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  • T The Campus Is Burning

    A continuation of Anarchy In The Equestrian Nation that follows the exploits of Union Jack and a new cast of friends in freshman year at Seaddle University.
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  • T Paycheck

    Five "thieves" plan the biggest heist in history: The printing plates of Canterlot's Roy
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  • 4w, 1d
    Follower Roll Call?

    Which among you are still here? I'm not getting any responses on my blog posts... Guess it's just time to bail.

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  • 9w, 4d
    Back On My Feet

    So, I'm going to assume all of you have been waiting for the longest time to know how I've been doing. The answer is: Extremely well. I've just gone to a local concert and seen a few amazing bands (also moshed for the first time, lifted people into crowdsurfing, crowdsurfed, etc), and my stress is as low as ever. So, I'm writing to inform you that two things are going on.

    One - I'm continuing The Campus Is Burning.

    Two - I'm reworking Anarchy in the Equestrian Nation into its own full-fledged original story, with its own setting and several plot reworkings. Also, it's humanized. But anyway, yeah.

    Have a local band from near my area:

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  • 16w, 1d
    Things Have Happened

    I'm sorry that I haven't updated The Campus Is Burning, but things have gone horribly, horribly wrong lately. One, I've been hit with a lot of REAL LIFE and that scares me, and two, my anxiety and depression have been getting out of hand lately. I've had some respites (Warped Tour, will add photos later), but a lot has gone badly.

    I have to admit something to my followers. In the past three months, I've attempted suicide twice, neither time has worked (obviously) and I haven't been able to really get my writing spirit in gear. I promise I'll try and get everything on track ASAP. For now, you'll have to wait, since I don't have a computer of my own (I'm writing this from the public library, though I'm building my own PC on Tuesday now that the parts I ordered came in) after both house laptops died and my old desktop had a meltdown (literally, the heat sink melted), I have a job (frycook and dishwasher), and I've got an exercise schedule going. So, thank all of you for being patient (if you haven't forgotten entirely).

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  • 38w, 4d
    Well, there goes hope.

    like these, blacklist #vent)

    So, I've been gearing up to move out of my small town, one that has nothing to do, and a bad reputation from elementary and middle school here basically makes me a social pariah in this town. My friends lost literally all their other friends except me and each other because they hang out with me.

    My mother told me last night that, more likely than not, we’re not moving. She claims moving out of this town will be detrimental to my mental health, but what she doesn't get is that staying here is going to drive me to the point of suicide. When I have nothing to do, I get bored. When I get bored, I get depressed, and when I get depressed, I get suicidal. Either she knows and wants to get rid of me, or she doesn't know and doesn't realize that if I’m here for much longer she’ll be short a son.

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  • 45w, 6d
    Busy.

    Sorry I haven't been on in a while, a lot of things happened, are happening, and will happen, so I don't have a whole lot of time left to devote to writing anymore.

    First item on the list - My life has gone a bit downhill. My anxiety is ratcheting up, won't stop going up, and is tearing me apart. I actually snapped a couple of weeks ago, and when I snap I basically just collapse onto my bed and cry for a good half hour or so. Second, the bullying has picked up again. Big time. Not physical (yet) but a lot of verbal and a lot of psychological. Third, I can't stop worrying. I have a number of friends with suicidal tendencies, so I spend most of my nights awake (as if I didn't already) worrying about if they're alive or dead. Fourth, I've found I have sleep apnea, which means I can't get REM sleep, and my body jolts me out of it if I enter REM, so I apparently haven't truly slept in years. Fifth, I've kind of lapsed into some problems with addiction. I'm not drinking or doing drugs, but I'm smoking, and I thought that helped but now it doesn't and I can't stop. I almost became addicted to self harm but I cut myself (ha) off of that before I did.

    Second item on the list - A few firsts have occurred. First actual concert (went to see Streetlight Manifesto), first successful baking attempt (baked a cake for my teacher's birthday), first time working with a charity (worked with Emmanuel Fellowship, a local church, to help feed the homeless on Thanksgiving. Side note, they were the only church that would let me volunteer, as the rest of the churches in this town turned me down for being atheist.), and first time protesting (protested Black Friday outside the parking lot of a Wal-Mart, got arrested for "disturbing the peace", was let off with a warning).

    Final item on the list - I'm sorry. I'm sorry for not having updated in so long, for dragging you guys on for months without updates, and I swear I'm working on TCIB as fast as I can. I have big plans for this story, and I can only hope you guys won't hate it, or won't hate me.

    Peace out, chummers.

    -Jacob

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Union Jack isn't your typical teenager. His cutie mark is a goddamned petrol bomb, for Celestia's sake! This doesn't stop him from transferring from his old delinquent school to Ponyville High in hopes of a second chance. However, as he will find, even his trademark gas mask won't save him from the noxious fumes of high school drama.

Cover art by the amazing Liixa of Gaia Online.

Now has a sequel, The Campus Is Burning!

First Published
2nd May 2012
Last Modified
18th Sep 2013
#1 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

DEAR GOD MAN SMALLER PARAGRAPHS

also a new paragraph any time a new pony talks

#3 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532008 Whoa. It's you. I've seen you on stories before.

That aside, I'm still starting off. I don't really know much about paragraph structure. In most of my writings, the paragraphs blend together.

#4 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532022 and that is why i offered help and yes i am on allot of stories i love reading and i love ponies so you can guess what happens next ANYWAY smaller paragraphs they can be the same idea as previous and future paragraphs but they should be more focused on a single thought.  The starting a new paragraphs when a new pony speaks makes it easier to tell who is talking also.  Good luck and Tracked

#5 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532038 Thank you good sir.

#6 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532054 just trying to help

#7 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

my eyes are bleeding

#8 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532215 Too much paragraph, I know. I'll tone down the paragraph size in future chapters.

#9 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

  Right, like diabolic said, anytime you introduce a new thought or concept into the fray, you make a new paragraph.

  for example, if I had a paragraph structured to be an example to help you understand, it would go here. wait...

  "Nice try bro, but you forgot to mention that anytime a new character speaks you make a new paragraph" the mysterious gray blot paused. "Oh, and as long as it's the same character speaking, you can stay in the same paragraph".

  And finally ending my rant before I say how totally awesome this is, you have to capitalize letters that start a text.

"Like this."

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  And ending, I would like to say that I LOVE this and will be watching it. Like a stalker. You have been warned.

#10 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

ANARCHYYYYY!

And ponies.

And dubstep.

Now I'm gonna read it.

#11 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532225

Actually some fucker stabbed me in the eyeholes.but you're right those paragraphs are long.like my dick.

#12 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532233 Thank you so much. You have no idea how much constructive criticism means to me.

#13 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532237 Where did Dubstep get mentioned?

#14 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532251

see its funny because-*gets stabbed again*

Fuck!

#16 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532299 Fine, have it your way.

When did dubstep get mentioned?

#17 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532256

Also.

1.) Putting the word 'anarchists' into this context gives us the impression that it is a society, a brotherhood, which would be okay... if 'unity' wasn't the antonym of 'anarchy'.

2.) Anarchists and punks don't have good relationships with their parents and they sure as hell aren't optimistic. Ever seen Deep London art? Mm.

3.) Dubstep originated after the punk movement was undertaken by the garage movement, where grime and drum n' bass led us ultimately to dub, later dubstep. Dubstep then divided into spinoff genres of brostep (Skrillex), softcore (Flux Pavilion), and hardstyle (no artist comes to mind).

Basically, this story should be darker and more in-depth. Since it's evident that you didn't live the lifestyle, I encourage you to listen to the Gorillaz, research British punk art, and research anarchy and disestablishmentarianism itself.

Sources:

Deviant Subculture entry #89 - the Anarchists and Rebels of the late 80's, Europe

Early 90's Graffiti and Anarchist Art

Anarchist Lifestyles

#18 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

*Dubstep has roots in punk rock and grime.

#19 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

loving this, keep up the good work.

#20 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532339

Thank you for the constructive criticism. I'll start a little more research. and take the suggestions to heart. It always means a lot to me.

To answer the first, Union Jack is the only "anarchist" in the Outcasts, and he acts as sort of a Sixth Ranger. To put it in the words of the story, the Outcasts are a "bunch of ponies that were mismatched: A couple of punks here, a Goth there, a couple dressed in Victorian style clothing..." "...and what looked to be an otaku" They're not anarchists, they're misfits.

To answer the second and the third in one fell swoop, it's MLP. I tried to keep it as light as possible. I didn't want the story to descend into Grimdark territory. Like I said, I'll take your suggestions to heart.

I'll probably add a chapter where Union Jack discovers the actual connotations of the term 'anarchist' and learns that he isn't one.

#21 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>532380

The point of that is that anarchy is total individualism. You wouldn't call them goths or emos, and you certainly wouldn't give a name to their motley crew. It's a loss of establishment.

#22 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Chapter Two: Day Zero ·

>>533032 I worked around that. I eliminated any references to anarchists in the story and just had Union Jack be a punk. Problem solved right?

LOL another good chapter

Next chapter ple- wait, why am I being polite? NEXT CHAPTER CELESTIA DAMMIT! Also, I love the story.:scootangel:

>>541177 I'm kind of juggling this and two other fics (My Little Bloodforge and A Story In Which There is Knights, Romance and Hilarity, the latter of which is on hiatus) so I'm having a hard time managing.

LOL i cant wait

VIVA LA REVOLUCION

Damn the two people who gave this thumbs down.:scootangel:

>>545171 It's nice to know someone likes this story that much.

Yep. I can totally relate to him. I made a bomb once and destroyed an old tractor trailer. True story.:pinkiecrazy:

>>545248 Whoa. You get eleven out of ten mustaches. :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

SO we have a bipolar arsonist who is very good at basically destroying a country

dear god

>>554036 Not quite good at it. He failed at destroying La Cienaga. Arsonist, also not so much. He was before, but he's mellowed out.

But basically, everything you just said.

The description for this story is very apt when it said that Union Jack isn't your typical teenager.

Yay! New chapter!

#35 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

dont let blackwing see this :rainbowlaugh:

#36 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

>>655631 Ha ha! I got his permission first. Besides, it outright states in the description of Griffin the Griffin that he's rude and sarcastic.

#37 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

>>655644 lol ya but you can say stuff about yourself and be ok but when others say it you think them mean

#38 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

>>655653 Like I said, I got his permission.

#39 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

>>655660 :facehoof: i know i was just...nvm

#40 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

Characters don't need flaws to be compelling. They can just be downright F*cking stupid, which for the record is NOT necessarily a flaw.

#41 · 125w, 2d ago · · · Chapter Six: Motivation ·

>>655672 Well, I was always taught that a compelling character has both good and bad qualities. Thank you for pointing out that a good character does not always need flaws.

you ended the chapter perfectly fine. at least you ended it better than i could. alot better. keep up with the awesome chapters :moustache:

>>702960 Thank you. I haven't gotten any comments since Ch 6, so it was nice to see at least someone was reading.

>>703018  Thanks and you can expect i will still be reading this until its complete. you can bet on that! anyway i hope you have a nice day/week

What chapter did Bell cheat on Jack i dont remember it =(

>>706009 i mean what chapter did he see her do it

>>706078 Between chapters 11 and 12.

Man, I have stayed away from this fic far too long. :rainbowwild:

Damn. Wish I was that lucky. Great story so far!

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