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TooShyShy


Fan fiction. The final frontier.

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Except for the occasional adventure, the ponies' lead pretty dull lives. Luckily, a certain God of Chaos wants to change that. He's got a story planned out for each of them and knows exactly what he wants them to do, say, and feel. But ponies aren't always the most cooperative of creatures, are they? Sometimes they just insist on writing their own stories! How can Discord deal with a group of equines who, despite the author's plans, just won't stick to the script?

Note: Based on "The Stanley Parable", an ingenious adventure game. If you haven't at least seen a little footage of the game, you might not entirely understand this story. I suggest looking up the game (you don't have to buy it, just learn a little about it) before reading this. It isn't 100% necessary, but if you're confused about any parts of the story, I highly suggest finding out more about "The Stanley Parable".

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Comments ( 45 )

This is pretty great, hats off to you! I think you nailed the narrator pretty well!

I could eat something now...

...nope. Must read.

Huh, not quite sure about it. The humour certainly doesn't stick to the show and breaks barriers itself. An attempt, if we want to call it something.

*cough*

 It was so lucky that Princess Celestia sent her sent her there to study!

So after you finish talking to Applejack....and eating those delicious apples.....and writing an essay about said apples....  Maybe you could go help Pinkie?

I shouldn't read after proofreading. Certainly not.

Pretty good work getting the humour of the game down. Not being a game changes a lot of things in the dynamic, but having different characters should be interesting... I will definitely be keeping an eye on this.

As a fan f both the game and Discord himself I must say this is hilarious. You have captured the true self aware nature of the ingenious Stanley Parable and crossed it nicely with MLP. And that rule 34 joke was hilarious. As the first fanfic I read (except for that one with the cupcakes) it is very funny, creative and pretty awesome. Great job :D

I love it! It's just like the game!

just like the game.:moustache:
keep it up!

The humor definitely fits with the game however, personally, I feel that some of the humor that was adapted from the game itself was lost in text.

The humor in a The Stanley Parable revolves around the tone of voice of the narrator and while you are doing a good job at portraying it, I just can't properly get a 'feel' for it. Might be because it doesn't feel as satisfying on a personal level to hear what the narrator would say and how they would say it while the character did whatever they wanted to do.

Don't misunderstand that this is a negative comment but just some personal feedback on how some readers might feel when reading a story like this. I do applaud your use and execution of the humor however and would still encourage you to continue writing more of this for those that do enjoy it to the fullest of extents.

Reading this with John De Lancie's voice is pretty damn hilarious.

Do you have any idea what Stanley Parable is? Evidently not.

What you've done here is taken a game, something which has player determination and the illusion of choice, and tried to apply it's tropes to a linear story. You don't seem to have any understanding of the medium you're working in.

The point of Stanley Parable is to poke fun at gaming conventions. Of how they trick you into feeling emotions, how they can get you to follow paths and how you have no real choice in a game. This? This misses the point. Instead of making a fic that played around with literary conventions- Things like omnipresent narration, linear story structure- You choose to make a shallow, unfunny, limited copy of a work in another medium.

Oh, and it should be The Twilight Parable. The character is the subject, not the narrator.

No way to make Stanley Parable pornography? You underestimate the power of Rule 34.

It is not impossible to make a porn parody of a story with only two characters, one of which is a disembodied voice. It is merely challenging. And you just know some depraved whackjob somewhere is more than up to a challenge.

You should make this a series with all of the mane 6 and some background ponies.

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Please do not look in one of my stories.

You will NOT be satisfied.

TGM

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Perhaps that's because the stanley parable is a game and not a piece of fiction.

Personally I think you're just setting your standards too high, how can you expect to get the same experience from a story that you got from a game? Some things are bound to be different.

This was awesome, I love how it followed the style of the original game. I can even imagine the narrator's voice as I read it. :pinkiehappy:

You got to do atleast do one for Celestia and Luna.

Hopefully Fluttershy will cooperate with Discord.

Since I'm so boring I put you to sleep, how about a bedtime story? Once upon a time, there was a show called My Little Human: Technology is Magic. It was a beautiful show about humans having all sorts of amazing adventures for the whole family. But a lot of ponies shunned the show. They thought it would only appeal to pink pegasi with eyepatches who danced on Tuesdays and liked smooth jazz. However, over time the show began to draw in viewers who didn't fit this description. These ponies realized that the show was good for reasons that could appeal to anypony. In the spirit of friendship, they joined together to create a massive group of fans. Naturally, also in the spirit of friendship as defined by Ponytube, a large group of outsiders rose up to teach them the most important life lesson of them all: “Nopony is allowed to like something outside of their target demographic because it makes them a disgusting excuse for a pony who gets off to it”. While some of the fans shrank away at this abuse, others disagreed and continued to enjoy the show. And they all lived happily ever after....but didn't.

Well, if Discord hadn't approached AJ right after the end of applebuck season, maybe she would have been more active.

I have a feeling that in the end, Discord will have to narrate himself :derpytongue2:

Discord, don't forget to bring Fluttershy back into existence!

this is interesting............

... What did I read? :twilightoops:

Apparently "My Little Denariians" is under the similar list for this fic. I like the Stanley Parable, but now I'm just curious as to why the site connected these two stories.

i'm so fucking lost right now...

5580669 Genius and chaos. So... much... chaos

welp, this is when Discord tries to be the narrator.

Poor Discord. He isn't getting a break, huh?

5580732 So is Friendship is Butter...

Why not after discord has done all the mane six he go's to get help from a professional narrator, in other words meeting the narrator from THE STANLEY PARABLE.

Pinkie, you are so macabre.

What, I made a sandwich
Hello
Don't acknowledge me!!!

This made me laugh hysterically, I love Pinkie, XD

So... brain... hurt... why... is... pain... brain... story...end... Uh:applejackconfused:

Absolutely the best!... Pinkie is adorable.

This is really funny! One problem though, you might want to work on your horse puns a bit. For example,-haha, I feel a bit awkward commenting on this particular line, given that I'm like, thirteen, but-

a first edition of “Fifty Shades of Pony” signed by the author, 

Just "Pony"? Isn't that a bit like saying "Fifty Shades of Human"? Maybe you could try "Fifty Shades of Dappled Gray"? Just a suggestion. :twilightsheepish:

Another thing I wanted to bring up was the way Rarity orders a "Bloody Pony" and just like..c'mon, man. Zecpra doesn't just speak in Seuss quotes. "Bloody Mare-y".
Other than that, this is amazing! I love your Discord voice, and this story will probably hit my faves!

SCP Foundation reference?

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"Fifty shades of hay"

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