Short pieces revolving around the realtime holidays as they come and go, featuring anthology-style stories
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Sweet story. Happy Flanksgiving (Thanksgiving)!
"Carriers."
Oh, my. Okay.
1.) Missing "it."
2AB.) "Became."
3AB.) You need commas between the emboldened word pairs.
Just one? Joking aside, the "a" is superfluous. And bad grammar since it comes before a vowel sound.
Extra space.
That "well" is not part of the sentence before it. It is part of the sentence fragment that follows it.
It is jarring to see nicknames outside of dialogue. The narrator calls Apple Bloom "Bloom" several times and it makes it hard to immerse myself into the story.
I am sorry if this comment comes off as a little curt. It is well past midnight and I am tired and surly. This story is sweet and heartwarming and I would like to see more. You have earned a favorite and a like.
KBO.
5314152 Going in to fix everything right now, I really failed apparently D:
Oh, like the movie. The number should be written out.
These animals don't listen, no, not one little bit.
They run around out of control and throw their hissy fits.
It's up to me to stop them, cause plainly you can see.
It's got to be my destiny, and it's what my cutie mark is telling me.
And the gazebo... and the nail shop...
I would have figured that the Carriers of Harmony plushies would have all been bought up by stallions in their mid twenties to early thirties. Who then made them into "hoof and horn warmers."
KBO.
I am really disappointed in Rainbow Dash in this one. I would have figured that since she and Scootaloo were so close, she would have been happy to leave Scootaloo one of the plushies she had. But the Silver Spoon with a heart of gold angle was a sweet touch.
KBO.
She does a beautiful job but no one can compare to the original, Jodi Benson! She's the best!
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