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One year ago, Spike narrowly avoided an incident with Applejack, but not without unintended consequences. Also, something dark festers in Canterlot that will change his life forever. As new relationships bloom and old ones are dragged into light, he will have to make a choice that could decide the fate of Equestria!
I thought this was very well done. It was innocent, well written, charming and everything feels very much in character.
I say one more thing about this it felt like Spike was going to go all Rhett Butler on Rarity and say, "frankly my dear, I don't give a damn."
What's with Granny Smith calling Spike a griffon, is it supposed to be a Rocko's Modern Life reference? If is then you are full of win, and if not I'm just over analyzing shit. Kudos anyway dude,
I like how you left it partially open ended.
Based off the comments from Fanfiction,net, people like this idea as well and want MOAR!!!
I wrote this little story back in late August, shortly after I became a Brony. Dog and Pony Show was the first episode I watched, hence the inspiration.
Took a few hours before school started, but I finished it in a few sessions over a few days. Like I said, it was an inspired story.
Thank you for your interest!
This is like the *BAM* ultimate what if scenario. YOU'RE LIKE I'M PAIRING THE BEST PONY AJ WITH THE FUCKING DRAGON AND SPIKE'S LIKE FUCK YOU RARITY, I DON'T NEED YOU, I GOT SOUTHERN COMFORT OUTSIDE THE BOTTLE BITCH*BOO-YAH, KARATE CHOPS A GOD DAMN TABLE IN HALF.*
Well.... that was not the twist I was expecting... damn I may given thought to who Applejack's mother is or Fluttershy's uncle but never to Spike parents. Oh well, the separation to me may have been too clean but it does show that Spike and AJ are grown up an understand that one must make the hard decisions. ~Celestia's Paladin
This is the problem with fan fiction, because it's not catering to main stream masses doesn't have to have a happy feel good ending much like Japanese Horror. We are at the mercy of an omnipotent author who can make it as depressing as they please. I'm still hoping for that Don Bluth story arc. Goes from upbeat, then crashes at 200 mph in to extreme sadness then at the third act brings us back to the Shire with a happy triumphant ending. This story is still well done but I expect some will give up on it because of the depressing turn of events despite the authors notes.
Hoping for that Disney ending*fingers crossed*
Peace Out.
Ouch. I think my heart just broke. Anyways, I loved the original story and was surprised when you revised it to create a multi-chapter story. While I had some doubts about changing such a well encapsulated story, I can honestly say that you integrated the new storyline seamlessly. However, although I do enjoy the story, I can't help but view AJ as kind of a cradle-robber. I don't suppose that there is any way you could use some fancy wording to make it so that Spike is actually older than he seems? I actually have a few ideas on the matter, so if you need some help with that, feel free to message me. Otherwise, keep up the good work!
Now, this is a story all about how
My life got flipped-turned upside down
And I'd like to take a minute
Just sit right there
I'll tell you how I became the prince of a place called Draconia
In west Equestria born and raised
In the Ponyvile was where I spent most of my days
Chillin' out maxin' relaxin' all cool
And all shoo'n some parisprites outside of the town
When my mom and dad
Who were up to no good
Startin making trouble in my neigh-borhood
when twilight came back, she got real sad
And said 'You're movin' in with your mommy and daddy in Draconia
It was a tad predictable, but fantastical none the less. If I were to predict the rest I'd say the Mum and Dad dragon hear of Spike's relationship and decide to let him stay; so I challenge you to surprise me (don't just make Spike go with his parents and leave everyone, that's boring)!!
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