Vinyl Scratch has finally reached fame, overcoming the struggles caused by her blindness, and became the DJ Pon3. Ponies love her music and she is a model to any who has struggles in their own life. But when she sets out to change a life on a more personal basis, will the challenge be too much?
it's finnaly out
Altoid, if your reading this, i asked if i could be a prereader before you asked it in that one blog you wrote about you not having TB, im still expecting a yay or neigh you know....
Also, you made an error spelling unicorn at the end, like last couple of lines, spelled it as unicron :P
Wait, 50 likes? How do these stories not get the attention they deserve?
The concept is both new and interesting and the story is presented in a compelling way. I will admit I let this one sit on the "Read Later" list so long I had forgotten "Puff Tart" was the daughter and not the former operator. But I was only putting it off in hopes that it would be finished so I would not have to bare a painful wait. (≥5 Minuets is considered painful with a story of this caliber)
Still, so far love it as much or more then the original and I can't wait until you get a chance to write some more.
P.S
Also, wheres Ditzy? I remember the previous story ending with a promise to help her. Don't tell me Scratch forgot....
Huzzah update!
Also, first try at grammatical criticism so bare with me. But the exchange between Vinyl and Anne at the end its not clear that Anne is thinking. I re-read the line like four times before continuing because I could not believe her first words in the story after so much buildup were so nonchalant.
But yeah great as always, literally can't wait for more!
C'Mon River, Say Yes ! Or else I Dunno if you would Have a second chance to be adopted , bceause ponies in Equestria aren't all open-minded.
Let me guess how does she look like --->
Q: Is there TaviScratch shipping?
If A=Yes, then will read.
Otherwise might read anyways.
I always wanted to live in an (ADVERB) house. :P
Might want to finish filling that one in.
Other then that another great chapter to one of my favorite stories, the bit with Mic seems a bit rushed and just why in the nine hells can't sh brink River along? I mean sure its probably not the best place for a kid but still the whole "Oh I am here to adopt you, nope now I gotta leave you alone again for months." has got to be worse.
Just finished reading through all the chapters so far.
Can't say I'm confused at all. I can sense that its built on another story, but might aswell stand on its own. That's a mistake I've seen a couple authors do; when writing sequels (or connected stories in general). Underestimating the readers. The story is well written enough to grasp without the need for background reading.
>>1253434 Yeah... I couldn't think of a word so I left it like that so I could change it later but I had to go to work and I forgot all about it. Halfway through the day I remembered so it bugged me the whole time. The word I was looking for was temporary. It's strange that I couldn't remember that.
"...Maxim asked the filly who had been fiddling uncomfortably with her empty class."
glass
"saying apologetic goodby to the cooks"
an apologetic goodbye
"...owns me due to a contract that I signed when I wa first starting out"
was
You also said "the first paparazzi arrives", and the singular is paparazzo. Unless you meant "the first of the paparazzi arrives"
I noticed an lowercase "river" early on, too.
I love the concept of this story,and what you're doing with it.
Just a lot of little mistakes that detract from the overall quality.
One of the problems I have with the other version is that, as far as I can recall, it sort of comes out of nowhere. I don't think the previous story had such dark elements in it neither. I could be wrong, but I don't care for that kind of stuff. And its really annoying when a story you enjoy just suddenly goes down a completely different path, using elements that you had no warning where coming. In my opinion, if you suddenly have to add a tag halfway through the story, you are doing it wrong. Use all the tags you think you need at the beginning of the story, and don't change that.
Story wise, I aso struggle a bit with it. Vinyl has connections and a very wealthy adoptive father. Of course River is important to her, and that probably i only going to be more so. And of course she has her pride. But would she sell her body for that? She has options, she doesn't need to. It makes much more sense for her to tell Mic to stuff it and seek out others to help her, then to give in to Mic in this situation. But that's my two cents.
This one is better in my opinion, mostly because it doesn't get me "riled up" (something that is very rare from 'fics), but the ending of this chapter also allows for more possibilities. I like this one better.
Still don't like that agent but, well, you saw my other comment.
I Have A BB Gun Of 450 Fps And Loaded With Some Copper Bullets, Wanna Use It??
By the way, it is tachnically possible to make bling people see with a camera/sensor and a little "pod" micro-electric signals to the brain, bby wearing this "thing' like a bluetooth device...
* Source from Youtube.com/altime10s , one of his videos called : Top Ten Futuristic technologies that alredy exists.
Excellent. Usually these kind of scenes have at least one big plot-hole or some reason why it either wouldn't work or it would have severe negative consequences. However, since Vinyl tells her story to an interviewer for a big magazine in a public location, I've got nothing. Maybe someone else can point out stuff, I don't. I can just gloat at Mic getting his comeuppance.
“Sapphire Shore canceled her interview with Pony Magazine so they bumped your’s forward!
Pretty sure it is 'Shores' .... and you shouldn't have the apostrophe on yours. It is incorrect to ever have an apostrophe on yours.
Here, I found a quick article on it so you don't have to take my word for it: Yours vs Your's
...That's all I saw before I got enraptured in the chapter! Good work, give us moar! 
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(This look's like a wnoderful story to read!) 
/ but it was a very nice story ive readed) Thank You! 
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Well it was a good chapter. This story is SOOOO under-read.
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