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...in love and war, as the old saying goes. Sometimes the line between them blurs; sometimes there can be no line at all. Even Princess Twilight and her closest companions will come to learn that they too can fall victim to such unpredictable emotions. Just how far will things go before their friendship is torn apart?
Special thanks to the wonderfully-bearded lumberjack for editing.
Rated Teen/Sex for implied sex. Nothing will be graphic.
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Mah gawd. He's back
5564375 Like this? Sorry, I couldn't resist.
The 2:4 ratio is perplexing. I have read a couple of your fics, and the quality was definitely excellent, so as to why this one should have received four downvotes already puzzles me. I shall have to give this fic a read.
Considering the vote ratios for your previous works, and the quality of the two stories of yours I have read, it makes me wonder if you were the victim of someone on a rage downvote spree, for some reason.
5564574 Its possible. I noticed in the new story list that most were, like 0/1/2 ups and more downs. Maybe the fact that it's not later in the day for once is working against me. I know that my previous fic I'd post new chapters in the morning since it got its attention then, even enough to get the lower featured box.
Plus, this is only the first chapter and there will be a lot of little things going on, some of which people may miss. But that's intentional with what I'm going to do with this story. Maybe some folks just don't like subtlety at all. *shrug*. Do hope you enjoy the story either way!
Is this romance based on chasing spike or big Mac?
5564622 Both will eventually be involved. No, not with each other.
So, between 4 and 5? YOU ALREADY KNOW WHAT HAPPENS IN FIVE!!!! ILLOOMINAUGHTY!
5568160 Ooooh shit! And I forgot my tin foil hat!
5568191 No! it's not your tin foil hat! you stole Bucking Nonsense's tin foil hat!
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honestly, this seems a bit rushed. a little backstory would do us some good, you can't just fucing throw this into our faces. it seems like you were sitting at your computer an you were just like "OMG I WANNA MAKE SOME SPIE PONIES!" and you decided to make a story for it. actually, is the romance tag ever gonna be used in this story?
5639556 It will. Contrary to what you said here, it isn't just because I want to see 'spy ponies'. There is a reason for what's going on. This one will probably require some patience, I will admit. I'd like to believe that when it's said and done, people will appreciate what all happened. Got a little while to go though, but I appreciate your input.
Ooh, intrigue! Sounds like somepony's setting up some dominoes to fall.
In contrast to the previous commenter, I would like to say that I found this perfectly paced. We're getting small glimpses of the presumed antagonists and picking up clues as to their motivations, as well as watching them try to assemble a grand strategy of... well, we don't know yet, but my best guess is "social and emotional assassination".
And as it's only chapter two, I can forgive the lack of ponies making out so far.
Woah. That was a real surprise... Spike just got a variant of raped it seems, these villans sink lower and lower.
Wow. Somebody maxed out their Bluff skill.
Props to that changeling, that was a damn good impersonation. I suspected she was a fake as soon as she kissed him (Spike is never that lucky), but I couldn't be sure until the end. Passing for a pony is one thing, but fooling intimate acquaintances and getting them to help you break into your target's house takes moxie.
Upgraded from tracking to faved :D
Well this sounds fun! *evil laugh*
I see that changeling got over its initial disgust at having to sex up a miniature reptile.
And now Spike is hooked and Twilight is super mad at him. Phase one is complete! Or phase two? Meh, whatever.
Can't wait to see what else these creeps have planned! :D
Sparity is awesome
just wish it didn't happened under some mind-cotrolling spell...
5963479 Make sure there's some butter on the popcorn. I'd want to watch that too.
Thoroughly enjoying this. Keep going!
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Oh yeah the web you weave little word spider. . .
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After the 'break up' they make up?
6431931 Just gonna have to wait and see! Still quite a bit to go before we're all done.
6432000 you've made one heck of a roller coaster!
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6432139 Danke, sir/madam!
And holy crap, poor Spike, haha! Needs to learn to bluff better.
Stupid dragon biology and its disconnection from temporal growth.
You'd think a simple question like "when does a dragon become sexually mature" wouldn't be such a mystery to a species with 1000+ years of history dealing with them.
Hang in there, Twilight. Don't cut the lizard loose. This is just what THEY want!
You see this? This is what I'm talking about. Celestia's known dragons for thousands of years and apparently even nabbed some eggs for her students to zap with magic, but doesn't know about their aging process? Cripes, mare, did you think this would never come up?
Interesting to see that apparently batponies can identify changelings, but none of the alicorn Princesses can... even while the changeling is shouting at them uncharacteristically.
Oh well. Onwards with the evil plot! I hope Big Mac gets some solid chapter time soon.
Man, it kind of feels like the changelings dropped the ball, here. It's going to be REALLY obvious something's wrong when Rarity informs everypony that she'd been gone until just that evening.
... Unless she never talks to them or they just end up dancing around the issue or just keep acting confused and angry all the time.
Come on, girls. You all know that shape-changers, mind control, and personality-shift magic exist. Don't default to "she's acting like a jerk for no reason."
Aaaaand they just blow off her claim that she'd been gone the whole time, and her extremely conspicuous change in attitude. Huh. Okay, then.
But now the changeling totally got a whiff of Mac's crush! This is going to be SWEET... and emotionally devastating. I can't wait!
Oh poop!
That's a red flag Fluttershy.
Damn, these changelings are SMOOTH.
And meanwhile, Mac is slaving away on the farm, oblivious and lonely. *Sigh* What cruelty!
ouch
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Oh, the tragedy! The pain! The drama!
Heh. This is fun.
Seriously, though, I'm pretty sure SOMEPONY has to figure that something sketchy is going on, here. Between Fluttershy having a relationship and confrontation that he doesn't remember - and an alibi which can be confirmed by his family - and Rarity's stringing Spike along while she wasn't even in town, I feel like we should have a Rarity/Apple alliance getting to the bottom of this.
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Man, Loyalty sure can be a drag sometimes, huh Dash?
Heh. I do get a kick of Rainbow trying to be the sensible one helping to reconcile all of her friends' new grudges. It really speaks to her character's weaknesses.
As for poor Fluttershy, she was taken advantage of and had her friendship - and probably her chance with the real Mac - ruined, but hey, at least the sex was good.
WELL DONE the conflict grows
Poor Pinkie. She is trying so hard and is not getting anywhere. Maybe she should hang out with some more friends like Dash to just feel good for a little bit?
Am going to take a shot in the dark and say the changeling's plan is going to fall apart when the postcard from the Belle's parents comes and have a picture of Rarity at Mainatten.
Don't feel bad about the Rarity thing, Twilight. Sex and betrayal are pretty far outside your "friendship" specialty.
A much more serious problem with your supposed "friendship" specialty is that you either haven't noticed that one of your friends has been physically injured by another good friend, or that you have heard of it and haven't looked into that at all. I mean, Applejack sporting a limp has to have raised some eyebrows in town, and even if Applejack wanted to keep Fluttershy's assault a secret (and she didn't give that impression), Rainbow Dash probably isn't so prudent.
I've mentioned this before, but these changelings are being REALLY suspicious.
CRITICAL MASS
Shit is just about to go down
Really, Twilight? Not even going to ask "So, hey, sorry that everypony bailed. What did you need us for, again?"
Not like lives could possibly hang in the balance or anything, right? Geez. Some Princess.
When you say implied sex and innuendo, do you mean gay sex? I'm not complaining, just asking.
7131829 No, just that there won't be any clop-type or graphic material.
this is so good
why don't you remember my lessons?
you're a bad teacher?
AARGH Cliffhangers!! So tense!
Really, it's amazing the con job held together as long as it did.
Good on Rarity for actually getting a clue though, and good on Twilight for not stomping all over it because she was mad.
A giant purple hand slammed down from the sky Squishing the Queen bug well like a bug as a booming voice rang out "MINE!"