"Violence for violence is the rule of beasts" - Barack Obama
Ponyville has come adrift. It no longer sings its songs and sleeps its nights, it drifts through shifting shadows and the hiss of entropy. Princess Luna's influence has vanished and the diarch herself is nowhere to be found.
Pipsqueak still believes the pony she met as a foal is out there. And she'll find her.
If her mind doesn't slip away first.
Edited by the unparalleled themaskedferret and pre-read by the loveable ScarletWeather.
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Interesting choice, making Pip a female. Awesome story, though. The back and forth between Luna and Pip was nice.
What can I say, Pipsqueak and Luna go well together. You written them well here.
Hmm.. to bad this was a short one shot. I would have loved more but I can also see that any more detail or explanation would have hurt the over all narrative. Aside from the couple spots of seemingly pointless fluff this was really good.
Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. 10/10 would most definitely bang
Intriguing. I was too tired when I read it to have much in the way of immediate thoughts, but this sets up a lot of cool ideas. The only big criticism I'd have would be that the owl ending feels kinda incomplete; I'm sure there's some deep symbolism there that makes everything fit together, what with owls being night birds and all, but from where I stand it doesn't feel like so much of a resolution. The ending itself is properly foreshadowed, but its significance isn't.
At any rate, there are some people I need to point at this story. TG!Pipsqueak needs to be more of a thing.
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Wow. You are seriously trolling the wrong author, seeing as how I was literally doing just that as you came here for your drive-by insult.
(Disclaimer: I'm not actually certain any of my audience were waitstaff)
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I'm stealing that for my userpage.
Mystery upon mystery. I like that. And I liked the use of pipsqueak too, with that brief but charged exploration of her past, and the idea that her experience and Luna's are so similar.
Very dreamlike. I like it.
Fascinating and criminally under-appreciated.
Like, actually criminal. I feel the urge to take this fic to court. A highly publicized case, of course, with as much controversy as possible.
If that wouldn't drive circulation, nothing will.
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It's not what the figure at the end is.
It's who it is.
(you'll probably start giggling or kick yourself if you didn't catch it the first time)
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The only owl I can think of in MLP canon is Owlowiscious*, who has had exactly zero interaction with Luna in the series, and who is not particularly associated with dreams.
Whatever I'm missing here, I'm all ears. (You probably ought to spoiler it for the benefit of later readers.)
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Think of who buried the owl in the first place. Luna's just raising Twi's owl from the dead as her new avatar, and picking him specifically because harmony etc. Also because that last 'who' is basically just a silly gag.
Basically, all the lore you need to understand the ending is in the ending xD
You do know Pip is a colt or was it intentional?
I always love stories about Luna that feel like dreams, which this does. The language is just lovely, and it has that making-sense-somehow feeling that dreams do; even though nothing is fully explained, even given Luna's exposition near the end, it still all fits together.
Trans Pip was an interesting and purposeful step, but the ending just leaves me scratching my head. :/ Not even the comments have made it anything like satisfying.
I'll echo PresentPerfect's comments. I loved what you did with Pip, and there's some really atmospheric writing here. But that ending... it just doesn't make sense to me, and (it would seem) I'm not alone in that. Still a like, but I was hoping it would have been a favourite.
Have I ever mentioned that I fucking love dream shit in stories? Cause I do. This is literally perfect.