourth time I've read a fanfic that could practically be riding another's rails this WEEK.

Make it a bit longer, and draw out the scenes a bit.

Apart from that, everything you wrote is perfect.:twilightsmile:

532321

Welcome to Summer. We have no more ponies for a few months, which means no more canon to work off of, which means a LOT of fics using the same ideas.

"That smell. A kind of smelly smell. A smelly smell that smelled… smelly. Anchovies."
Was that from Spongebob?

It felt very... rushed, to be honest. And even if it were written differently, this would probably seem more like the first chapter to a longer story than a story by itself.
still, I kinda liked it, and Luna's line line “Now STOP CRYING, WENCH,” made me lol far too hard.

532213
It's funny!

533326 haha yes! I was totally hoping someone would pick up on that.

Updated to be longer and more in-depth. Let me know what you think!

Luna has always struck as an angry drunk.

D'awwed so hard at the end

That smell. A kind of smelly smell. A smelly smell that smelled… smelly.
Anchovies.

Somehow, I mistook this for a Futurama reference at first; good thing I actually bothered to check, hah.

That was a fun romp, though I have to agree that it was over a bit too quickly.

I reviewed your story tonight you can find the review here

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