I'm a brony who likes to write. HA! And you thought this would be a long, detailed description, didn't you?! Joke's on you, my sarcasm triumphs over all! -cough- Erm...um...yeah.
A colt with with no memory wakes up in the Everfree Forest only to find that his once human body is now the body of a pony's! After meeting another pony and forming a rescue team with her, their investigations lead them to discover a dark secret that could threaten to destroy Equestria. Could the increase of monsters and disappearance of the Elements of Harmony be tied to the amnesiac colt?
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Seems interesting. Only for the idea, you receive a moustache
But, for the rest, let's read it later.
Okay. Nice idea (as far as I know, original), and well-executed.
I look forward to more of this.
I remember these games, too.
Really engaging, if you took it seriously. I hope this story will show that same depth the games did, without simply re-hashing the game's story with ponies. There's no point just re-writing a story.
Also, throw in a couple griffins, please? They seem kind of ideal in terms of the whole "action and adventure" this story will no doubt hold.
That said, you have a plethora of creatures to use from the MLP universe.
This is gonna be good.
PMD is an awesomely underrated game series. PMD with ponies, though...could work. Two staches and a yay for you:
I bucking LOVED this game. You get a fave. Do not disappoint me.
I just nostalgia'd everywhere. Do not disappoint me.
Read the story already! Loved it!
Despite a few errors with some sentences (which weren't that big of a deal), it had great wording and was easy to image in my mind. Overall, I really like this series and everything! Hope the next chapter is as great as this! 
514707 Aw man, I nostalgia'd all over my shirt. Oh well, it never looked good on me anyways...
Love it so far keep it up
Ohhhhh shit, I knew this one was coming.
I can check off one more crossover that's been done!
Story is watched!
...i frikking love you man. *owns every game in th' PMD collection from th' original Red Rescue Team to th' newest installment, Explorers of Sky.*
The mystery dungeon series was one of my favorite sets of pokemon games, so seeing it being so well meshed with ponies is wonderful! I'm going to have to be sure to follow this.
You guys have no idea how much these comments mean to me
My work in the past has only got put down and here I was thinking this was just "meh" but 12 positive comments overnight? You all have made me a very happy pony 
Expect chapter 2 sometime next week! 
Wait a minute... it's Sunday... so, by next week, you either mean in more than seven days, or you're one of those people that think the new week starts on Monday. Either way, we have a problem here. Lol, just kidding
Great story though. I'm very interested to see where you're going with it.
Actually, I finished chapter 2 tonight! All of this positive feedback motivated me to work my flank off~
I'm not sure whether to upload it tonight or keep you all in suspense for a week 
Dinky=caterpie. I GET it now!
Hmm... Does anyone else totally see the possibility of game-ifying this? I mean, it really depends on where the plot goes and stuff... but it is based partly off an actual game, so that helps. lol
I dunno if my story is good enough to be turned into a game, but I'll let you guys decide!
Shouldn't be that hard if Eight Bit makes her own electrical entertainment. Lulululul
Hmmm seems good. Will try to read.
Read. Whooooooah!
I like Pokemon Myster Dungeon Explorers of Time/Darkness/Sky more than Red/Blue Rescue team but still, nice story. Promising.
581607 Well I have good news for you! This isn't a direct adaptation of Red/Blue Rescue Team, I'll be taking elements from both and combining them to make an entirely new story
D'awwww. Very good. You might want to add how they got the equipment and badges and stuff though, I was confused with that.
582274 I explained how Silver Blade got the sword, and it's implied that Eight Bit got the badges from Twilight, but as to where she got the saddlebag? It's a secret now, but keep reading. It'll get explained
583281 but why did Twilight have the badges?
*glomp*
this is fucking perfect man. fucking perfect.
583626 If I told you now, it wouldn't be a surprise! I promise you it'll get explained though
584124 okay
Randomly surfing through stories... and I see this. As stated by a few people above, very original for the most part (as far as I know), and pretty good start. It felt a tad rushed at the end (Eight Bit's already willing to help him uncover his past? Well, I guess when you have the land of Equestria and you get into a fight with Timber Wolves, things tend to happen. Probably just me being over-critical.), but overall, it had a nice feel to it. I only caught one grammar error (and now I can't find it... T_T), but it didn't mess with the flow of the story.
Well, onwards to chapter 2!
Pretty good, and I only caught 4 errors on my first read through of it:
Wow, I thought, This pony was generous. 8-Bit nodded her gratitude and we walked out. I looked at her.
Not sure if that comma after 'thought' is supposed to be a period mark, or if you accidently capitalize the 'T' in 'This.'
“Sky pony will regret coming here!” the diamond dog that got hit with ruby roared at her.
There should be a 'the' between 'with' and 'ruby.'
I leaped up headbutt’d him in the back, causing him to topple over his own paws and sprawl over the floor.
Should be 'I leaped up and headbutted...' You forgot 'and' between 'up' and 'headbutted.' Also, 'headbutted' is the correct word, I believe.
And then one more:
8-Bit was still hurling the gems and the diamond dogs.
the gems AT the diamond dogs. She must be the Hulk if she's throwing the Diamond Dogs too! 0_0 (Haha, just kidding on that xD). This tends to happen when writing on auto-pilot. Happens to me some times too.
And that's all I spotted that I have time to find. Onwards to chapter 3.
Oh, I see the error I saw in Chapter 2 that I forgot:
You're saying 'defiantly' instead of 'definitely.'
If you're defiant, you're going against rules or someone (best example I can think of is: He was defiant to the will of his parents.)
Where as definitely is 'I most likely will.'
ex:
I'll definitely go and do that!
One more error I spotted:
The one that had vomited me up roared and the other quarray eel’s looked at it before beginning to retreat back into their holes. 8-Bit galloped over to me.
'eel's' should just be 'eels.'
It's multiple eels, and the 's after a noun is showing posession, so no need for that apostrophe. Ex: Bob's pen. Eel's tooth. I
AND now that my inner helper (*cough* Grammar Nazi *cough*) has finished proof-reading due to it's boredom, I can now comment on the story:
It's looking great so far, and I'm looking for to reading this from now on. Hah! The summer 'aint got nothing on me! Also, these last 3 weeks of school with be pretty stressful, so fan-fictions are a great way to kick back and relax. Well, see you on the next chapter, and whatever you do, don't give up on this story... or I will find you... and Sparta-Kick you into a well and force you to write a story (if you've ever read Stephen King's "Misery," you'll know what to expect.... JUST KIDDING!
My sense of humor is terrible.
586633 LIES! Your sense of humor is awesome. I appreciate your support, but more than that I appreciate your criticism!
Seriously, I didn't notice those things until you pointed it out. Actually, if you're going to pay that much attention to the grammar, do you have a non-personal email in which I can send the chapters to? If not, I'd appreciate you pointing out every error you find 
586633 And another thing you are correct on: School is PONY HELL
Actually, because I've been pretty busy this weekend I haven't had time to write the next chapter 
I'll TRY as much as I can release chapters and weekly intervals but next week's chapter may come a little late...
587424 Yeah, freshman year IS pretty chaotic. But I've been surviving
Maybe pony fanfictions will relieve our stress 
589118
True Dat. I hate having to wait for updates on stories (I have a lot of stories I watch, thankfully.), but I hate when I finish the story even more, because then that's the end of a good story. I'm thinking about starting up a fanfiction, but the ideas are still kind of jumbled around in my head. I have the basic idea, but the kind of setting is a bit hard to fathom... should it take place in the Falliout: Equestria realm, or should it just be some kind of modernized Equestria? The amount of advanced Science that'd be taking place in it makes it hard to figure out :|.
Anyway, enough about my planning, when can I expect the new chapter to be released? As I answered earlier, I'll be your little grammar soldier or w/e you need me to be, so I'll hound through chapters looking for those errors and sentence fragments. It'll be good practice for me anyways. Also, 8-Bit is pretty cool so far. Her entire character just radiates "Cool dawg." Annnnnnnnnd now I get Pro As Heck Guide to Master Yi stuck in my head... stupid YouTube videos. Well, see you tomorrow... after school... *mumble*
Also, I have Skype, so if you have it as well, that might provide a better means of contact. (However, I get depressed randomly on Skype, which is a truly hilarious spectacle, so I've been told... not funny for me though.)
589175 I've got Skype as well. "Swordoftimeandlight" is the name, randomness is my game! If you went depressed on me via Skype I'd probably end up counseling you
And yeah, I wanted to write 8-Bit as kind of a tomboyish, generally cool character 
As for your story, do whatever feels write! (Sorry, bad pun...) The most import thing is to make ideas your own and just start writing! And yeah, I respect the fact that quite a few people read this so I'll update roughly once a week. Expect chapter 4 anywhere from this Saturday-Monday! 
590350
*throws an inspiration at you*
Saturday or Sunday...
And yes, I'm allowed to make 'inspiration' work in any sentence. My Contact Request is going to be random... like a bo$$...
Hey everypony! Just thought I'd like to let you know that I'm gonna work my flank off to try and get you guys the newest chapter this weekend! Btw, shiz is starting to get real
617137 As I told KingOfTheMuffins, I greatly appreciate your correcting of my errors
I would take more time to look over them, but I'm really focused on getting at least one chapter out a week 
Speaking of which, chapter 4 tonight is where the story really starts to take off 
Interesting...
Shit just hit the fan!
Ooooooh snap!
617842 As I derp once again!
Where would I be without you wonderful people to clean up my grammer messes 
I'm assuming Twilight is Chatot if we're going by Time/Darkness...
When can we see Wigglytuff?
We're going by Red/Blue more then Darkness/Time?
twilight.ponychan.net/chan/arch/src/130981456390.gif
617920 I'm kinda merging the games, so I don't really have a Wigglytuff character in mind yet
But if you haven't made a couple of the already established connections Dinky = Caterpie, Derpy = Butterfree, Twilight = Chatot, Star Swirl = Absol 
617938 I literally laughed out loud
617952 Nope! We're taking the best elements of both and merging 'em to create a story more epic than the originals
oh dude. Twilight's gunna have a fangasm.