Huge credit to Kurbz, for grammatic correction; Norsepony, for story guidance; Golden Vision, for a final review; and all three, for pre-reading in general!

I hope to make a somewhat longer romance story for Twilight and Rarity, since there doesn't appear to be a prominent one at the moment, and it's an area where I have some experience. I plan to have this fic light-hearted and full of comedy, contrast to Flying High, Falling Hard, where the relationship is full of drama and angst.

As for fans of that other fic, it is currently undergoing revisions, and the next two chapters are already finished. Be patient, and I'll try to make the home stretch as comfortable as possible for both of us.

first few sentences had me thinking something else

Haha, okay you got me with that first section. Tracked.

Saw the author.

I was like, "Oh, fuck, he's gonna get featured. And I'm gonna help."

Oh well. Now I'm gonna read it.

Very nice.... now I await to see how you incorporate Spike... Will he be understanding, or will he get jealous? only time, and you can tell us

... THIS BETTER FUCKING CONTINUE.

pure brilliance! i haven't enjoyed a fic like this for a very long time!

This is reading like a more light hearted version of the Twility bits of Romance Reports. Thumbs up, looking forward to more!

TWILIGHT SPARKLE: Master of the bedroom eyes  

I like where this is going

HAHAHA, this story shall be a great pain to me if it's TwixRarity....because there is only SpikexRarity or death by retro lancer.

>>557732557732

You're everywhere! Stop following me!

I'll edit this later when I've read it.

“Now listen,” she began, “I don’t know what kind of girls you took us for, but we are not looking for any one night stand, and we are most certainly not looking for one with a group.”

"OH COME ON!"

This story is awesome btw.

"Just bash your eyelashes at him while he takes our orders and give him a wink.”

you cannot imagine the mental image this gave me.

>>557616557616

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Also, this made me laugh pretty hard and seems like a fun story. FAV'D

I like this very much so

>>557819557819

Oh, good morning, Nano.

>>557867557867

Oh, good morning, Kev.

>>555428555428

Oh, good morning, soundslikeponies.

...That's all I know.

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Who would've thought Pony-fics would have gotten me to like shipping. This one is obviously no exception.

I must say, this leaves ample enough room to work on a sequel if the thought ever crossed your mind. I would be more than eager to read it also.

With that being said, loved the fimfic.

Cheers!

Kyor

Edit: Noticed the 'Incomplete' sign. Made my day.

pretty darn awesome plz do more soon

Twirarity? Yus pleaz

I was kind of hoping Twilight would "accept" Chalice's offer, because there is all kinds of drama that can be found with that option.

But rarity, i want to know how for ponies would work....

great story! you've just been tracked!

*see cover

Aww, that's cute.  Let's take a looksy.

*See title

That sounds like fun.  I can guess where this is going.

*Read first sentence of description

This is gonna be good.

*Read second sentence

Oh.

*See it's by soundslikeponies

FUCK YES, I'M READING THIS

i love the trolling at the beginning  

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“No, I mean it! I really can’t dance!”

I suffer with you, Twilight. I suffer with you.

It felt very right, that thing; Rarity is so positive and wants to be so encouraging, so she makes that common mistake: when you tell someone to do X and they tell you they can't do X they are usually right!

“The Salt Around the Rim.”

I'm not sure if i should hit you or give you a hearty pat on the back.

You had me at

"Twilight moaned in ecstasy."

>first couple of sentences

>

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as a man who cannot dance, i feel both twi's and sieurins pain last time i tried to dance i stoped the room

Pssst! Hey guys,I think Twilight has a crush on Rarity.

they dont have bars in ponyville but nice story

A Rarilight by soundslikeponies . Story is off to a good start. Looking forward to more.

All aboard the shipping transatlantic!

Awesome. I like how Rarity has some clue about romance without being constantly right about it (eg. "you have to laugh even if it's not funny"), and how you kept it ambiguous whether Rarity has actually picked up on how Twilight is feeling towards her. Fav'd.

Finally! A fic that doesn't make Rarity seem like such an uptight and posh pony, and actually portrays her as a girl with standards that likes to have fun. I'll be keeping an eye on this.

>First few sentences

>Know immediately that they're being massaged

The sexual innuendo is a nice and familiar taste of overused.

it's.....it's....beautiful

(sees only Rarity and Twilight character tags. sees a romance tag. sees an image of Twilight hugging Rarity.

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It's an RarityxTwilight fic, is it?

>>559205559205 Are you high? No way man! Not in a million years!

Very entertaining fic.  I'll be following this one with interest.

Fun fact: I went nearly a year thinking colt-cuddler and filly-fooler were ponyspeak for pedophiles.  

>>559205559205 disgusting lies and slander

>>560381560381

>>560483560483

You guys are right, I have no idea what I was talking about, I must have been driven insane by the Pony-Madness, Twilight is totally going to take the knowledge she gets from Rarity, and court her true hearts desire, The Great and Powerful Trixie.

>>560510560510 That's a funny way to spell Pinkie Pie.

Don't know this all seems a little... Fast for me.

Had a good dose of comedy and I was actually expecting a bar fight to break out during the part with Chalice, so you get my attention. Let's see how this develops =)

>>560483560483

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>>560521560521

Honestly I have only ever read one TwiPie that I didn't think was bad, I found it on EQD a long time ago, and for the life of me I can't find it again, but more importantly, we ALL know that Twixie is the some of the best shipping around, because the only-thing better than The Great and Powerful Trixie is the great and powerful relationship, she will have with Twilight.

>>560593560593 I'm just being silly anyway.  I don't really favor one pairing above any other.

Twixie has The Ballad of Twilight Sparkle in it's favor, so there's that.

>>560607560607

If you limit what you read just because you don't like the idea of a certain paring then I think you have missed the entire point of the show, so I do agree with you on that, and The Ballad of Twilight Sparkle is my favorite hands-down, also I remembered that fic I mentioned, Causality.

>>560650560650 I remember Causality!  I think that might actually have been the first Pony shipfic I ever read.

Another shipfic by soundslikeponies? I'm on board!

Oooh, and it's one of the less common ship, too! Not enough good Raritwi out there.

>>560670560670

Are you serious?! That was the first fic I ever read! Then it was Ponies make War, which was a huge change of direction.

>>560701560701 Yeah, it was the fic that really sold me on the fact that yeah, shipfics can be just as good as any other type of fic.

And Ponies Make War is totally second best grimdark fic.

looking forward to see what happens with this next! Please update soon!

This is off to a great start! Both in characterizations, details of the settings and situations and overall presentation.

Particular points of enjoyment? The end scene, when Twilight flirted with Carrot Top, and Rarity catching Twilight with her rear in the mirror. One was wonderfully endearing and heartwarming, one was an extremely adorable scene, and the last was a hilarious comedic moment that was utterly original.

Bravo good sir, take my thumb and star!

Excellent characterizations, sir.  You manage mature issues with making the ponies unpony-like. I really hope for a continuation.

>>560751560751

Second best? What could be better than Ponies make War?

>>560812560812 Fallout Equestria.  It's easily the best fanfic I've ever read, in any fandom.  Better than most actual books I've read, too.

>>560850560850

I really should get around to reading that.

>>560483560483

An understandable mistake... okay not really, just remember, it's like calling someone boy or girl when they're in their twenties or older, not youth identification, just familiarity and informalness. Also, while this fanbase on the whole stays away from the pedo scene, I dimly recall ponies who like little ponies inappropiately being called "foal-fiddlers", just a small tidbit for you.

>>560947560947 I think it's more just that I hadn't really ever seen it in the context necessary to really make the leap that colt didn't actually refer to colts until recently.  

x1000

Man, as someone who has also spent his life forgoing romance for studying, I could not possibly identify with Twilight more in this story (except that I actually have some idea of what I would like in a woman), while Rarity is in fine form as always.

This would have been a fantastic one-shot, but to read that first comment makes me very, very happy. The ending seems fairly obvious, given the genre... but as with the Phoenix Wright games (first example that came to mind ), it's about the journey, not the destination.

I can't wait to see more.

Permission to come aboard ship?

This sounds like a cute idea and I want to know where it goes from here!

I didn't use to like shipping fic until I came to this site but now I keep reading amazing ones! This one is no exception!

Moar... Rarilight, Twity... Twility... Twarity...Twirty... fuck.

Give us more Sweet Twi and Hella Rare!

Okay, so is this a multi-part story, or a one-shot? I could see it being either right now.

Wow, the first fanfic I've ever read where the two ponies that invite another pony into a little group 'interaction' is simply given a polite denial instead of getting browbeaten, insulted, and called a sick pervert.

Kudos for that.

I usually don't mind shipping netween the mane six, its usually pretty good, but for some reason I found myself hoping that this wouldn't turn out like that. Oh well, great story, though. Can't wait to read more

This intrigues me. Very well, you have my track.

And my thumb.

And my axe!

It is rare to find a good story where shipping is the focus, so many fall short, but your writing is big and strong like bull elephant.

I felt myself pulled right into this story. Can't wait for the next chapter!

that's how you write romance. nicely done.

and: without drama!

" She liked mares."

I stopped reading there, but somehow I think this fic will benefit in how to chat with girls for the future.:D

something new from soundslikeponies? this will be a good read for sure.

really nice so far, but near the end of the chapter I found myself thinking that poor carrot top was really cute... I would like to officially suggest her as the second love interest just to add more drama to the story! everypony knows that a good love story has a third party (and if you read Mangas a forth and a fifth and a sixth and a seventh...)

indigo is a shade of blue I thought?

In the words of Rarity "YES!"

No. How dare you. Just as things were getting interesting you end the chapter.

Oh right. I see what you did there.

Very good so far can't wait for the next chapter.

So I saw this in the featured box and was like, "eh, maybe I'll read it later." Then I saw the author and was like "there goes my lunch break."

I finally finished to read this. Great story.

Sure Rarity, "dance"....

>>557787557787

I beg to differ

Fav'd thumbs up, and you earned a new stalk- err watcher.

When I see Twilight and Rarity on the cover picture of the story and it's a shipping story, I have no choice but to follow.

At beginning I was a bit like . nice story btw

So, I normally don't ship Raritwi, and in fact have never heard of that pairing before.

This is a damn good fic and you should continue.

Also, that last part in the bar was awkward.

Hmmm... A RariTwi ship? Do I like it? Let's think about that...

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This was totally worth being featured. I loved this. Thank you.

>>560593560593 Twipie is best ship

>>557687557687

By jealous, you mean jealous of... oh, Twilight! We still dont know for sure how anypony will react (including Rarity ) so keep that in mind.

The story shows promise, though I see it running into an issue whereby there is little conflict.

I like where this story's going!  I'll keep an eye on it.

>>563093563093 You don't stand a chance... i'm gonna stab you in the gut then slash your throat, that's how Gears do.

I love it, it really kept me interested the whole way through. I hope this continues. I'd really like to see if anything happens between Rarity and Twilight.

Give me MORE

Plz

i falled in "Twilight Moans in ecstasy"

it's such a great Fimfic, keep up the good work

Guhuhuhu! That was so cute!

This shows promise.

I want a new chapter please

“Well, we can’t go shopping if we don’t know where the market is now can we?”

... XD Okay, I admit it, I died laughing there! Great job! (Bastard.)

... Is it sad that I didn't even miss the double meaning of the first couple paragraphs? I just assumed that they were at the spa... I mean, if Twi doesn't know anything about dating, then why would she... You know. Sorry if I let you down by not seeing it... ANYWHOOZLE... Lookin great! Looking forward to moar!

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where are these people getting their custom emoticons...?

>>565120565120

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YES IT'S NOT A ONE-SHOT!!!!!!!!

I like it. This story is the perfect mix of humor and interest. Great writing. However you were a bit too obvious with your foreshadowing. I could tell that she was going to end up with Rarity from the first thoughts about her.

>>557787557787

I support this comment.

Great story, by the way. A bit fast, but a helluva lot more concise than the one I wrote. I see that as a good thing, by the way.

...even though I'm a huge SpikexRarity guy myself, this is a cute story that had me rooting for Twilight there at the end.

And I absolutely love the cold start. Hilarious.

--576 Belligerent Coil was here