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Horizon Spark


Writing My Little Pony stories for you so I can one day become an amazing author! Please comment and tell me what you think.

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After the Battle of the Bands, Sunset Shimmer goes with Twilight back to Equestria to make an apology to Princess Celestia after all these years. Not knowing that Celestia needs to make an apology herself.

Alternate universe story that takes place after Rainbow Rocks.

My second story with a little more depth, just as I said. Featuring one of my new favorite characters: Sunset Shimmer

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 19 )

I knew I was going to kick my self Awesome start so far I did notice one Minor Error how ever

Sunset only held her arm as she explained. “Last night I’ve doing a lot of thinking,....

'I've' honestly should be changed to 'I was '

Other then that your in the clear now to set up my book fort to wait for the next Chapter

Man, that beginning was super rough. This sums up my thoughts on it quite nicely:

Show us things, please. Don't tell us. And especially don't tell us things we already know. If we're reading this story, you can safely assume we've seen the movie.

As for the rest? It was decent enough. Hopefully you can take it interesting places.

jesus christ cant wait for next assumption! i really cant wait for more

I really like this story so far hope to read more soon

Not a bad start. Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Your that thief that stole Twilight’s crown

*You're

And after that, I noticed a lot of grammatical mistakes. I strongly suggest finding yourself an editor.

This third and final chapter was worth the wait. I have my own theory about what happened when Sunset turned the tide at the Battle of the Bands, but this works just as well. Well done.

Somepony must have accidentally misplaced it on the donation cart I sent to you.

Yeah... Accidentally

:ajsmug:

just a few examples of what Csquared08 was referring to.

return it back to the library [redundant ]
she finally spatted [ sputtered ]
but I didn't taught you like Twilight [ teach ]

Now this is how Rainbow Rocks should have ended:pinkiehappy: with sunset going back to Equestria and appoligize to Princess Celistia. I really hope they let her come back in season 5 or the next movie

That was a good story Sunset Shimmer is my favorite character to:pinkiehappy: maybe will see this happen in the next movie or season 5 im crossing my fingers

That Indiana Jones reference... 10/10.

nice story. I'm playing with a similiar tale with Sunset going back as well
as the Equestria Girls following her so they can meet their counterparts.
they also have a friend who is a quantam genius and uses calculations
to stabilize the portal so the girls maintain their human form. very
poigant and well done.

Chapter 2 needs some editing, but otherwise it was a fun read :twilightsmile:

Grammar could do with overlooking but very well written nonetheless an impressive short story! :fluttercry:

Oh and by the way im doing one similar to this story about the CMC if you want to check it out :rainbowlaugh:

Great story!
I love it when you write stories about sunset shimmer!

“The Elements of Harmony are very mysterious, even I don’t know the full extent of their power. Although, I think I know why you're connected,” Celestia said as she wrapped her hoof around Sunset. “Like I said, you were the perfect candidate to wield the Element of Magic. When you stepped up to help your friends in the fight with the Sirens, you must’ve tapped into it and used it to defeat them. It seems that when you finally saw the true power of Friendship, and used it in your friends time of need, the spark finally ignited. Making you connected to them. Of course it’s just a theory.”

Or perhaps
Another Element had partially formed

“Anytime.” Rainbow let go then headed down the Street. “Now enough of this mushy stuff. The new ‘Daring Do and the Kingdom of the Crystal Heart’ movie is out, and we still got time to get to the movies if we hurry. So let’s go already.”

CAREFUL!
i heard that movie wasnt the best!
I mean that magical nuke scene was unbelievable!

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