Hm. Seems good. A few errors, but those can be fixed. The whole "I love fluttershy" thing is cliche, but it's okay....this is interesting.

Interesting...... Looks promising.

>>539537539537 Agreed.

Obstacle is spelled "obstacle".

So from what I gathered in the description  this fic is a crossover between Jason Voorhees (Friday the 13th) and Ponyfall keep going

@Ocean Drop

Most of the people in this, (Other than the mane six of course), are actual friends of mine. Riley wanted Rainbow Dash as his. And another character, (forshadowing) wanted Twilight Sparkles, so I went for the next best thing. Fluttershy! Anyways, she is my favorite character.

Two things.

One: My actual name is Lachlan, but I thought Jason would be more popular. Do you guys/gals agree?

Two: Do you think ponys would eat grass if they litterally had nothing else to eat?

>>540376540376 just remember, Jason is only cool if it is followed by "Voorhees"

So make his last name "Voorhees"

>>540376540376 1. Jason's cool, do whatever. 2. Yeah, they eat flowers, so why not?

@superanonbrony

Um, no.

Great story. I can easily proofread the story in a matter of minutes, if you want. I will take no credit at all if you do so, and you can take it.

Sorry, had to repost due to some errors on my computer.

Looks intresting want to see were it goes, and humans biologically cannot eat grass as far as i know it gives them not nutrional value at all

But it DOES give ponys nutrition...

You can probably see were this is going.

hmmm... okay, it's interesting, please continue.

Sorry about not posting the third chapter yet. I've been having some writers block, but it should be up before the day is out!

>>539537539537How would someone not love Fluttershy? It's nearly impossible.

You gave them ramen! that is funny

>>570247570247

Of course! What better way to introduce human food?

Sorry It's a short post, I'll put the rest in tomorrow.

hmmm this is interesting interesting indeed

... what is this i dont even...

Edit: i like it, its just... a bit to odd in my opinion... this coming from a guy who created semisolid beings of mercury as a recurring enemy in one of his fanfics...

Would you rather it be a clopfic?

Sorry for the hiatus, when I have a hiatus, I HAVE A HIATUS!!! But, anyway, I've set it up so starting tomarow there will be daily updates for 10 days. Is'nt that fun? See you then.

What is a hiatus? Does that mean you ran out of ideas? Would you like some help?

No, it means when you put somthing on hold. Don't worry, I have almost the entire story written out in my mind. With the end of the year, my birthday this thursday, friends having cancer, and all those other made up reasons for me not writing!

(But my birthday really is on thursday)

The rest of ch. 4 will be published in two or three hours. (It's quiet a suprise)

>>796711796711 I really wana know how she used a cookbook to fail at a spell

I love this story it's funny

moar

very short but i still enjoyed to read

Its not finished, I'm still looking for a way to creates a fake ID.

It's kind of funny that no one got the joke on chapter four. With the whole "21.1 Jigawatts".

>>822149822149 The film refrance?

Yes, I corrected it. I realise that was my fault.

>>816427816427

Just avoid the subject carefully by saying you went to some shady dude to have an ID made.

DEVIOUSLY AVOIDING THE FACT THAT YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW IT WORKS.

You...

ARE BRILLIANT!!!!

Thanks so much, i've heen stumped for a week!>>857767857767

>>858747858747 No offence. But you really need a pre-reader of sorts. I see a TON of spelling mistakes and it is driving me nuts!! If its cool with you I'll be your pre-reader.

>>929821929821

Well you see, I already have one. latly he's been doing his own fanfic, and in my opinion, that should be the highest priority on his list. He's very busy as he is very popular IRL, and on the web. (Yes, I know him in person). But, whenever I change  a chapter, it sends all the people who have favorited my story something that says they have a new chapter waiting. So If I change them as we go, there getting chapter updates all the time, and they think its a new chapter, but it's only an updated version of a chapter allready there. Last I checked, he was on chapter four, so i'm waiting untill he's finished chapter five, then I'll post all 5 at once, so it's nowhere near as annoying to the readers. But don't worry, he's really good.

Thats also why I haven't updated a 6th chapter yet, I'm waiting untill he's done with the chapters. I hope you can be paciant, and enjoy my story more fully when there all updated.

Hey guys, guess what!! Im not dead! But I did get in a car crash involving a chicken, some porn, and my moms blow dryer. Yeah.......

Anyways! Im back, Im not dead, I don't have writers block, and my friends are finnaly leaving me alone about getting me laid!! And you know what that means, time to write stories!! So I'll get right on that, for you all!!!

Huh... you know what guys? I'm gonna stop this project. Its not that I don't have the time, I have plenty of time, it's that I don't have the drive, nor the fanbase to back me up and to breath down my neck that it's not done. I am extreamly sorry for all who wished the project finished. But I won't stop writing, just not this story.