tl;dr, read later

new story and it's all done. SWEET! tbh i was expecting the roommate to be the guy from valiant's story

edit: also, never had this chance before.... first?... dammit missed it again

It's up! Huzzah!

Finally!

Oooh, pretty nice so far.  However, I don't think RD would say "You need to focus on friendship".  That doesn't seem like a line she would say...

Just, before I read: Wat.

We used to have fingerprinting as our school meals payment system - Rainbow really would've been screwed then.

For some reason when I read the description I thought there was going to be some weird pony on human action. Then I saw that there was no Romance tag...I was relieved yet oddly disappointed.

>>742417742417

It's not happening in this story, but the ending is open enough that a clop sequel could be written.

...by someone else

DaFuqEsDisSheet?

Added to my to-read list. Looks to be one of the few "human interacts with ponies"  fics that wouldn't make me projectile vomit through the screen and into the faces of those dastardly criminals who write such... even looks to be thourhgly entertaining - and coming from Totally, it more than likely backs that up.

Pfft. Apples. Who would want to buy overpriced and undersupported computers like those?

>>742449742449 The Apple family?

Yeah, I think this is the human/pony story we've all been looking for. No romance tag, no sad tag... original perhaps? I'll have to read this once my next two chapters are complete however. Busy week

Needs more tormenting of the ickle freshie.

Just finished. Boo yeah. Hooked on phonics has lead me to read at acceptable and speedy rates.

Oh yeah. Also, I like it.

As soon as I read the title, the only thing I could think of was,

"They're makin' a left turn!"

>>742573742573

If you don't like it, clopify it yourself.  I won't get mad.

>>742578742578

It was a joke.

Im no good at writing anything erotic or romantic.

Im great at details and dialogue though.

Hmmm, yeah, I don't really get American Football, either; it seems like just a namby-pamby copy of Rugby that borrowed a name off the real version of Football.

Uhg, Thanksgiving disasters are one thing I think I can live without.

So I clicked on this story thinking I'd give it a shot because it was an interesting concept.

An hour and a half later, I read the entire thing in one sitting.

You are amazing.

>>742611742611

Aw, thanks.  I do what I can.

>>742565742565 My thought was, "Laying in my hotel room watching NASCAR and drinking beer!"

>>Doctor Whooves

Amen

No one understands NASCAR - it's not just Canadians, trust me. I mean, it's just cars racing round an oval track (not even an interesting shape) until... well, I'm not exactly sure what.

Beer festival?

Spam is disgusting. It's almost as bad as smash.

Also, my dad would kill you if he ever heard you say that tofu was a meat/poultry substitute. Apparently, it's a food in it's own right, and if I ever mentioned it again he was disowning me.

Lose citizenship in Equestria? The first thing that came to my mind was dual citizenship. But then I read up on that a bit and discovered that the USA don't really support that, once you become a US citizen, you lose citizenship of other countries.

Then again, Equestria may not acknowledge that, and still consider Rainbow a citizen (like the UK does?). I think it would be entirely up to the princesses, and I doubt they would officially revoke the citizenship just because the USA say so . Rainbow is the Element of Loyalty, after all, and a national hero.

In the end, while the USA might see Rainbow only as an American citizen, Equestria may see Rainbow as an Equestrian and American citizen. At least I think that's what would happen.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png

... I'm thinking too much.

Wel that's nice, rainbow's gonna have the inter dimensional coast guard on her ass. Just a question, In this world, MLP:FiM or anything relating to MLP, including bronies, doesn't exist? if so, that was a really good way of introducing equestria daily.

>>742585742585

As a European I never had a chance to see a real game, because no one plays it here, but I have seen a lot of it in movies. I have hence decided that since all American Football games I have seen have been fictional, it is a made-up sport. Like Quidditch.

Let me be the first to say this this is a fantastic story. I'm at chapter nine now, and I cant stop reading, lol. Bravo.

Great stuff. I even think I learnt things about American universities.

>>742585742585

think of rugby, but every player wearing spartan armor and still getting fouled for the smallest things.

and what can you do to get a foul in rugby?

>>742651742651

Understand it? You're approaching it wrong.

The question that should be asked when watching NASCAR isn't why, but how. As in, "how drunk am I and am I going to get even more wasted?"

That left turn gains a whole new aspect when you yourself can't even tell left from right.

Tracking. Will read later.

Good story, for some reason I expected a male protagonist. Probably because female protagonists tend to be female-y, and I didn't get that feeling from the excerpts.

Is there a chance for a continuation?

>>742651742651

Americans aren't actually paying for the left turns, their paying to see that one in a million chance of a wreck in NASCAR.

I worked at a lemonade stand at a race once in florida, and i was sure that 90% of the crowd was from other states.

Feature box in 3 hours?

Honest opinion? I hated it. Sorry. You're a damn good author, but this story did not jive well with me. Maybe it's because I'm a pessimist. Maybe it's because I just fail to get that I still suck as an author. I dunno. I won't dislike this because I don't want to, but for some reason, I hated this story. But I don't hate you. You're a fucking brilliant writer and your stories are great (for the most part). I dunno what it is about this story that turned me off, but it's okay. I'm one person. Clearly, you have a dedicated fanbase that loves this story. I'm proud for you, man, but I just didn't like this story. It must be a personal thing. I couldn't even tell you what about it I didn't like.

But keep up the good work anyhow, comrade.

This was pretty damn good, for once a human and pony story that made me D'aww at some parts and not real back in shock of a completely unexpected romance twist that makes no sense.

I would love to see a sequel about semester two. Please!

the only thing i do recommend is that you change the cover pic, now that the story got featured, anybody seeing that picture will expect romance/clop.

>>742585742585

Don't worry, I'm an American and I don't understand our football.

"It's considered manly to wear tight pants, and jump around all over other guys trying to grab a ball? Seems legit. . ."

>>742417742417 I can second that

About the story. I like it. But is it just me, or does Denise seem a little not-shocked for just finding Rainbow Dash as a roommate?

i believe rainbow dashs mane has 6 colors

the writer makes rainbow sound like a bitch

Lol, I just finished my sophmore year of High School, and I know that pleasure of making fun of the freshamen. Kinda glad I don't have plans to go to college so I don't have to be a freshman again.

>>742858742858

Nope, Quidditch is real - I used to play it in PE back at school. It was without the broomsticks, of course, but without the snitch it's doable.

And, thinking about it, American Football being fictional makes perfect sense - like anyone would really make a game where grown men played dress-up and did little dances after running to the end of a field.

>>742981742981

D'ya want a list?

RD at a university... Now I've seen'em all.

>>743119743119

There's always next semester.

>>743170743170

It's a different kind of story, I'll give you that.

>>743263743263

The writer thinks she is.

>>743120743120

You go to see crashes? Don't you Americans have those smash-em-up derby things for that?

>>743014743014

I think life generally takes a new aspect when you're drunk. I don't see why you need the car thing, though - I imagine pubs serve both cheaper and nicer alcohol.

Oh, wait, you can't get alcohol in America if you're under 21 anyway, can you?

>>742417742417 The reason you thought this was romance is this

>Getting a college roommate is random chance.  

Sometimes you get lucky

I'll read the rest later.

I…will…KILL THAT SALESMAN!

>>742583742583 I require it.

This story shall be something I WILL fuark to.

>>742417742417

As soon as I read "pony on human action" I started choking.

>>742687742687

That is exactly how it would work.  A lot of countries just laugh and roll their eyes when the US tries to claim exclusive citizenship.

>>742683742683

Shun this non-believer. Spam is great.

But I do like corned beef better.

BREAKING NEWS

A teenager was found dead in his bedroom today. It appears that his head had exploded while reading totallynotabrony's long-awaited story, The Roommate.

OH MY GOD YES. YOU ACTUALLY USED IT. OH MY GOD YES.

Wow. A nice, little story but a great read.

I might have to do a Pinkie Pie version, or something.

>>743263743263

she can be.

YEA  SCREW APPLE!!!!! PC FOR LIFE!!!!

It probably wouldn’t have taken half as long if she’d bought a Mac.

It's the simple, honest truth. and even Skrillex knows this.

Gah!  It's the Sears Tower!  I don't care that someone else bought it and renamed it.  It will always be the Sears Tower.

And American Football isn't that hard to understand.

I'm reasonably sure that most members of this site are/were in college, so how about you write your own version of The Roommate?  This could be an awesome series.  I'd love to read what combinations of schools and ponies you come up with.

The muffin?  I was thinking something like that while i was reading it.  Sounds like a plan.  I could work on something like that without much effort.  I hope you read it when it's done.  Amusingly I know more about the college in town than the one I'm going to

Pony/ponies to be determined later...

Why was Denise at student health services?

"Meanwhile, I was on my way to get drunk with a pony."

Best line ever... of all time.

I have an iPad I use for everything, but I would stick to pc. there easyer to use. And waaaayyy cheaper.

Spend most of my day reading this - and I loved every chapter. At first I thought it had a risk of becoming too extreme, in senses of some sort of relationship between pony and human, or something of the like, but this was just great all the way through!

To be honest, I didn't have high expectations of this. I usually avoid reading human-in-equestria/pony-on-earth stories, but this caught my eye (as a college student). So I gave it read and must say, I'm impressed You did a wonderful job writing it! I personally wouldn't mind seeing another story of similar design (Twilight's Earth Vacation/Exploration? ) pop up on somewhere. Anyway! Good job very enjoyable story! Keep writing!

APPLE RULES... FOREVER.

This story... I like it... ANOTHER!

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Oh no...

I think tact is something that the male part of this family lacks. Oh god, how could her uncle start like that when there are ponies present

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png

after the end of this stpry i ahd figured out that denise is a girl

>>743708743708

STD's are srs bsns

dis has so much rainbwo-colored win

"Nathan pulled me aside.  'Where do you want to go next?”

'Just head down the street, I guess.”

Wow, this girl's got a real festive sprit, doesn't she?

Jeez. "It's my birthday, but whatever. We could go somewhere else I GUESS."

>>743471743471 the uk for the win!

Also I agree with you

>>742824742824

I'm not the author, but what I've read so far I understood this.

Do you know the show, "Stargate"? It's pretty much like that.

Equestria is another dimension, MLP didn't exist, and the Equestria Daily is a famous newspaper from Equestria.

There aren't such things as "bronies" because the show never existed.

It's like... "Mass Effect". There are various species living together, they still face social differences but no one really cares about it.

A really simple way to use the "Pony in Earth" concept, if you ask me.  

>>743324743324

And? I don't see how age restrictions on the obtainment of alcohol in the Americans relates to how to enjoy NASCAR.

Not to mention that age restriction really only applies to the U.S.; restrictions differ in other parts of the Americas, as not every American country has the same set of laws.  As such, alcohol can be obtained by an American before the age of 21.

>>743592743592

Go right ahead.

>>743854743854

Really? You're going to pull that one? I think we both know what I was talking about, and my dad's a languages teacher, he's been lecturing me about saying it my whole life.

Also, age-restrictions on alcohol don't really matter, I was just rubbing it in the face of any underage Americans that may be reading. So, therefore, BWAHAHAHAHAHA!

>>742858742858 dude quidich is real... It's in universal studios park... I think

>>742981742981 when a rook forms (the ball goes to ground) and a player enters from the side, also takling the neck of a person... Hope that helps

And I agree that American football is a copied version of rugby and a stolen name with American in front

Purdue University, as in Indiana state?  Hell yeah, about time my homeland got recognized for more than just Indy Car and corn!  Good choice, Rainbow Dash.

Wait, her old roommate was Chen?

YUKARI, I BLAME YOU!!!!

LOL DIDNT READ.....but now I must. Silence, please.

“You humans are all the same,” she snorted.  “Clinging to your material goods when you should be focusing on more important things, like friendship.”

You seriously expect me to believe that this line is coming out of Rainbow Dash's mouth?

>>742585742585

Just felt that the people who support American Football should get a word in.

I've played it for 8 years, and it is tough. It's played with pads because there is a lot more open-field running. This means higher  speeds when hits occur and hence the need for the pads to prevent major injuries(but they still occur). Sometimes these pads and helmets actually cause injury. Just this year I suffered from a broken leg because a helmet hit my unprotected calf going in the exact opposite direction. Luckily I was airborne or else it would have absolutely shattered.

I've also received numerous injuries from the sport, so it sure isn't namby-pamby. Broken leg, torn labrum in shoulder, broken fingers and toes, many hyper extensions in both my knees, elbows and shoulders, cracked ribs, ruptured muscle, and internal bleeding. Not to mention I've watched as, right in front of me during a game, 3 people broke ankles, 2 blown out knees, 3 broken collarbones, 1 broken neck, multiple broken fingers, and a separated shoulder that I helped pop back in to place. So it is a pretty rough sport.

Why do Americans hate Canadians?

A pegasus pilot... o_O

But... how is she gonna control a jet with hooves?! Now I've never seen one, but... really?

I am sooo confused by Rainbow's new goal...

>>742683742683 nothing is worse than smash... Except proberbly butternut squash or anything to do with tofu

Meh. I don't get what's the big deal with any kind of sports either.

>>743939743939

Hey, at least I know you were paying attention.

>>743985743985

This is discussed further in Wings of Gold

I wonder if they're going to kill each other.

That was nice

Totally thought Rainbow should have gone for track and field...

100 meter sprint vs. Usain Bolt and Tyson Gay? We all know who'd win that.

>>742565742565 Leave for ten minutes and you won't miss a damn thing

>>743961743961 dude in rugby people get clothed lined a lot and I accedentaly broke someone's collar bone by sprinting into them and before anyone asks I'm pretty fast.

So the high speed thing doesn't really count for much...

Sports are for nerds.

I freaking hate spam!

I get at least 3 of those A DAY!