This story is a MLP interactive crossover of Fate/Stay Night. Storm lost his parents in a fire when he was young and was later adopted by a mage by the name of Doctor Whooves. Although he was full of admiration for his adopted father and yearns to become a hero of Justice, Storm has limited powers and was unable to become a strong mage like his father. That is until one fateful day, he was drawn into the Harmony Grail War and had to summon a female "Servant" known as Saber in order to protect himself. It turns out that the Harmony Grail War involves a series of battles among powerful mages to fight for the possession of a relic that will grant one's wishes, the Harmony Grail. There are altogether seven "Masters" who can summon their respective "Servants" from different classes known as Saber, Archer, Rider, Berserker, Lancer, Caster and Assassin. These "Servants" have to hide their names in order not to reveal their weaknesses to the enemies. The story revolves around Storm and his entanglement in the Harmony Grail War.
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Faith..Staynight...
Steel is my body, and fire is my blood...
I have created... Over a THOUSAND Muffins!!!
Unknown to death... Nor known to life...
Have withstood pain.. to create many Cakes...
Yet those hands will never hold anything...
So, as I pray
Unlimited Cupcake works!!
502423 Ha, sorry I'll be finish fate first.
502431
lololol
This.... Just... Yes. I can't read this right now (because of studies) but I WILL read this... I just love this anime so much! Say, are you going to follow the anime storyline or one of the game lines? Either way, tracked like the fist of an angry Servant!
502529 game lines.
Ha, already got 2k words in the next chapter maybe if I grind I can get up tonight.
Yup. Definitely going to read this. Especially if it's interactive.
“Hey, uh, are you the one who summon me?”
Lyra is such a difficult person to deal with.
This smiling mare is Trixie Belle, of class 2-C. She’s the vice-captain of the archery club and owner of the hearts of half the mares in this school;
If anyone’s bothering you, I’ll just kick them out, so come in for a while.”
If she was just a little bit more mature, she wouldn’t be so much trouble for the people around her.
“Good girl, Oh, I wish everyone was as good as you, Rarity.”
From this point, Rarity Jewel is not pony.
No, I was just mistake before.
“…What a blunder. Using that many jewels and not calling saber… it’s too appalling to face.”
1. Its summoned.
(semi OCD here...)
2. Person? Its pony
3. Err... Is this... true?
4. Again, anypony. (semi OCD powers activate!)
5. Strike two.
6. Three strikes, in a row.
7. You missed 'a' in between.
8. It's mistaken.
9. Forgot to capitalise the S.
Now for the real comment...
Lemme get this straight… In semi-chart form;
Lyra: Ayako
Trixie & Sweetie: Shinji & Sakura
Rarity: Rin
Pinkie: Taiga
Applejack: Issei
Storm: Shirou
Twilight: Kotomine
???: Archer
I didn’t stick Big Mac as Archer cause even though he has a red coat, doesn’t mean he is Archer.
Also, since Lyra is my favourite pony… FFFFUUUUUUUUUUUU (Played the game & watched the series.)
502662 "Also, since Lyra is my favourite pony… FFFFUUUUUUUUUUUU" Yea, I know rather 'unpleasant' things happen to her. You can blame me for that one as it was my suggestion to put Lyra in that role.
502749 *rattles Melancholy*
Message has been edited due to oversightly emotional random outbursts.
502757 No traumatizing contributors please.
502757 Oh she gets in some positions all right, with Trixie, in an ally, if you know what I mean.
Ok, I'll stop rubbing it in now. At least Shinji pays for it in most routes.
So have ponies in general basically lost the ability to magic in this 'verse? As in, everyone's suddenly an Earth Pony, more-or-less?
502851 Yep. Everyone is an Earth Pony. Except for some special characters.
Minor ocd powers activate!
But as far as I know, no one in this town has magical energy that strong.
You’re going to have to work with this crooked guy from now on.
Yeah... very minor mistakes... next to the pictures not being visible
Blasphemous restrictions... why image shack do this to us?!
505893 thanks for the fixes and what about the pictures you can't see them?
505902 Nope, can't see the pictures. Says that the domain is unregistered or sumthin.
Edit: Yep, they be fixed. AWESOME! :D
505968 Ok, I'll try to get that fixed.
*Edit* I change the domain should be working now.
Hmmm... 69 views this is awkward.
Did somepony say mistakes?
“…No. Well, she was a strange person and she seemed to be lost.
That form is their temporary name, and the way they exist in this world. The
Harmony Grail has furnished “classes” so that the heroic spirits may take form more easily, and it only summons the heroic spirits that match these classes.
In Archer’s hand is the shortsword again.
But it’s only for a moment as Archer has a sword in his hand in the next instant, forcing Lancer back a little each time.
“…In that case, you shall face my finish blow.”
“Yes. I’m fight to win, Archer.”
1. Yep, a person lol.
2. The italised words are actually the end of a paragraph and the beginning of the next. You missed the... 'The'.
3. YES! We have hands
4. More hands!
5. Finishing.
6. Fighting.
I just feel so pumped... I have no idea why.
511569 Thanks I'm making you my official editor.
511582
I feel honoured!
511592 So what did you thought about the first battle?
511603 It felt... surprising that Archer started fighting off Lancer's attack with only one of his swords. Lancer increasing the speeds of his attacks clearly showing that he has the upperhoof and also showing that his speed is... beyond comprehension making not one but three fatal blows in one attack only to be deflected by what was impossible...
Grahh... I feel like a frikkin lousy critic...
Overall the transition of each action and scene was smooth, having the reader immerse themself in the story picturing the scene taking place as if before their eyes. To me I like this sort of description, immersing the reader into your universe that you created.
I felt like I just
trying to figure out how to write this...
511640 I kept doing a facepalm when ever i had to mention that horn that grew two meters long on his forehead..
511670 True. Imagining the horn elongating itself was one of the funnier moments.
511688 almost have the next chapter done... this will have the first death defying decision!
OCD powers activate!
... ... ... No mistakes? ... ... ...
I felt so giddy in this chapter when reading about Whooves being his father.
Also... blasphemy to the one who disliked this story!!!!
She’s good underclasspony, and a junior I need to take care of.
You missed a... 'a'.
516407 thanks make sure you only choose one decision...
516409 U evil. If I did that then I can't check your other chapter for editing. Unless you have someone else checking that for you
516413 you can check it's obvious your going for a sweetie belle point :P
516414 No... It just happened to be the next chapter... that's all. *shifts eyes*
Also no more mistakes... so far >.>
516418 Ha, don't worry, picture Sweetie Belle as a 16 year-old mare.
I'm curious, how many people went for the muscle point. :D
So... is this a repaint or a more serious crossover? I honestly can't tell.
520529 Both :D
520609 Interesting... I wonder who Twilight will be.
520529 I usually post new chapters around midnight.
520617 The I'll catch up now and read more in the morning. I can't stay up past midnight reading, I have college to worry about.
520626 understandable.
Dang Freudian unicorn horn... the image is staining my mind even now.
I SO saw the Whooves thing coming... and is that a branching-story choice I just read?! What... WHAT IS THIS MADNESS?!
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You watched Fate/Zero before you wrote this didn't you?
That's the only way you'd know to cast Sweetie as Sakura.
Don't get me wrong, I have NO place to complain. Not a one... but I assume that this will end up as another route? Much like how the original game had 3 different storylines?
I also find myself lost with regards to these "point" things... reference to the games I didn't get around to playing?
520726 you'll figure it out... I'll give a hint you better hope your mare likes you or... >.>
I think I figured out who Twi is. All I had to do was remember that she's an obscenely powerful mage and practically unnatural magical focus. Who in the original series qualified? Only one comes to mind... and I pray the fate of that character doesn't follow the blade works route in this story. No one should die like that.
No one.
520726 I'm gonna have to make this mature once I write the first dead end...
520761 Gotcha there. Gore isn't pretty in this series.
But I really do have to ask, which route are you leaning towards with this series anyway? UBW, Heaven's Feel, or Fate... or will it be an amalgamation of the three or something totally off in left field?
And how often do you post these?