Noticed a couple past tense verbs here and there instead of present. Other than that, looks interesting and I'd like to see more!

I'm new here and I'm interested but busy, how do you set a fic to "read later"?

I'm new here and I'm interested but busy, how do you set a fic to "read later"? Wait, I'll just check the FAQ section!

>>521742521742 clicke the book next to the title, and if you wwant to keep track of it while its in progression, click the star next to the thumbs up/down bar

Not bad, a little short but most first chapters are.

Keep it up

ok, I have read two chapters of this story and I can safely say, I like it. I like it a lot!

PLease keep it up.

so,we meet again...cliff hanger!!!

...Is reading for four hours strait abnormal? I've read in excess of eight.

In any case, looking forward to more!

Sorry for some reason i just lost it at "pop a wingie." Brilliant story so far.

Nice!!!!  I am loving this story

the only problem I see are that the chapters is to short!!!

please keep it up!

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Yeah, I'm having trouble getting beyond that 2,000 word mark right now. It's my first 2nd-"pony" fic, so I'm gonna go ahead and blame my lack of experience.

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its is good, thats why I was it was longer, so I can read more LOL

", and I'm here to return it.”

“And you're here to return it?” The dragon guesses,"

Uhh ... yeah spike good guess ... to think I'm there for the reason i said that i'm there for? ... who would have though?

EDIT: four hours straight is a lot? when i get a good book I'm reading it from 8:00 to 23:00 (that damn book had 2000 pages)

Its stories like this that make sifting through all the wierd stuff seem worth it, keep up the good work bro!

That was fun. I made myself facepalm an awful lot.

One bit jumped out at me, though: "hoof-five"? I know where you're coming from, but where would ponies get the "five" part from? Maybe "high-hoof" instead?

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Probably.

"diner on the edge town"

on the edge of town

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Whoops, typo. I think my mind was trying to convince me that there was such a town.

Moar?

Tommorow couldn't come at faster thats it this was a good story but that mean the towns exploding

four hours straight? jezze who'd  read for that long?

Oh, is the sun rising, but i ust stared reading at midnight!

this. is. interesting, i'll be sure to follow your story.

Awesome chapter!

shes gonna take it the wrong way.

people who fucked up relationship due to mis understanding: too many

people who dont need a relationship: me

Wonder what spike will say when sees "you" in the bed

It's been awhile. That said, I really enjoyed the chapter and hope to see much. much more.

Hopefully quicker than three months.

Carry On

Been along time. I am glad this story is not dead.

and the warm ending to this chapter was just that warm and nice.

Good work

"As you spend more and more time at the Ponyville Library, things between you two get... interesting" Clopfic me thinks.

Who died?

Whether he knows it or not, this author knows how to treat his audience right, how to write a story we enjoy reading.

There is a reason it made the Featured Stories list, after all...

Seriously, great job! You've got me hooked!

It seems as if this story is REALLY stereotypical. I mean you even added in dead-parents/brother/sister/relative. That being said, the writing is still good.

Not bad mate. I feel a touch rushed into his realization towards his "feelings" for Twilight, but I'm interested to see where this goes

Would you like a pre-reader? I'll admit it would be my first time, but I am picking up a lot of subtle mistakes here and there. Its a great little story so far, but when I see errors it kind of snaps me away from the story

>>21158332115833 I'm good for now. Thanks for the offer, though. I know I've got a lot of mistakes going on, I'm just not interested in a proofreader, to be honest. I'd rather just have the mistakes pointed out in the comments after and learn from my mistakes for the future.

do update when you can I do like this story