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All hail best human Sunset Shimmer! Now welcome all to The Destiny of the Ancients

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For a 1000 years she has been the sun of the Kingdom of Equestria, the sole ruler and forever the mother of her little ponies. but not everything is as it seems. Celestia is not just any alicorn princess, there is something that made her change several things, that made her act different sometimes, or at least for the last 3 centuries, why?

Because now... I am Celestia.

And now I know the meaning of sacrifice, of pain, of how power can hurt.

But now, I wonder, can I save everyone and bring back the real Eternal Sun back home? Or is the world doomed to be destroyed? Am I worthy of this crown? Well, they say Hope Rides Alone and it has a White Coat.

Of course... that doesn't mean I cannot have fun from time to time.

Cover Art BY: Aqua Galaxy
No Clop, but some adult themes will be talked about.

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 482 )
TB3

Fascinating premise and an interesting start that was nicely executed.

Consider this watched :)

"Noone" is not a word.

5423782 Thank you


5423810 Old habits, I'll fix that. Thank you for telling me.

didn’t realize was that this cutie wasn’t only in love with Celestia, but with the power of the alicorn

This part is confusing, the pony killed Celestia even though the pony loved her?

5424493 She was in love with her image of Celestia, she will be talked about in other chapters, Celly will remember her other times considering that's the reason she is there.

5424559 ok, I understand now. Thanks.

Good luck.

I was so looking forward to this story, then I read the nightmare Forces part. I HATE the parasite route. so bye.

5425444 What can I say? I like the comics.

5425474 but that one. It weakens Luna's character. That thing is the only thing preventing me from reading further.

I like the story, and the idea behind it. but the narrator is just painfully scatter brained. So many times I thought he was going to talk about something, then goes off about something else. or cracks a joke in the middle of exposition, then picks up on completely different exposition.

Like how he was talking about how he learned to become a leader, then introducing himself as Celestia, got distracted by I guess a shiny thing, then suddenly he is talking about being a human like this was already pre established but it wasn't.

It's perfectly fine establishing things, but perhaps you should scatter them more evenly instead of loading them all on the front end of chapter one, wording them like your about to explain, then go off on something else.

That whole Safe Vault thing probably could have been moved to another chapter so this one is just establishing the character, who he is, his predicament, knowledge of the world so far, how long he has been doing this, etc. Going from learning about this guy to suddenly naming several brand new characters is just jarring.

Also I don't know why someone would establish they like the word discern, then never use the word discern again, I have used discern more times in this sentence than in the entire chapter and I don't really care for the word discern.

5425513 Thank for the constructive criticism, I will work on that part of Celly's personality and chapter.

Great story. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

Can we expect any changes to the events of the series?

5426769 Thank you, and yes, expect changes on the events, Celly's personality and plans differ a lot from Canon Celestia.

Great chapter.

Blueblood certainly seem's different from his canon counterpart.

Make's me wonder what else will be different.

Like have you had her change certain events in the past? That happend before the series began.

Like Sunset going to the Equestria girl's dimension, or the Dazzlings banishment.

5428411 Oh my dear, that is where the fun begins, aseveral things will be different in the past, but many will remain but with huge changes in them, among them Sunset which is a character that I love.

Definitely enjoyed this Celestia's making up with Luna then the shows. Well done.

Comment posted by Twilight Kira deleted Dec 27th, 2014

Your story is wery funny but the mark 'SEX' worry me. I hope you dont make your Celly fall in love with luna or twilight or something like that, becouse it Will become the exactly copy of the FIC 'Sunbutt the awesome'. What I'm hoping to see is a celestia/molestia/trollestria who make fun with sexy jokes luna's butt and other scherinnegans :trollestia:

5430994 This won't be like that, I made the fic specifically for that reason, the sex tag is not for any clop or anything like that but for several situations and discusions, Celly is not celibate but in no way she is going to get it on with Lulu or Twilight, that doesn't mean she isn't going to joke and other crazy antics.

hnng, this is amazing. i can't wait for the nightmare night episodes, or when discord breaks loose :pinkiecrazy:

This is freaking amazing.... Body-swaps are tough to do, and for celestia, the only really decent one I know of is Princess Celestia: The Changeling Queen. Making it a random Human, though, we get our fill of pop culture, though, and the idea of Celestia dancing around, humming "another one bites the dust" after leading a successful defense campaign is too good for me to ignore.
I don't remember the last time I got a queen reference in a Fanfic, thanks for that!

Oh, and added ya to a group, this story needs more ways to find it!

YbJ

This story needs a lot of editing (punctuation errors, grammar mistakes, typos, etc), and it's really hard to follow sometimes, given how much the protagonist likes to ramble. I have no idea what was going on in that court scene in the first chapter. Why are these OCs negotiating mortgages and loan rates with Celestia?

But I'll track this story because the premise is interesting.

I was getting into it but the

excessive

use

of

white

space

is a little distracting. A single use of white-space line is great. It really draws the eye to that one line and 'sets it apart' from the rest of the story, adding emphasis with little formatting. It makes you notice that line. Excessive use, however, will detract from each line and tire the eye out as it reads three words and shifts to read the rest. As a comedic effect, I can see the merits but it's not just in the title list (and that goes on a bit longer than necessary to get that effect) where that sort of thing might work - kinda. Also, word-misuse. 'She felt in love.' ought be 'She fell in love.' and it continues. A LOT. I can't continue but no down vote or anything. Get thee an editor to correct the grammar and sweep some of these single-sentence 'paragraphs' into one.

Good luck.

Hmm, I really hope when the MC finds celestia, he gets an alicorn body, after all, living for as long as he has and going back to being mortal would...irk me badly.

This Celestial human doesn't have any prior knowledge of anything, right? Not even any scrying?

5503426 He does have knowledge of FiM, probably... maybe... the problem is that Celly is quite scatterbrained and forgets some things, that's why Celly has Kibitz

5425492
how does it weaken her character?

5456363
I think discord will need to step aside, cuz there would be a new god of chaos, and she will out troll his ass 10-1!

5515794
Oh, you have no idea what I am planning for that part, it will be epic mates!

Ok so I finally have read this, I think celestia is in the astral plane, or that dagger caused her soul to leave her body, and leave this plane of this existence, or something of the sort.

I really like it.
Although like I said, I hope if celestia comes back, he doesn't have to get a super downgrade to mortal status...

Well damn, good job sir, you have put my on an ledge of a cliff, I have a feeling that this is either a dream, or he is seeing what celestia did after the accident if they are linked, assuming his body survived the accident., which I heavily doubt it did survive.

...Cliff hanger... Noooo stupid cliff!
Awesome Chap

This is an awesome chapter with a dark end. I love everything about it from the crazy Celestia to the creepy end. I would love to see how his mind take over will have ramifications.

Some obvious grammatical errors like names being uncapitalised. However, I shall keep an eye on this with interest.

You really have nothing to thank us for, it is we who should thank you for this great story. So thank you and continue with :trollestia:

More Please!?!?! PLEASE I BEG OF YOU

So are we going to be getting a new chapter sometime soon?

5614149 I've been working on it, it will be over maybe tomorrow

MOAR XD I loved the Dr reference, Good job.

Dammit, I can't upvote again hahaha

Oh wow. This needs an editor. Badly. So much missing punctuation and capitalization mistakes...
Other than that, good job and I'm glad to see this story back.

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