WRITTEN BEFORE SEASON 5!!!
Without altering anything canon up to season 4 (though the movies are kind of skipped over, sorry), I manage to completely rewrite everything that happened. No, seriously. And it all started based off of Discord's photo-bomb in Fluttershy's window during the season 4 theme.
What if, rather than leaving with Celestia after he was reformed, Discord ended up staying at Fluttershy's house, unknown to any of the other ponies? Chaos ensues. (Pun intended. 
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Definitely a Fluttercord.
Chapters (30)
D'awww... *boom!*
Dammit! Not again!
Yeesh, you posted the whole story in one day, hence the slow traffic. No matter. Great story. Six chapters in and I'm already hooked.
What a charming tale! I like how you take the time to answer what might have happened right after the last scene in "Keep Calm and Flutter On." Where Discord went afterwards was kind of vague in terms of the actual show, so this is nice--especially given his trickster/troll nature well into season 4. This definitely feels as if it could have been an episode, or perhaps a comic.
The only suggestions I would make so far--and this is up to your discretion--is to perhaps add a space or two between scenes. For instance, towards the beginning when you transition from the ponies leaving to their individual homes to Discord's ride with Celestia, you might think of adding a space before the paragraph that begins, "Meanwhile, Discord was keeping himself entertained..." And at other places where you make a subtle change between what characters on which you are concentrating. That can help to emphasize this shift, or to make it clear a bit of time has passed between one part and another.
I hope that helps! ^_^
Way to go, ladies.
Aw~ Bravo! You make a good point that Angel Bunny might have told Fluttershy what had happened during their trip to the Crystal Empire for the games inspector. I especially enjoyed your characterization of Princess Celestia. It would be just like her to realize Discord's mind had wandered to a certain yellow Pegasus, and played a small trick on him as a result.
Nice.
The only details here that I was curious about involved your use of ellipses following certain phrases. Did something go wrong with the formatting and elevate them to that point halfway up the words they followed? Some advice would also be to use such things sparingly, since there are so many other ways to show characters who are preoccupied or musing on something. The double-lines you used in the case of "And--" were well-used, for example, and readers can get the same impression by your use of phrases like, "Hmm" or "Er." At other times, you can avoid using ellipses simply through making the feeling clear through the prose itself.
D'awww -- HNNGG!
Great. I died from cuteness overload again. Thanks a lot.
Alright, I'm back from being dead last chapter. Really wish I could thumbs up more than once.
I see where this is headed.
The scrapbook!
Clever girl.
Great Story! Well written, though a little rushed at times.
I must say, you managed to balance Fluttershy's and Discord's relationship astonishingly well.
Potential SPOILER ahead, if you haven't read up to chapter 30
I've read a lot FlutterCord stories and many of them were great. But what makes yours unique in my eyes is, how Fluttershy changed over time.
She became more sarcastic and assertive.
What I liked most, though, was that you made her silent behaviour so much MORE meaningful then just her beeing shy or indecisive.
You made her a little bit like Discord himself in that regard. Silently watching, thinking her part and acting towards a specific goal.
Anyway, even though one could, and I'm sure some will, argue that Discord became to soft to fast or was a little out of character because of it, personally I think he wasn't. Going with your idea, that he just never had something he really cares about and wasn't as oblivious to the concept of the needs of others as many show him to be, you really did him well.
Another part I really liked about your try on him was his relationship to the other mares.
Up to now, I either read him as being on good terms with them or as them beeing overly agressive and suspicious to him.
You on the other hand balanced that out quite well. Though you made him being well understood and loved by Fluttershy you showed the others to clearly not 'wanting' to give him a chance, DESPITE his repeated tries.
Thank you for this story. I enjoyed it very much up to now
Hope to read you're next chapter soon.
EDIT: P. S.: Whoever disliked this without at least leaving a comment describing why has already proven to have no taste whatsoever.
This was the best Fluttercord I've read in a while. I loved how the two were the focal point of the story, which should not come off as surprising. Fluttershy was ON POINT. Any story with Discord as a major character runs the risk of other players getting lost in his crazy. Especially Fluttercords, where Fluttershy is just there to react to said crazy. But not here. She wants him to have the space and flexibility to be himself and not only does she empathize, she encourages his chaotic behavior. Within "reason", of course. This is what I mean when I say these two share a special bond. These two really bring out the best in each other, but what I loved especially was how they enabled one another. Fluttershy was essentially telling her friends to let her man be her man. And that they're idiots. In her head, of course. Friendship is magic, not passive aggression.
In regards to pace, it felt a bit rushed. But that's minor.
Your Season Four was awesome.
I died of cuteness overload a few times. I got better.
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I can do nothing more but agree!
I'd like to add to my previous comment, that this is, in my opinion as well, the best Fluttercord I've ever read.
AND: I like it much, much, much more than the canon version since you didn't let him betray her. That was just plain stupid of Hasbro.
What really bothered me throughout reading this was the pacing. It felt incredibly off, especially when going through the episodes with Discord added in. They felt a little too forced at times, like just adding him in just 'cause, but thankfully, you didn't do every episode. Nonetheless, when you went through two episodes in one chapter, it was a little overwhelming. It became a little better when the story went on its own path, though.
It was a decent read, though. It got a laugh or two out of me, like Discord's reaction to the pregnancy. And the two were pretty cute. Discord sometimes sounded a little OOC, but Discord is incredibly hard to write, especially for romances of all things. I don't know, I think it jumped too quickly in their feelings becoming more. For example, first chapter was a good start, but then we almost immediately jump right into Discord daydreaming about her. The time skips are most likely the issue for me. Not even that they're a problem, as writing every detail down is a bitch. Their friendship was just starting in "Keep Calm and Flutter On," so it's difficult to see feelings grow rather quickly.
I don't mean to sound harsh, because it wasn't even awful, and I enjoyed that you focused not just on their feelings, but their chemistry. As a preference, one wants to see their friendship build, because that's what started it all. Then you get into the romance, making it grow into something more. It's not my story, though, so maybe I shouldn't complain. Sorry for my rambling, take a like.
5282526 SERIOUSLY!! I get that Twilight needed to get her key at some point, but for Discord to betray the Mane 6, betray Fluttershy to do it? It winds up cheapening the events of Keep Calm and Flutter On as a result.
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I agree. Original Usermanes solution was infinitely better than Habro's.
5282603 5282614 I don't want to start anything, but I disagree. I think that arc was greatly needed to expand not just on Discord's character, but their friendship. A lot of people say Keep Calm was rushed, which is understandable. However, looking at this proves that Discord still has yet to learn all there is about friendship. After a millennium of loneliness and chaos, to suddenly bounce onto the good side would just ruin a brilliant story.
Discord making this mistake proved how flawed Discord is when it comes to his selfishness, but once the light is properly shown to him, he acknowledges what an error he made and even tries to prove this to everyone, including Fluttershy, by giving sincere apologies. While this may have threatened to sever a piece of their friendship, I think in the aftermath, it'll only help Fluttershy and Discord become better friends. Because despite his mistake, he eventually realized how much it hurt to lose a friend.
5282989 Actually I appreciate your perspective. And you're right. Discord is still learning to be a friend.
This is GREAT! Oh, I can't wait to read the best! Did you just write all of this and post it all at once? If so, that's pretty dang impressive. And the characterization is just done wonderfully, especially with Fluttershy. I can hear her in my head so perfectly with the dialogue. And the idea with opening the door the wrong way for his own space--I love that idea, that's original even though Discord having a chaotic house of his own has been done--you still did something to make it your own! Love love love love love it!
Golly, the way Fluttershy said that she'd miss him and his reaction--I think my heart melted. This story is just what I needed for my daily craving for fluttercord..!
This one seemed maybe a little rushed? But I still really liked it, and though it's only the third chapter, I think you're progressing their relationship well. I especially liked your Fluttershy's thought process, thinking she was just pleased that her friend thought she was adorable and that it was normal. You've pretty much got Fluttershy down-pat. All the others are portrayed pretty well too, and Celestia is funny!
This chapter was nothing but cuuuuuute and I loved every bit of it, enough that I googled Fluttershy's coronation dress. So cute! I like the development of whatever friendship it is Tia and Discord have (as I friendship him with her, but ship him with Fluttershy). You and I seem to like him in the same way! :D
Favorite Discord Lines:
HAHAHA! Love it. He'd totally say those things.
Awwww's
It could have used perhaps a more concrete ending, but you made these two chapters work really well with Discord being the mastermind behind it all. You made it work perfectly together without changing much. Great job!
*SQUEEEEEEE* So cute and sweet, I love it so much!!!
Not only was this adorable, but the fact that you referred to the jackalope--an animal we've only seen in that particular episode--as a present from Discord...I want to make that a headcanon. You know what, I think I will!
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I like the humor in this. :) This is pretty good so far other than it being somewhat rushed and the chapters being a little bit too short (in my opinion anyway).
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Totally agree :D
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i agree on that too but:
I think that this'll only true if we presume that Discord isn't that brightest in emotional and relationship related things.
On the other hand: since he's also known as a master of manipulation with great understanding of how ponies think and react it would seem odd, was he really to be so ignorant.
I agree, that 'Keep Calm' has been rushed and from a narrative perspective this clearly could be better, but if we take Discord as being as smart and a fast thinker as he is, then it's at least understandable.
I like to see him as more reflected, as having more introspective than all the other characters anyway.
for instance he has a thinking tree.
It has just never been in his nature to be caring of others, is how I like to see him.
In this regard his betrayal with Tirek would show him to be much more stupid than he really is.
Especially since he practically showed them how to open the chest and on top of that gave Twilight the last key in person.
Seeing him as having planned most of this is much more in balance with his character.
P. S.: You're right that we shouldn't start a discussion here since it'll be mostly personal opinions anyway. Anyway since you explained your opinion I had to at least explain mine as well.
P.P.S.: If you find any typos I've overlooked. Thank Apples autocorrect.
I am so glad I decided to read this! It's really well written and fantastic so far!
EEK! Can't stop reading this!!
5284116 That was way too perfect a response and I love it.
<--that was my face at its perfection
‘Celestia, if you’re in here, go away,’
Epic quote of the year xD
Was reading this while listening to A Tropical Octav3 animation!
Ooh, this is interesting. It's explaining EVERY problem I had with Discord in Season 4!
Sorry, I had to laugh at the first sentence, because there's actually a movie called "The Reluctant Dragon!"
Wow. That backfired.
I'd think Fluttershy would know which snakes are venomous.
AWWWW!!!! Wish the marriage had more detail though.
I'm still confused as to how the MAGIC EATING plants couldn't attack the tree of harmony because it had too much MAGIC.
HAHAHAHAHA! This was a cute read!
This made me laugh way harder then necessary.
Discord marvelled internally that Fluttershy’s Pinkie voice was just as good as Pinkie’s Fluttershy voice. There must be a connection…
I see what you did there
Water Lilly, I agree, this story is great!!!!
Hi! I read this in one sitting and enjoyed it immensely. You handled the Fluttercord romance more believably than in most stories I've read other than DisneyFanatic23's stories. It was an incredibly good angle to take for an AU and fun to see a different twist on events. I liked the double agent explanation of the Tirek. The whole reveal of the relationship was so funny and I think much more in character. Also Fluttershy and Discord, though evolved slightly differently so they had to be a little different in character due to experience, were portrayed very well!
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When I saw this part I couldn't help but think more about that... I agree, I don't think Twilight would really want to live in a castle. She seems more like a bit book worm who would enjoy a cozy library rather than a giant freakin' castle
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. Jeez hasbro... why did you take it away?
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5350760 Are you going to make more Fluttercord fimfics? BTW, I'm a HUGE fan!!
So, from that day on, Fluttershy had an apple every day with breakfast, and the problem never surfaced again, though Applejack was a bit confused about Fluttershy’s increasingly common visits to the market stand.
LOL! That last part made me laugh!