That is brilliant diamonds right in front of my face. Even better than MLD.

>>506107506107 Wow that's quite a compliment! Haha thank you

The main idea of the plot, of flashing back and forth between the memories and the present time, gets a bit confusing (for me, anyway) when the memories and the present are the same kind of style. Personally, I find it easier to distinguish the two if the flashbacks are italicized and everything else normal.

Otherwise, very well written; it's enchanting and quite sad, the emotions placed just right. Well done.

>>506174506174 Thank you for the criticism :) Its just a personal style of mine, haha. I thought of doing that but I didn't know if i should italize the flashback sequences or the present day sequences

That was a good read, I really liked it! And italicizing the flashbacks might make it a tad easier to read.

>>506261506261 Understood! Thank you for the comments!

Damn, this is deep. So sad knowing this kind of shit is everywhere in real life.

Kudos to you sir. You have written a truly beautiful story.

Have a moustache.

>>506299506299 *takes mustache* Thank you kind sir. Have a Marshmallow!

I love soaring n spitfire fics

>>506107506107 Sadder than MLD? I'm reading this first thing in the morning....

>>506325506325 I've started to take a liking to them too :P

Amazing story man! You did a great job with Spitfire's background, though it is a bit depressing. I wouldn't be surprised it this were to get featured on EQD.

This is definitely in the top 5 one-shots I have read. Keep up the great work!

>>506333506333 Wow! Haha I think EqD would reject it for some reason but thank you so much for the comment!

im not always the 'sappy' one for these things, but i was fighting back the tears...

>>506339506339 Don't underestimate yourself, man. By the way.. MLD was sadder in my opinion but I can see where if someone could relate to this story more than I could, this would be very sad. I was just able to form an emotional connection with the character in MLD because he reminded me of myself. Also Spitfire is still best pony. :D

I'd like to say that while italicizing the flashbacks does make it an easier read, I'd actually say that having them in the same style as the present parts could actually aid your narrative as the main feature of your story is having Spitfire herself confusing the association between past and present to the point that they overlap within her mind.  Having the readers share in that confusion would enable them to identify somewhat with Spitfire's state of mental confusion.  It helps that the story is already well-organized thanks to your use of horizontal dividers.  

Spread Your Wings - Black Label Society

And once again,Through The Fire and The Flames was my background song while reading this. You did a great job with those flashbacks man. Great work.

Brilliant job portraying the characters. My star and my thumb have been well earned.

Wow...this was amazing

I've never really read a Soarin or Spitfire story before, but this one's gonna set the bar high for sure!

Not gonna lie, when I was reading the part where Red Gust was beating Spitfire...I clenched my fist so hard my knuckles cracked.  That's how damn well written and full of emotion this story is.

I only have two thumbs, and unfortunately, I can only give you one thumb up.

Nice work!

>>506353506353 Thank you for feeling what I wrote

>>506358506358 I understand completely! I could relate to MLD too because the dude did everything I would do :')

>>506366506366 I understand what you're trying to say and now I'm kinda torn. Italicize or don't :/

>>506410506410 That's one awesome song

>>506593506593 Thank you for reading and commenting!

>>506623506623 I shall cherish them

>>506681506681 Thank you for the kind words I'm glad you felt what I was trying to write! and I shall except all the thumbs, regardless if I can see them! :D

So for some reason i decided to read this during school... Now im sitting in health class crying. This story was amazing but so sad i loved it!!!

>>507206507206 Really? :O Thank you! Here have a pinkie smile!

>>506803506803 Well I would have tried harder to go with them. Lol. There is no reason why he couldn't go, Celestia was just being a bitch. He had nothing to live for on Earth and would live a very happy life if they took him with.

>>507282507282 Well I understood the reasoning and i would try a bit harder too but I'd let Dashie go, as much as I'd hate to :(

>>507298507298 Yes you would have to let Dashie go, but they could still take you. He belongs on Earth no more than Dashie does. He has no family, no friends, no job (I think), and no with Dashie gone, he has no reason to live. I'm pretty sure he would have killed himself within the next month hoping to somehow be closer to his daughter. That pain of losing someone that close to you would have torn me apart.

Good story, I enjoyed it.

Beutiful just beutiful.Really loved it.And i agree with the top comment,this is a better story than MLD.In my opinion.Keep up the great work

Very nice, I enjoyed it. You had a really good idea, but your characterization could use a little work. Spitfire's reaction to all of it seems a little unbelievable. Being upset is understandable, even a little wounded at Soarin's words, but to fly into a blind rage and strike him over that? I just found it difficult to swallow.  That, and the letter from Red Gust seemed a little cliche, especially with the added "give her the letter when the time is right."

But like I said, your story was good! Just keep an eye out for those things :D

Fav fav fav fav fav....oh wait I can only fav once

>>508231508231 Glad you did! Thank you for commenting!

>>508238508238 Wow these type of comments really humble me! Haha thank you so much!

>>508329508329 I understand the cliche part of Red Gust's letter. I really just let the words right themselves at that point And in my mind, after all that happened, I thought she finally snapped and blinded by pure rage, attacked Soarin for not giving the stuff to her early (the same stuff that would have allowed her closure). But thank you for your comment and I will definately keep an eye out for those things.

>>508428508428 Well you could always read my other pieces and fav them if you like them :P *gets shot*

Well, I read the whole thing. A pretty good piece of work, worthy of the praise it has garnered so far. The constant switching between past and present in the style you have done disoriented me once in a while, but otherwise was fine. The story itself didn't feel too rushed, and the characters are believable. It was quite an interesting way of how you portrayed her past. It is very realistic, and because of that, it is saddening. I am not much for sad stories, but you just had the right amount of roller coaster ups and downs of emotions to make it a good tale, rather than making it a pity-me-story or a depressing rant. And at the end of the roller coaster, we see a new ray of light and hope, and I think you pulled the sad-to-hopeful style off well. This is one of your better stories.

Only one problem I had.

“Why did you give this to me earlier Soarin!? I thought you were my closest friend!”

Was it supposed to be "didn't"? I dunno, it seemed to make more sense that way.

The use of the necklace as Chekhov's gun was slightly cliche, but it wasn't a problem because you used it well. Another reason why I enjoyed this story. Well done, Deathscar. Well done.

Okay...I just have to say that you brought my head cannon to life with this story. This is so similar to the idea I had formed in my head about Spitfire and Soarin'. I had seen Spitfire as the one who was driven because others around her said she couldn't do it, and I have always seen Soarin' as that friend who is always there for her, always ready to catch her when she falls. Great job!

>>531802531802 Thank you so much! I'm relaly happy you enjoyed it!

This story needs more views!!!!

>>536914536914 Haha I wish it had more views too

For some reason or other, I seem to enjoy soaking the bed with my tears. I love sad fics, but this one deserves favorite and thumbs up!

P.S Heartwarming ending deserves a sad Pinkie being happy.

>>537437537437 Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it here's a Flutteryay

Ugh, too long. Will read later. XP

>>543141543141 Okay do leave a comment on what you think of it

I will be pefectly honest, this bought a tear to my eye, beatifully made and structured well,

Love it :D

>>543312543312 Thank you :)

Read the Ditzy fic. Checked your page. Saw this. Bieng the big Spitfire buff I read it. This is amazing. It's not overexagerated but it maintains the kind of ridiculous events that occur in real life.

>>577034577034 I'm glad you enjoyed it! I do have another type of this fic for Fluttershy and Rainbow if you would like to check it out

You Deathscar, you just showed me one of my fav. fics so far and it's amazing.

I just found one grammar mistake (two words were join in some point) but it was a really good fic.

I loved how you described everything, I could feel the emotions in the characters and everything, you made it easy follow even with the change of the scenes and it was well written.

>>579816579816 Oh why thank you! Do you mind pointing out the mistake? I would very much like to correct it! I'm glad you liked it!

Very beautiful piece of work. Simply marvelous. The joined word is at the flash back of when she learned to fly. (“I need to do this.” Spitfire stared down at the familiar gold chain and fire emblem that hung around her neck. Reeling her head back onto the cloud, she steeled herself andgazed ahead) You are a wonderful writer and i for one hope to see more fantastic work from you. Just when I'm about to give up hope for the students who waltz in my class, just hoping to get a passing minimum, I discover people like you who renew my faith in future writers. I may live in America, but i hope to one day be able to read your first published book one day. Aspire to greatness sir, and you will go far indeed. I can't wait to read your next rendition in your remembrance saga.  

>>589773589773 Wow... I'm kinda speechless at your comment. These comments are always what keep me going as a writer. I've thought about stopping many times before I found MLP but ever since I started sending in my fanfictions, I've started receiving comments like these which always remind me why I write.

The sole fact that I can put faith in you through my words is better than any prize i could receive. I will keep writing and will keep comments like these in my mind to remind me to never stop. I can't wait to let you read the next Remembrance saga either

Thank you for the comments, they really mean a lot to me.

Looks like you were right pal! Great story

Another great sir, though Fluttershy's is still my favorite so far (Fluttershy and Rainbow are my favorite ponies :P).  All I want to know though is who you are gonna do next.  I eagerly await the next in the series.  Cheers and keep up the good work.

>>601162601162 Thank you!

>>603371603371 Well, next up is Vinyl and Octy and after that its Daring Do Thank you for the comment!

>>603422603422YAY

wow.

I could stop there but this deserves more.

Lots of people wright fics just cuz they can, like for example Cupcakes, its probs the most over rated story of all time, its well written, but there's no point to it, its basically just wasting 15-20 minutes of your life, like after i finished it i almost felt stupid for it.

And then there's a hand full of people who wright fics and are actually GOOD at it, for example A Flier's Inner Fire its well written, throughout the story you actually made me smile and frown without me noticing at first, and at the end I felt good finishing it. I hope my writing skills pick up something from.

The best part is that this is the first in the series, and the next ones can only get better, so thank you sir for giving me 45 mins of enjoyment

>>629384629384 You are very welcome! :) I hope you will give your opinions on my other stories too! And I'm really happy that you enjoyed it :D

>>629492629492 deal, with your other stories i will go more in depth of what i liked and what i didn't like and how you could improve, there's probs not going to be much though

>>629527629527 Haha I wouldn't say that :P I personally feel that the others still contain errors

>>629566629566 well everything has errors, its impossible for anything to be perfect, but I've also noticed that any1 who wright/creates something that person is always super critical of it, no exceptions to anybody, I'm sure your fics are awesome, I'm sure i'm going to love them, give yourself more credit and don't be so modest you deserve better

>>629698629698 Haha thank you ^^ Hope to hear from you soon! :)

I read this with Sly's theme because it said it was raining and it added nice touch to the story

>>506410506410

I almost cried.

Finally got around to reading this. And oh boy, was it a good one. Well done

>>898100898100 Thank you very much!! Glad you enjoyed it!

Wow Deathscar, I was circling through my Read Later list and came upon your fic.  I decided to read it and I'm... amazed by this amazing fic.

I give it a 5/5 (for almost making me shed manly tears dammit)

>>11209991120999 Thank you ^^ Glad you enjoyed it! If you liked it, you should check out the rest of the Remembrance series :) Esp the Vinyl Scratch & Octavia and the Daring Do. Those two I'm very proud of ^^

Another Brilliant story

oh, and i finally found an error hehe

"Do you know what was the worst past"

i assume that was supposed to be "do you know what was the worst part"?

>>17632881763288 Oh yes! Haha, this and Remembrance of a Dear Friend was the first two I wrote ^^' Thank you!!

>>17634931763493 i probably wont read "remembrance of a dear friend." mainly because of the description. ive had situations similar to it, and it brings back some bad memories...

>>17635371763537 Ah yes, please don't worry about it, I understand. Truth be told, Remembrance of a Dear Friend is not one of my better pieces either, so its no problem at all ^^

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'Nuff said.

>>17998561799856 Thank you so much ^^

>>18023271802327 You're welcome.

You've got guts, kid. Too many shy away from writing a story like it is, how abuse really unfolds, but i like to read them. Keeps the memories of what happened fresh in my mind...to never forget what it did to me, what it does, and to never do it to others.

You took my favorite pony and gave her a back story that is fitting and entirely believable. The all-too-common story of the parent that was never proud, it makes me feel even closer to Spitfire. Fantastic job.

Now please excuse me while i try to compose myself, these stories are hard to take no matter what.

>>20499002049900 Thank you for reading it and taking the time to leave a comment :)

This was a pretty beautiful little story.  I loved the happy ending when you incorporated the title into the story.  I must admit, I shed some manly tears when Spitfire's father's letter was read.  I think that this story captured some rarely delved effects of the abuse that some go through extremely well.  The very subtle triggers that can send somebody over the edge in an emotional rage was very smoothly played out.  I like how you had Soarin' never give up on helping out Spitfire throughout the ordeal, well done with that.  This story deserves far more views than it has gotten so far.  You have earned another follower and another favorite from me for this story.  I look forward to reading more of your future works.  Keep up the great writing!

>>24267212426721 Thank you so much for taking the time to read it and leave a comment. I'm really glad you enjoyed it so much. If you want to read more Slice-of-lifes, I've written quite a few like The Most Valuable Treasure and An Octave Higher. Give those a read if you're interested!