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JLBDreamer


I’m a Pegasister and so I have limited time to devote to fandom being busy in real life most of the time. I’m opening a business as a writer/graphic artist while caring for my elderly parents.

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This story is a sequel to Of Tea and Discord


Discord has to prove that he’s reformed by behaving himself at the New Era Gala. Its up to Fluttershy, Twilight and the rest of the Mane Six to make sure he’s ready but is the task impossible for the Lord of Chaos?

This takes place after the events in Twilight’s Kingdom and explores just how reformed Discord is capable of being.

This story is on a brief haitus while I finish some real-life things. For more details click here.

Note: This story is based on a play from the early 20th century called Pygmalion exploring the concept of creating or making over someone to fit into a society they are not originally from. I love Discord and thought it would be fun to put him in the hot seat with the Mane Six being his tutors to try and teach him how to behave in an event. Fluttershy, of course, and Twilight will be the main tutors on the journey. It will include some parodies of songs from the musical version of Pygmalion (My Fair Lady).

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'he found the ponies lack of response disturbing' that one single line made me laugh so hard. The rest of the scene was amazingly atmospheric and emotional but that one single line made me laugh. Such feels lol But seriously this was a great fanfic. The development of Discord's character was amazing and it was really nice to see him outside of his usual jokimg style and into a more realistic character. He obviously cares about Fluttershy more than for anypony else even if he doesn't want to admit it to himself. The bet he set up with Luna was great bht why do I feel like Luna actually kmew what she was doing. If she wins she obviously gets what she wants but even if he loses she gets the satisfaction of seeing Discord be miserable for one night. Clever girl...

5378532 I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I like diving into characters feelings and motivations and Discord clearly has feelings in the show so its great fun to dive into that side besides his usual joking and games. Because of the time setting I put this in I wanted to address how his betrayal must have impacted he and Fluttershy's friendship and not just say they had mended it with no explanation. The rest of the chapters will be less serious but there will be some more warm and fuzzy moments. I really love how they interact.

As for Luna. She didn't expect his bet but she most definitely saw how it would most benefit herself which Celestia realized and thus let Luna gracefully accept Discord's bet. It would get too cluttered if I dived into everyone's thoughts at once but you'll definitely see how she feels when the whole thing goes down. She was once Nightmare Moon and isn't above a little mean spirited manipulation after all which just may come into play later. *Hint, Hint*

5378657 It's great that you left some of the character motivation for the readers to interpret. Really shows you have quite a lot planned out already. Discord and Fluttershy have a really interesting relationship in the show and it is very well explored here. Keep me posted for more

5381173 I should have the next chapter up next weekend so you'll see it soon.

As for planning out. I always plan a general outline of what I want to write and work from it. I usually don't change them too much but I find it helps especially when I'm writing several things at once, which is pretty normal for me. lol

Oh gosh!~ Discord and Fluttershy's song is simply perfect!

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Thank you! I've never done a song parody before and I worked really hard to get it just right and fit them including coming up with scenarios to have as part of the song.

Cant wait for the next chap its great! Also its Pinkie not Pinky (sorry if that sounded snooty)

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Thanks! I'll be releasing chapters about once a week.

Thank you for catching Pinkie's name for me. The spell check is confusing me on it and I'm not used to typing all of their names yet. I'll correct it and watch out for it from now on.

The song was most definitely as sweet as a sugar cane wrapped around a sugar cube in the sugar kingdom. This chapter was much more different than the previous one since I can see you focused more on the comedic element rather than the emotional one (although there were a few emotional moments here and there tossed in for a good measure). DIscord's actions in this chapter seemed very condescending towards the ponies which would stand to reason since he is the most powerful creature in Equestria (excluding Celestia of course) and I really cannot wait for the final product.Also you hinted some very intriguing theories about Discord's involvement with the tree of Harmony and even Celestia's powers. I think you could elaborate upon that (not in this fanfic since you already have a plot line going on her). Overall I really liked this chapter. It really built up on the previous one and it gave some truly hilarious comedic moments. Well done.
P.s. Not to be 'that guy' but you used 'everyone' instead of 'everypony'. It's not really a mistake, but just a minor observation on my part.

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I'm so glad people have enjoyed the song. It was fun to write even if it took awhile. Yes Discord is arrogant and still not especially friendly to the rest of the Mane 6. He really isn't shown to have truly bonded with any other ponies but for Fluttershy up to this point (expect for the CMC in the comics at least) so that will play into how the story develops.

Yes I do have head cannon about both Discord and the Tree of Harmony's origin which will come into play with another story idea I have rumbling around in my head so you'll probably hear it eventually. As for Celestia I've always thought that she seems to know a little bit too much and after a conversation she had with Spike in a comic about how she lets ponies figure things out for themselves based on what they need she must have some way to collect information. Yes that is something I'll definitely touch on in the future. As you said though this fic doesn't really involve those things though.

I seriously don't mind having mistakes pointed out. Yeah I caught a couple more things I need to correct and that's one of them so I'll be doing that later today.

Aww, that song was quite loverly. And Spike nearly killed me with that comment. :rainbowlaugh:

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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed the song and Spike's statement. I thought that was the perfect spot for a 4th wall break.

Wow! This was a great chapter, and the interactions between Discord, Fluttershy, and Twilight are fun to read. The song was also nice (thanks for sending the link to the music). ^_^

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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had fun with the dialogue and the song lyrics. I'll keep attaching the melodies I use because I know not everyone will be familiar with the songs I'm parodying.

Great chapter! But, I feel as if this will come back to bite Discord in the butt.

This was so much fun to read. I love how you've referenced the comics and kept the continuity with Discord and the CMC. Definitely need to edit it.

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Thanks. I had to include the comics since I enjoyed them so much. Yeah I'm going through it a couple more times. I tend to not be able to see all of the errors after I first write something because I "see" what I meant to write instead of what''s there. lol.

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You might be right about that. :raritywink:

Twilight are them panties riding the great crack? Calm down.

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LOL. Yes Twilight is getting a little OCD about the whole situation.

Oh yoiu just gained an infinity plus one points in my book. To be frank there are only two characters in the FIM franchise that I truly despise and cannot bear and thse are Angel Bunny (or as I like to call him Rabbit Stew) and little miss self proclaimed princess (and not the good kind) Diamond Tiara, and seeing one of these characters FINALLY get what's coming to them was extremely cathartic . Thank you for that. I love Discord's interaction with the CMC. He just seems so kind with them. So he and Twilight shall dance. I cannot wait. keep me posted for more

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I've never liked bullies and so DT's behavior in the show bugs me too. For story purposes I needed some ways for Discord to self-sabotage himself and so it worked out.

I really loved the way Discord interacted with the CMC in the comics so I had to bring it in. I think it has to do with the fact that they can take whatever he throws them in and they eat it up so he can't help but like them. If you don't mind or like chaos then you're okay in his book. Plus they reached out to him and he likes that even though he'd probably deny it. lol.

Ah yes. The dancing will happen and I hope it will be the highlight that it should be. Writing dancing can be tricky so it will be interesting. lol.

UPDATE :flutterrage: soon!

Um... :twilightblush: That may have been a little much... Sorry!

Really good story! I love Fluttercord! Best shipping ever! :yay: Keep up the good work and, um, well...

update :fluttercry:

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Thanks. I am a little busy this week so the next update will probably be next week sometime. You can always check my user page for updates on what I am working on currently.

Hi I just wanted to let you all know the next update will be the weekend of the 15th because I'm writing a story to enter a contest. For details take a look at this blog post.

Thanks for your patience. I just had to enter this contest.

"That’s a song that launched a thousand ships, right there…” :rainbowlaugh: I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy:

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Glad you enjoyed it. After I'd finished the song that thought popped into my head and so it made its way into the narrative.

I'm loving this story so far! I could totally see this happening in the show (and I honestly really really hope we get something along the same lines in season five) I know I've said it before but you capture the characters so well that it feels like I'm watching the show, I can hear all the voices in my head as I'm reading. Perfect! I also have to say...that song...that...SONG...best. thing. ever. Maybe I just have an overactive imagination but I was able to visualize that so well it was almost scary...in a good way, of course! I swear I played it through four times just because it was so much fun. I wanna see someone animate that out now, I'm totally serious. XD Anyway keep up the awesome work, you've got a true talent for writing and it shows! :yay:

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:twilightblush:

Thank you so much. In this story I really was going for the feeling of the show. They are set up as musicals in a way so the idea to do this just seemed to fit. I hope you enjoy the other songs.

I'm flattered you liked it so much. I have seen people do radio plays of stories before but animations are hard work. Maybe I might want to tackle something like that but I'm not making promises. :pinkiesmile: Thank you for the kind words!

Wonderful continuation of your previous story.
Your way of telling it really is something. You have such an relaxed way of telling the story.
The pacing is perfect. Not too slow and not too fast. The characters are believable and you show enough of their inner monologue to keep a steady impression of character-development.

I'm locking forward to the next chapters, it's very pleasing to read :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much. I've really had fun writing it so far. One of my favorite things to do is dive into the heads of the characters. MLP is such a wonderful platform to explore character development and especially with a character like Discord. I really hope they do explore situations that will involve the Mane 6 and Discord in the show also but in the meantime we can write and enjoy stories like this.

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I have to add something. I just realised that the song you re-texted was actually from the original version of My fair Lady which is incredibly fitting. I like how much thought you seem to have put into the realisation of this story.

I guess the theme of My Fair Lady is never getting old^^
Uncouth X gets taught how to act to fit into society of Y.
Attempting to do this with Discord is just perfect!

Oh and I absolutely have to agree with you. MLP is the best platform for exploring character development I can think of.
I've been on this site, reading fanfictions for I guess nearly a year now and I'm still continuously amazed. (My reading count is over 180)
Sure, most of the time it is nothing big or ground-shaking but even 'just' such charming slice of life stories, stories which capture the show's charm are something I can enjoy tremendously.

And I think, writing this kind of story is at least as difficult as writing complex character development and impossibly entangled epics.

As for the show. I'm pretty sure season 5 will be epic but won't meet our expectations at the same time, nonetheless.
It can't. First off because the show is still intended to be for little girls if though for an older audience as well
and secondly if the readers of fimfiction are so used to the high quality in storytelling and depth of character we have the pleasure to enjoy here. I fear, that we might get a little bit disappointed with the shows portrayal of the characters.
Nevertheless I think season 5 will be epic, the characters will get a good development and overall we will be very satisfied with it in at least the same way we were in season 4 if not much more.

P.S.: On account of the possible disapprovement of the canon characters in contrast to great acceptance in fanon. There was a interesting discussion about that in the comments of Three Gems and a Scooter starting on page 3 of the comments with the comment of TheGreatEater.

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Yes. You'll note the plot mirrors many things in the Pgymalian/My Fair Lady narrative (its not a simple ponification just taking the themes and some plot elements mostly) if you pay attention. All of songs I'm including are parodies of My Fair Lady songs but for what I have planned in the finale (my finale will be at the ball itself). The next one will be a parody of the Rain in Spain actually in the next chapter and I hope its received as well as my parody of "Wouldn't It Be Loverly" was. It is titled 'I can't explain, chocolate rain on the plain' tentatively. lol.

I'm one that tries to respect the canon of a show's writer's over fanon and head cannon which is why anything in which I include extensive head canon I tag as 'alternate universe' in case it conflicts with future canon reveals. In general, I think the writers of MLP are doing an excellent job entertaining all ages. My only major complaint with the writing was the extremely weak explanation for giving Twilight all of the alicorn magic in the finale. Other wise I generally have enjoyed the episodes. They impress me constantly weaving in mythology and cultural references/tributes (like I love they tributed Shonen Manga with the Twily/Tirek fight in MLP of all things) that kids won't understand.

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Oh yes! That was pure awesomeness!
"Twilight goes super-sayan" was what I thought exactly^^

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lol. Yes that fight out-right took some things from DBZ. Well the real Super Saiyan moment was the Rainbow Transformations though. What signified them transforming? Bigger hair!

5535865 :D right you are. How could I possibly miss THAT reference?^^

"That’s a song that launched a thousand ships, right there…” Spike said to the air seemingly to no one in particular.

P Pie's not gonna like that you're stealing her thunder.

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Funny you should mention that. Pinkie is in the next chapter and I just got done writing something...

The chapter is delayed but you can see a preview in my blog by clicking on this link.

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I decided to post a preview since I had to delay the chapter and chose to post the section that addresses just this thought Water Lily lol.

This is great!~ But poor Discord, he doesn't know just how boring the gala's going to be. He's not going to have fun being formal for 4 hours.

"My right eye-twitched, my tummy did a flip-flop, my ears pricked and I flipped on-to-my-back! Only I am allowed to BREAK THE FOURTH WALL!"
Everyone stared at Pinkie as she hyperventilated.
"She does have a point, I'm the only one allowed to bring in visual gags and references from an entirely different universe. I think you're getting off easy kid." Discord produced a scroll, and let it fall open that said 'My Little Pony: FIM Contract' on it, and was signed by John de Lancie.

Spike started to speak until Pinkie Pie grabbed him and clamped her hoof over his mouth. “That’s because this was a song parody of a song called the “Rain in Spain” so the music and the dresses were like the kind that the Andalusian ponies like.”
Pinkie let Spike go narrowing her eyes at him. “I told you aren’t aloud to BREAK THE FOURTH WALL!”

I was cracking up at Pinkie and the fourth wall!!!:rainbowlaugh: Really, I was cracking up the whole time! Awesome job with the song! :pinkiehappy: That's one of my favorites!

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Yes. So the question is can he really hold out for that long after three weeks of this drilling? :raritywink:

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Are you implying that Twilight's OCD tendencies are starting to get the best of her? :pinkiegasp: You might be right. :twilightoops:

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Yes. I couldn't help but be a meta when playing in this wonderful sandbox with Pinkie and Discord in the mix. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm glad you are enjoying it and getting a good laugh. I'm very happy how this particular song parody worked out. I had a little trouble with the wording at first but once I remembered "Domain" rhymed with Spain it just flowed. Thanks. :pinkiehappy:

With a snap, Discord and spike were now dressed as flamenco dancers, with black gaucho hats, shirts, pants and mustaches.

“Cool!” Spike cheered.

With a snap, all of girls were in full flamenco attire, lacy red-and-black dresses; lacy black veils were affixed to their manes with combs and red roses.

“Why the hay, am Ah in a frou-frou-“

Applejack was silenced as a rose appeared between her teeth, and she was swept off her feet in a dip by Discord. He brought her up, wide-eyed and blinking, to her feet before spinning her around. When he let her go she dropped to the ground with a thud, and watched the others wondering if they might have gone mad.

Discord glided across the ground with percussive steps, clapping his mismatched hands together with great flourish above his head.

Twilight, far too happy to worry about the weirdness, stomped rhymically in a circle with Fluttershy, and Spike while he clapped along to the beat.

Pinkie Pie rose to her hind legs, posing dramatically, making shapes in the air with her forelegs while turning in place.

Applejack with a shrug finally decided to join in with the entire group with a spinning flourish.

All (shouted):

Ole!

For some strange reason, as i read all of that, it all happened in time with the music, the dipping, and the clapping, and the "Ole!".
Marvelous chapter. Keep up the good work!

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I am so pleased that happened for you! I actually read the song through while listening until that happens for me hoping that my readers will also have the same experience. You made my day! :yay:

5570410 You are very welcome! Helping my fellow man induces a happy-high in me. :twilightsmile:

Loving these songs, they're so much fun to 'sing along' with in my head. Another awesome chapter, I really feel like I'm watching the show when I read your stories. :D

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