I guess I am doing this again.
I was just a normal student in high school. I went to school, went to Cross Country practice, went home, studied, and went to bed. However, I wake up to find my self surrounded by unicorns, and I don't know why. I don't get a chance to find out, because of there are others determined to find out, no matter what the cost....
First story, hope it is good, fingers crossed!
Find the sequel here. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/244591/hunted
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Great job for a first story!
You've made me care about what happens, which is step one, and you've given me likable characters, which is step two. Again great job. I'll track it.
5379898 Thank you! Don't be afraid to message me ideas! This goes to all readers as well!
5379928 Man all I have to say is keep this up. This is seriously on of the best new stories I have seen so far. Nice story, great settings, and nothing is rushed. Like DerpyMuffin7 said I care about what happens. I LOVE IT!!!!
. Like a boss
Yeah the mechanics suck but the idea's interesting. I want to see where this goes.
Great job! You certainly are doing well for your first story. what's going to happen next? Anyways, thumbs up for the good work!
i liked your story
waiting for more chapters
PS> add your story to groups to attract new readers to it.
5408261 Thanks for the tip!
5408262 you're welcome
Did the ponies think they were just dumb animals?
5408690 You must wait and see, it will all be explained in the next chapter, the humans in the story know just about as much as you do in what the ponies wanted with them.
Why kiil them they havent killed a pony rso far right
I love this story dude once Christmas break is over can you start the next chapter
5416919 The next chapter is almost halfway done, but I'm out shopping for gifts, expect it Christmas eve or Christmas!
5416946 hey i just realized this had a new chapter to it! awesome! now you've really got me in a cliffhanger. I think you should add a kid named Soren who happens to have some helpful resources in his backpack such as books about scouting and other helpful stuff. his main interests can be scouting, survival, electronics, and he likes building stuff with just about anything he can find on the ground. he should be a second class scout.
Just an idea...
5493482 Good idea! I think I have an idea on how to add him into the story... :3
5493496 no problem if you are ever stuck reply to me and I can give you more ideas!
MORE!!!!
Well.........that esulated quickly.......
I......wont........mour!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
My therst for blood shed, pony blood shed needs to be qunched with the salouter of a thousond ponys.
Im sick with exsightment
Please......give........me............MOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUURRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ahahahahshahahahahaha
And so it begins.
Too many Youtube videos inserted into the story. And, the Author's note quote box one in the middle, really?
Seems like this escalated way to fast into murdering the ponies, without any type of talks to try and prevent the deaths. Fluttershy should have tried harder to get Twilight to stop and listen.
Why does this story have a gore tag, but not a dark tag?
YES!!!! Finaly you get it!!! blood blood BLOOOOOOOOOD!!!!! So mutch but not enuff to quench my thirst. My excitment is over welming!!!!!!
Keep it going!!!!! And remember my gun idea.........please!!!!!!! I must have it..........
YYYEEEEAAAAAHHHHH! Fuck them up.
Hey! Sorry I couldn't respond sooner, I was at a basketball game (refs sucked ass). Alright, in order as of 9:18 PM EST. I know it esculated quickly, and I apologize, I might edit it too make it slower, I felt rushed. I will add a dark tag. And yes, the ponies now know.... They fucked up. Also, I will slow down with the YouTube videos. Alright, reading then bed. Goodnight.
5557890 Dark tag added as of 9:21 PM. Thanks for letting me know to add it :3
That escalated quickly...
Some one is getting cocky crashing a wedding that deals with captain of the royal guards and another princess
Well, this is interesting! You have peeked my interest.
Amazing chapter! What happens next? I am so exited!
This kind of reminds me of COD Black ops, the 'Vorkuta' mission, where everyone is screaming "VORKUTA!!! URA!!!!" Anyway, a very good chapter.
5740442 Never played black ops, but I heard its badass :3 thanks!
5740442 egsactly!! they all gave their lives so that someone would at least escape
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"Step eight, Reznov! Freedom!"
"For you Mason! Not for me..."
5741598 what are you doing...REZNOOOOOOOOV!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
(he was never there! he died in Vorkuta, during the escape!) BULSHIT!
Fuck yeah! Go kick their asses! Wonder how the rest of the Elements will react once they hear the humans were being kidnapped and experimented.
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No shit and should be more worries about the changelings coming soon
Why did they kidnap them int the first place?
How about a sequel where Chuck escapes?
Victory!
I wanna know what would celestia do to the human. Give a chance or straight up hang him. Also NUUUU LUNA. U got some interesting story ideas cant wait to see them
Great job! Some mechanics suck, but the story is good, and reminds me of The Maze Runner a little.
Ha! I knew you knew about Maze Runner! *cough* Well.... um.... good story! Yeah! And.... stuff!
5815088 yeah... why? Sequal?
5816529 Now why would I spoil that?
What have you done.......... I dont know what to do now because of one of my favorite stories is finished. I CANT GO ON..... jk
loved the story 8/8 gr8 story m8
5828070 Who said this is done, we still need to know what happens to Chuck, if you see where I am going with this
this is what I was thinking as they left to kick ass and crowe bullule gum.
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I dont know why its has numbers instead of the name...........
Oh yeah. A sequel would be awesome and i will support this idea, and i hope others agree that this was awesome