Middle English is Fun English. Don't know how to spell something? Make it up! If you can make a reader go 'seems legit,' you're good.

However, as Luna is still using somewhat modern spelling for most of the shorter words, it's probable that a professional Linguist would still consider this Early Modern English. Late Middle English at best.

What I put into the Magic Google Translate for Luna's signiture was "May you rest well. Lady-Princess Luna, Dictator of the Beautiful Night." When I put what that gave me back in to reconvert to English, it comes out "May you rest well. The lady-moon, the dictator Beautiful Night." Not to bad. could be worse.

AND BEFORE ANY FANS GRIPE: Dictator was originally the Roman term for an Absolute Ruler, and bore no negative connotations. Since it was often given in times of termoil to Cincinatus types who willingly gave up power after about a year (ten if times were especially bad), it was often considered a GOOD title for one's ruler to have.

Then we got a punch of douchebags who used and abused the title and so messed it up forever. FOREEVERR!!

Don't be surprised if the Table of Contents change. It will all depend on whether or not I can think of enough information to justify being its own chapter. Expect a lot of stuff to be yanked from my butt, with plenty of fanon and headcanon in regards to the founders.

I know that it says "Brief" History. But remember: This is Twilight who is at the head of the project. Brevity and Twilight Sparkle do not mix.

Now then, as you can see, after Discord I intend to have Equestria be similar to Pre-Unification Germany: Lots and lots and lots of small statelets with a shared history, culture and ethnicity, but each quite different from the others. However, I don't have a very large list of different Pony Nation ideas. Perhaps you can help? If you can come up with a Pre-Unification pony nation that 1) Is a major shout out to a real life nation, 2) Has a suffitiently clever pony-pun, 3) a brief summary of the culture and its history, I'll consider adding it to the list. Please list your ideas in the comments for this chapter, so that we can all see your work in one place. Also, Read the list and other comments before adding your own. Here's what I have:

Canterlot (Surprisingly yes, Blueblood actually has real and tenable political power [be afraid]. But it's stupedly weak as the seat of the Federal Government [Celestia/Luna] is also there)

Neighpon (Pre-Meji Restoration Japan)

Prance (France)

Stalliongrad (Russia)

Trottingham (England)

Lyrland (Ireland)

Trotaly (Italy [Hi Cadence!])

Manehattan (Manhattan)

Sounds interesting. I shall have to read this later.

Not quite middle English, but close enough that I could read it all and then speak it in a middle english accent (which is best accent )

Quite interesting.

I'm impressed, I thought I would've been the only one to try and write a History of Equestria!  Good luck to to you!

Okay, following. Ambitious-sounding too!

It's like a bizarre collision between Middle English, 'in the future, spelling will be standardized' sci-fi jargon, and an unidentified Eastern European accent.

Excellent 'ye olde English' there.

Okay, makes sense there.

You're overthinking things.

KEEP DOING IT! It makes me !

Are you going to be changing each piece of the table of contents into a hyperlink once they're completed?

Æthelric is a real Anglo-Saxon name. It means "noble ruler." Now, I can't say just how noble my Æthelric is, but he is certainly entitled to that name as he is a "ruler of nobles." *rimshot* As you can tell, I thoroughly enjoyed my "History of the English Language" class. Linguistically, English is a total whore. Anyway, I originally thought I'd model the founding of the Kingdom after King Arthur. Then I realized that I'd need a Merlin, and I already have a Merlin, but he won't be born for quite some time. So I settled on it being founded by a mass power-play. On one hand the first King is a real dingleberry. On the other, a large part of his motivation is to prevent a destructive and bloody series of wars, so he can't be all that bad, right?

For the origins of the Nobility, I figured that the size of their wealth and their mine(s) would be the the best indicator of how much power they have. After all, Unicorns the Shiny not just because it's shiny, but it holds magic (or can, the pressence of Magitech in modern equestria suggests so), and Magical Items need to come from somewhere right? And where'd these 'armies' mentioned above come from? That'll have to wait until the Culture/Economy chapters.

In case you didn't catch it, the story of Celest and Silus is pretty much a total copy and paste of the general story of Romulus and Remus, the founders of Rome. Yeah yeah I know: Not Greek. But considering how much the Romans stole from were inspired by, the Greeks, to the point where they're lumbed right in there together as "Classical," I think I can get away with it. And yeah, Stratocracy is a real form of a legit government. The more you know right?

Hyracotherium. It's a real thing. Well, it was. Long long ago. It is the earliest recognizable ancestor of the modern horse. It was about the size of your kitty. The Hyracotherium Republic is the earliest Equestrian government. It's totes legit.

So. Each of the Three Tribes were recognizably organized as such for 3000 years at least by the time of Hearth's Warming. And it took that long to reach Midieval level tech... Wait. No, considering that a thousand years before that they were foragers who underwent something like our Agricultural Revolution, that seems legit, nevermind. Plus, Isolationism is not conductive to progress.

My guess is, before the individual foundings, and before they got really big and moving, the river valley was a lot like a Fallout setting: Lots of unconsolidated city-states and independant towns and hamlets with locals loyal on the community level, but no real interest in the goings on beyond their boarders. That means that tribe-nations like the Junta and the Republic are like the NCR in New Vegas: relatively big and powerful, and tend to absorbe smaller and weaker states on the boarders.

Heck, there might be folk tales floating about of big-time heroes that did work for the area. Hmmm... Fallout: Pre-Equestria... I'd read it.

And of course, this glosses over the lost G1 era

Yes, I knew it about Celest and Silus! Excellent work here. This is... You've shown a lot of work in these chapters.

>>533734533734

I prefer the analogy that English doesn't 'borrow' words from other languages; it waits for the other languages in a dark alley, then jumps out and beats them up before going through their pockets for spare adverbs.

So we don't just get worldbuilding, we get inaccurate and fake worldbuilding alongside the 'real' bits. This, I like. (Especially the mention of those evil, evil griffins being added retroactively to the founding myths...)

This is very interesting looking forward to the rest.

This is off to a good start.

The Peagsi story sounded like the story of the birth of Rome, oddly enough Peagsus ponies in the play seemed to bring to mind the acient Greek city of Sparta a miltary empire.

Was that some kind of Friendship is witchcraft reference?

Personally, I prefer Bitaly as the Italy pun name.  I think it rolls off the tongue more easily than Trotaly.  

Also, I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the Hearts and Hooves Day story, and seeing how much evidence of the past actually survives Discord's reign of chaos.

Doctor Weird: It begins Muwahahaha!

>>530628530628

Speculation is what I live for. I'm actually interested in doing a Sociological study on Commander Hurricane's memetic status in-verse.

>>531027531027

You already have Hyperlinks. That's what the main page here is for.

>>533940533940

Well, I won't be doing what Striker is doing with She Returns. One, I don't know enough about G1 (and I'm not to thrilled about doing so), Two, it would be somewhat limiting in what I could and would want to do. That said, don't be surprised if you see some broad strokes refferences to G1. Just don't read to much into them. For example, just because Twilight's mom looks like Twilight Twinkle, doesn't mean she's the same pony.

>>533941533941

:MeGusta:

>>534123534123

Like I said, this is a history book. Not exactly the sort you'd find in a school, but something in the Non-Fiction section of your local bookstore.

>>535274535274

True, but the thing is that the Greeks aren't known for their iconic armor. What we usually think of as Greek Armor is actually Roman more often than not. And as I said earlier: The Romans stole so much from Greece that separating one from the other is an exercise in academic semantics.

>>579283579283

I wouldn't know, I've not watched more than a minute of a single episode, and it wasn't the one with Luna.

>>580234580234

Hmmm... Bitaly... I like it! Thanks!

As to Discord: Let's just say Timey-Wimey is in effect. And for Hearts and Hooves... I completely forgot about that. Oh well! Fortunatly I know a good in for it: Fractured Equestrian Bitaly! Cadence isn't amused by that bit of her family history.

>>583388583388

Someone else using Bitaly! Yes!  I wish I could take credit for it, or remember where I first saw it though.

And yeah, I'd bet that Discord had an effect on Equestria's history similar to the effect the Glass Clock had on Discworld's history, after the Time Monks finished cleaning up.

Hmm, you said on spacebattles we could use stuff from here, and I do have a Griffin Empire...

Great work, again. I wish I had more to say than that at the moment.

Yeah... I couldn't think of a way to effectively cover the Tribal Relations material that wouldn't be covered in other chapters of this pseudo-book. Therefore, anything you'd want to know will be covered elsewhere.

FIrst off, that paragon of masculinity: Commander Hurricane!

As the anecdote goes, at the naming ceremony for Twinkle, Platinum is believed to have told Clover “at long last, you can know the pain of screams echoing down the halls late into the night.”

So yeah, I don't really know how to convert Pony Years to Human Years, so I didn't even bother. So from here on out, when you see an age placed in relation to a pony, that's how old the pony would be if said pony was human.

Now for Hurricane. Obviously, he's a mix-and-match of different Historical Figures. First off: Julius Caeser (being banished from his home by a despot [Sullamander taking her name from Sulla, the warlord that more or less ruled Rome before the Triumphirate]). Next, both Ben Franklin (diseased after a diplomatic mission) and Ghangis Khan (having enough decendants to justify being called their own ethnic group). And some Andrew Jackson (his loyal love to his wife, the Hideaway/Hermitage).

Next up, Private Pansy!

*Remembers bio on spacebattles* This gonna be good! *Passes out popcorn*

Aw man, I wasn't expecting this to be so brief.

Please don't ever pull something like this on me again o.k.?

>>607718607718

Oh ye of little faith.

Nice biography on Commander Hurricane, intresting to know that early on he had so many INTRESTING relationships with his fellow Pegasi.

I never would've guessed that Private Pansy would be his own daugther, if the play is anything to go by he wasn't exactly the greatest father to her.

I love Hurricane. You made him so... deep. And a bit of a player, too.

Now that's very nice. A poorly researched pageant "X" years ago and Pansey goes from Rainbow Dash to Fluttershy.

>>652602652602

Less poorly researched play, more natural flanderization brought on by out-of-context comments, the need to simplify the events of the Warming, and the fact that pony society has evolved. Back during the Junta, a pegasus like Rainbow Dash would have been seen like we do Fluttershy.

Let's see if I can articulate that: Naturally, if RD was in Pansey's position during the Wyvrn attack, forced to choose between disobeying orders from above and killing a loved one, she's going to disobey. We saw this in Hurricane Fluttershy, glory was less important than getting the job done and making sure everypony was safe. In the Junta, this would have been seen as cowardly behavior (though understandable enough that not everyone would shun her).

Out of all of the Founders, Pansey is the most like the Disney Princesses/heroines of the Disney Rennessance: Something of a misfit, longing for something in their lives 'above the sea,' 'just around the riverbend,' 'in the great wide somewhere,' and out in 'a whole new world.' This makes Shield Skin as her cautious friend that both tries to rein her in and wishes her the best of luck. As such, allow me to offer this piece of music as her Character Song, because I love music dangit.

Which brings up this next little bit: As I was out knocking on doors (working as a door-to-door salesman in NJ this summer), an idea came to me. Make a musical based on the events of Hearth's Warming, that places Pansey right in the front and center as the heroine! Or at least make the soundtrack for it. Then at the next big Brony convention this musical can be put on for everyone to watch!

Who wants to make this ambitious dream a reality?

And yet again, another sweeping but plausible rewrite/expansion of the Hearth Warming cast and huge amounts of worldbuilding awesomeness.

>>653390653390 That would be cool.

Another excellent 'true story' of the founders of Equestria. I might borrow some of this... if it's all right with you.

>>655208655208

Oh please do! It's my dream that this becomes Fanon with a capitol F. ^_^ Are you fishing for more stuff from She Returns?

>>653390653390 The music was great and works perfectly.

Next up we have Princess Platinum, wonder what she was really like?

>>657136657136 Always. ;)

>>659237659237

"Next up we have Princess Platinum, wonder what she was really like?"

660888 I have a feeling I'm going to like it.

Also what historical figures did you use as inspiration for Pansy's background?

And here we have Platinum. Bless her heart: She tried so hard, and yet no pony remembers any of the actions she did for the good of Equestria.

>>664720664720

Pansy? Nobody that I know of, I just applied Reverse-Disneyfication to her.

Well, I must admit that this History Book has been most informative, and I can't wait to read the next chapters as they become available.

>>710470710470 How sad to think that Princess Platinum worked so hard to accomplish so little for her character (for modern times to remeber). You all know what I'm referencing.

And again, you fleshed out another character so much it almost hurts. In a good way, mind you.

>>710643710643

That is my goal. Feel free to use any information you find here for your own fic uses. ^_^

>>710645710645

...No I don't know. If you're reffering to the continued existence of the Nobility, consider this: The stuck up ponies of Canterlot that we see, compaired to the nobility of Platinum's time, are kind. Jet Set and Upper Crust? Back in the day, they would be considered nice. Think on that.

>>717011717011

I'm getting a sneaky suspicion that I'm better at worldbuilding than I am at actually writing.

>>720483720483 I was referencing the famous Dragon Ball Z exchange between Vegeta and Andriod #18 in which #18 says "How sad to work so hard and accomplish so little." and Vegeta replies with "Sad for you!"

And here we have Clover's story. You know, there's something I find inherently amusing about an otherwise upstanding, unasuming young lady discovering the Feelings of Lust "Love" for the first time. But then again, if anypony could spark a fire in her loins heart, it would be Hurricane. Who, thanks to DA, looks like this in my headcanon by the way. As a guy, I can't tell if that's sexy-fine, but based on observation from ladies on guys deemed as 'hot,' he seems to match.

If anyone is good with Flash or something like that, I have a request: Re-Animate this vid, replacing Lyra with Historical!Hurricane, with a couple shots of Historical!Clover. Maybe with a nosebleed.

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Now, given what I'd revealed about Pre-Equestrian Unicorn society, Clover getting an epithet like "the Clever" is quite the accomplishment.

OOH! One last thing! I have a sneaky suspicion that, when Hurricane and Clover's courtship went from "Eminent" to "Just Waiting for the Announcement," Platinum was watching them from the shadows, hooves clasped in front of her face as she leaned on a railing, the light of the sun somehow glinting off of her reading spectacles. Had anypony been present, no doubt they would have overheard her whisper something to the effect of "Everything is going according to the scenario."

Image: http://i.imgur.com/DcIgm.jpg

Now to get her a Fuyutsuki stand-in. Unless you consider Clover it. OOH! Speaking of Platinum: I revised the last part of her biography, and I’ve corrected somr errors in Pansy’s bio. Namely her name, which I noticed was spelled a different way in the Table of Contents.

And if you’re wondering: Indeed, I would not be averse to Platinum arranging the kidnapping. No, I don’t believe Hurricane was privy to, or even aware of, the plan. It was just him being a pawn in Platinum’s plotting.

I didn’t think this up when I was writing Hurricane’s chapter, but I found it interesting that Clover was born the same year, and a few months after, Wind Whistler’s death, and that they both were Hurricane’s great loves. Now, I don’t know about you guys, but the idea that Clover was Wind Whistler’s reincarnation stuck out to me, and tickled my interest. If you like the idea too, keep it. If not, well, it doesn’t affect anything one way or the other.

And while I’m in a WoG-World-buildy mood: I like the idea that Fluttershy is actually descended from Hurricane via Pansy. Meanwhile, Rainbow Dash is at best a half-descendant, being descended from a half-sibling of Hurricane’s. Same father, different mother. Just to screw with everyone’s expectations.

Now then, Willard is an actual Anglo-Saxon name that managed to survive the 1000+ years of language evolution to remain sufficiently popular among modern speakers. It means “Resolute and Stern.”

Hmm, I'd say that Nothing is just the absence of Love, not its opposite. The actual opposite is disgust, or revulsion.

So Clover lived the longest out of all the founders, makes sense to me.

Next up we have Chancellor Puddinghead and something tells she was either more or less scatter brained than she appeared in the play.

>>731087731087 I concur, especially since she was the only one not mentioned to be helping after the Great Warming.

Another great chapter and biography.

Another good fleshing out - but damn, is the Hearthwarming play accurate about anyone? (I wonder how the pitch for the original one went...)

>>733442733442

Well... I can't really think of anything interesting for Smart Cookie. Does that count?

At any rate, the Hearth's Warming Eve play is kinda like a cross between mideval Passion Plays and a generic Thanksgiving Day play that grade school kids put on for their parents. The bare bones are there... and that's about it. The part where in the winter of 1620 the Pilgrams almost all died is usually glossed over, if not skipped completely.

That was ridiculously impressive.

Let’s be honest, Puddinghead stands out more than a bit compared to the names of the other Founders.

I based Puddinghead’s many repeat attempts at election and the popularity she had with the common pony mirrors the occasional “Celebrity Candidate” that runs for office that, if you listen to most folks, seems like will win but for one reason or another doesn’t. A good recent case being Fred Thompson in the 2008 presidential campaign, and less recently being William Jennings Bryan, turn of the century three-time Presidential hopeful. Puddinghead’s final success could, in theory, mirror what happens when the above situation occurs, and the candidate wins. Such as when Arnold Schwarzenegger won the California Governorship.  Furthermore… sometimes I cannot help but think that it might be a good thing that most young people don’t vote for about ten years. There’s just something about the way the election season works more like a popularity contest at times that I find frustrating and ineffectual.

Luscious Day is based in part on Cassius Dio, a Greek historian a hundred years after the reign of Caligula.

Anyway, it should be of no surprise to anyone that Puddinghead is based heavily on Roman Emperor Caligula, right down to the names of her family being puns on Caligula’s family names. Germanicus – Germination, Agrippina – Apricot. Caligula actually had quite a few public works  projects carried out, though more than a few were just for his own benefit, not to mention how these all lead to an economic crisis.

Another source of inspiration would be the famously mad Joshua Abraham Norton, otherwise known as Emperor Norton I of the US, and Protector of Mexico. More specifically, his oddly prophetic decries of the construction of the San Francisco-Oakland Bay Bridge and the Transbay Tube, which would be built roughly 50+ years after his death.

And I’d like to thank Cap’n Chryssalid for letting me steal suggesting the parrot. I had been thinking of giving Puddinghead a pet to appoint, but I’ll admit on being a little stumped on the details.

As to her death: Well, her being assassinated seemed rather inappropriate considering the message of Hearth’s Warming, but her getting herself killed pulling a stupid stunt seemed much more in character with the situation, and the character. Also, Goldfish Swallowing and Flagpole Sitting are both stunts commonly pulled, most often by college students, in the 1920s. They’re both pretty obvious: Goldfish Swallowing is swallowing as many live goldfish in a single sitting, and Flagpole Sitting is sitting on a seat on top of a flagpole for as long as you can stand it.

Smart Cookie is next, bonus points if you can guess what I’ll be referencing in that chapter considering the above parrot stuff.

("Sugarcube, it has ceased to be...")>

Sad to see that Puddinghead was the first of the founders to go but still nice to see that she managed to accomplish something in her time.

Is it good or bad I couldn't stop laughing during this?!

>>773752773752

Yeah well, in every famous group, there's that one individual whose life was total crap after a big event.

>>774489774489

Well, give me more details and I might be able to answer that.

>>776324776324 It's just so... insane. Everypony else was really pretty cool and awesome and really magnificent, while Puddinghead... was a complete nutter. It's just the dichotomy, I suppose.

>>776324776324 Still might have liked her to live a little longer like until shall we say 25 A.W.?

>>528479528479

How about the Ottomare Empire (or variations thereof; empire's a bit of a strong word)? I'm still working out the history, but the basis is the Ottoman Empire at it's height

>>782580782580

Hmmm.... Empire might be a touch much (unless you want to mix in the OE's final year's size as a bit of irony: They claim to be an empire, but are only a few dozen square miles), but yes, do go on...

>>782646782646

The irony would work

Also, the Russians and the Ottomans hated each other, so rivalries with Stalliongrad could lead to larger problems involving the other territories

I put this on my Kindle

Oh my GOD

Let's just be glad that Puddinghead didn't declare war on the sea

... you'd think an editor would have taken care of that second part.

The parrot is not the only reference in this chapter.

I caught a distinct wiff of the Muppets early on.

>>604664604664

I also see a bit of George Washington in Hurricane.  After all, he died of a bad cold after a day in the snow.

>>887812887812 But then he/she would be denying readers a chance to pick up a guide to Ye Old Ponese to translate it themselves.

And here we have Smart Cookie. Finally. To those of you familiar with American History, it is quite clear that she is an Expy of John Adams, more specifically Adams as portrayed by Mr. Feeny William Daniels in 1776, who is slightly more hot-blooded than the original. In related news, I’d like to see someone rework the lyrics to Piddle Twiddle and Resolve to better fit the situation.

Unlike Adams’ final words about Jefferson (having died hours earlier), Cookie is spot on.

And while Abigail Smith Adams was content to maintain the farm and care for the children, Able Smith also was a competent Black Smith. Why bother the wife about getting a new plow when you can fix it/make a new one yourself?

Sadly, I’m not sure how well the idea that all of the six founders becoming friends works for Puddinghead-Smart Cookie. Oh well.

Smart Cookie uses CRY LIKE A LITTLE BITCH. It’s not very effective.

And Cook and Puddy is a send off to Punch and Judy, a traditional puppet show from England about Punch (who is usually a total psychopath) and his wife Judy (who often gets killed by Punch). It’s a Black Comedy for kids. As murder would be considered to black for comedy, the Cook and Puddy shows focus on the Straight Mare Cook putting up with Puddy’s antics.

In other news: WOO! Recommendation Wall! Also: Tropes my dear readers. It's in need of some Wiki Love though.

Being a reader of history, I really love this fic! Faved!

I especially enjoyed reading Puddinghead's bio..great Celestia,   a pony that makes Pinkie look normal.... can you imagine Puddinghead and Pinkie Pie coming together?

>>10167971016797

*snort* I suspect that it would go a little like Robin Williams' thoughts on Drugs, Jack Nicholson and Keith Richards. With Pinkie as Keith.

"I gotta go home now Puddinghead, any more and I think I'll hurl..."

"WUSSY!"

Another great chapter. Cookie, Cookie... *Shakes head* Can't be that- *Sees Puddinghead* Let me get you a crowbar.

Odd how Smart Cookie is the John Adams of the group and yet she ended up being played by Applejack who had almost nothing in common with her.

Next up is the honorable mention that is Star Swirl the Bearded who is obviosuly the Leonardo Da Vicni of early Equestria and we know now that he knew only Clover the Clever but also Smart Cookie and Princess Platinum but what else about him do we not already know?

This fic is back! Hurrah!

Goosteppen... ohhhh DEAR.

The scene where Cookie is appointed Secretary is even more hilarious if you imagine Applejack in her place.

Since you asked me so nicely on my page, he is my two cents on your story in a metal context.

Idiot's Rule - Jane's Addiction

Manifesto - Opiate For The Masses

Light In The Black - Sabaton

I'd say the last comes closest, but metal tends to say "fuck you" to government more than "I'm okay with how things are going."

>>782646782646 The idea of this story is really great, I've been looking for something like this for a long time. But I would like to know, did you include the Ottomare Empire or did you decide against it? Because I would very much like to see Germany included here. If you don't like the sound of "Empire" you could use "Germaney" or "Germaneigh" instead. I could also come up with a backstory if you want.

And so we have the last of the biographies for now. Sorry this took so long, I wanted to watch the Lord of the Rings trilogy before starting on Star-Swirl, and boy am I glad I did. Don’t worry, Star-Swirl’s story isn’t done just yet.

Humble Pie and Silver Lining, if you don’t know, are a reference to The Final Quest of Starswirl the Bearded. It’s a great story.

And I hope you all caught the Hamlet reff with King Tellurium as Claudius. Also, trivia: The Yew tree is considered by some as the source of the poison that killed Hamlet’s father due to a similarity to the symptoms described (to quote Wiki). Also, horses are the most susceptible and vulnerable to the poison. The More You Know.

Much has been made of Star-Swirl’s “Amniomorphic Spell” has something to do with fetus’. However, if TVTropes is to believed, the root for “Amnio” goes back to the same word for “bowl.” Thus making Star-Swirl the Bearded a Hairy Harry Potter pun/shout out. I like this theory, even in the event of it being wrong. Because it’s clever. ^_^

It’s really a happy coincidence that I settled on naming Platinum’s family after precious metals that I stumbled on this Meaningful Name situation. All of Platinum’s named family (other than her parents) are part of the, get this, Platinum group of elements! Furthermore, Aunt Osmium? The one that shrugged off a firing squad? Densest naturally occurring element. LOL.

Speaking of Platinum’s family: If you noticed a similarity to the fate of the Romanovs, you get a cookie.

And if you’re wondering: Yes. I enjoy making the Nobility of the Kingdom of Unicorns petty, childish and utterly stupid Starscreams.

And that is how my headfanon for Starswirl was established. Truly well written, looking forward to the rest.

Personally, I am not fond of the "middle-English" text. It doesn't really make sense in an edited work, and sort of makes Luna seem unintelligent. It is also difficult to read, I just skipped over it.

As for the rest, very interesting concept.

Star-Swirl's final address to Platinum and Clover clearly had elements of the First Doctor in them. In the episode The Dalek Invasion of Earth, the Doctor left his granddaughter behind with much the same speech, though abbreviated.

"One day, I shall come back. Yes, I shall come back. Until then, there must be no regrets, no tears, no anxieties. Just go forward in all your beliefs, and prove to me that I am not mistaken in mine. Goodbye, Susan. Goodbye my dear."

Nice touch having Luna's addition being in old English, though I think you laid it on a bit thick.

Because King Palladium had four sons, and there were only four male bodies on the floor.

Found an error here. Isnt it supposed to be only three male bodies?

And how the Royal family was almost overthrown reminds me of how the last Tsar of Russia was killed. They thought all the family was dead and buried them, but now archeologists found the daughter's body miles away in only a nightgown. Similar, but not quite.

So Star-Swirl may or may not have had something to do with the apperance of the allicorns Celestia, Luna, and Cadence, fascinating.

>>11747671174767

Let's see... Three dead sons... Plus one dead father... That ought to equal four dead male bodies, unless I'm missing something.

Well, I know that Anastasia is now known to have died that night, but I was specifically thinking of an anecdote of how either the Tsarina or one of the princesses survived the first bout of fireing squad due to parts of the family jewels being sewn into her clothes.

>>11748171174817

Oh HO! You caught that did you? Ha ha, mine is a clever mind. ^_^

However, Cadence is a special case, because pony genetics are total BS.

>>11747671174767

Maybe Kind Palladium was among the 4 bodies, leaving only 3 bodies of the sons? IDK.

*facehoofs*

Sorry, I miscounted. My mind was on the number of sons, so somehow it translated the number being the number of the male offspring on the floor

If I don't make much sense, it's because it's really late here at night and I haven't slept for a while...

>>11748311174831 Oh I get it Cadence was born naturally but Celestia and Luna were not, I'll bet Twilight was surprised to find that out.

Awesome use of the Amniomorphic Spell there. And yeah, I could almost hear Hartnell in that last bit. Gandalf, First Doctor? I can see it.

So Starswirl planted the idea of the Alicorn in the collective consciousness of Ponykind and then left to the Immateria to seek them out?  Sounds like he placed the seed of belief in the populous and then went into the Dream Time to use that seed to create them.

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That... Is awesomely badass. Completely wrong, but badass.

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Well, in a Pre-Industrial society where refridgeration is impossible and other methods of preservation are either expensive (salts and spices) or time-consuming (curring and smoking), being able to put preservative properties into common containers would be a massive blessing.

Aww.  I was hoping I was right.

WOO! Longest chapter yet baby! I gotta say after I wrote the build up and break out of the Lake Trot Crisis I just had to get up and move around because I was pumped!

Now, by the end of the day, I want to see the Crowning Moment of Awesome page for this story’s TVTropes article opened up, with Wind Whistler’s Legal-tastic awesomesauce as the first entry. I’d do it, but as I’m the author I would think that would be in poor taste.

Now then. Did Sullamander really rape an aid? Was she really in Lesbians with the previous Commander? Was Mareinus obsessed with “The Love that dare not speak Its name?” I reported, you decide. That said, I find the idea of Twilight and/or whoever was responsible for writing this chapter being so squicked out by those bits of history that she/they try to suppress it hilarious.

I tried to get more of the historical dictator Sulla into Sullamander, but considering how her story ends… I wound up making her Downfall!Hitler. On one hand, I have invoked Godwin’s Law, and I feel ashamed for that. On the other hand, I now have an excuse to make a Ponyfied Hitler’s Rant video, which is all kinds of awesome… If only I could get the raw video and a good video editing program. And competence at using it.

Also, for her evil and insanity, Sullamander did do one good thing in life: She killed Thistle Whistle. Because she's named after a G3.5 pony that resisted Laurenization. Speaking of Reused ponies, I'm sure most of you know Wind Whistler from G1, so her intellegence is unsurprising. Well, I added a little spin of my own: Robert E. Lee, highly respected general of the Confederate Army during the American Civil War, and he went to West Point as a young man. West Point has a similar point system, and no one has ever graduated from West Point without getting pointed for something. Except for Lee. Now, I'm not saying this version of Wind Whistler is based on Lee. Just that one thing, so I doubt that counts as an Expy.

Also, if you want to know what a Ndima looks like, go here and scroll down to Ngbandi Spear.

One last thing: As you can tell, with the Bios out of the way, I can now move on with the 'plot' as it were. And since I'm pseudo-dramatizing the Hearth's Warming story.....

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Would you consider Sullamander to be a Complete Monster?  

Also, I found a grammar error.  "Without even being ordered two, units of the Second Army explained the situation to their counterparts on the other side, often yelling over the sounds of battle."  It should be "without even being ordered to".  

Anyway, I love this story!   Here's hoping you keep up the good work.

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Hmmm... Not sure. Psycho Lesbian? Sure. General Failure? Of course! Complete Monster? ...Well, I wouldn't, but that's because I'm the author and I know ahead of time that someone much much worse is coming on down the line.

Fixed!

Glad to hear it! Now for the hard part: I need to figure out how to discuss troop formations and movments for the Lake Trot Crisis!

Less-than-wholesome scholarship strikes me as Twilight-speak for "get your minds out of the gutter!"

Your bias is showing, Twilight...

Wind Whistler used White Mutiny! It's super effective!

Sullamander is the ponyfied Hitler except for the fact that she doesn't take her own life and instead gets run through by Hurricane.

I wonder if either Princess Platinum or Clover the Clever were aware of Star Swirl's assitance of the Celestine Civil War during the Lake Trot Crisis?

Excellent work!   Yes i have already uploaded  this as Headcannon and will use it as a background for the fanfic i am planning to write.

Just a nerdy correction.   The disease Queen Argentum suffered from was not anemia. She has  Haemophilia.Haemophilia

Anemia involves the  hemoglobin levels  in the blood and affects the capacity of blood to carry oxygen.

Haemophilia on the other hand, is a perfect fit  for  Queen Argentum's  symptoms. It affects the ability of  blood to clot itself, thus causing sufferers to bleed out  from minor injuries. And  yes it is Haemophilia that is referred to as " the royal disease" because it manifested itself frequently among european royal families  due to inbreeding.  Most famously  one of  Czar Nicholas the second's sons was  haemophilic, and it was this that Rasputin claimed to be able to cure, thus allowing him to gather power around himself within the court.

n a letter (one of many) to her husband Able Smith, Smart Cookie famously described herself as “obnoxious and disliked by the more solid of my fellows on the matter of unification.”

I literally lol'ed  when read this, and  i realized  smart cookie  was  John Adams.