The Adoption Aftermath

This story is a sequel to The Party Adoption

Matt11 gave me permission to go off of his story, thanks a bunch man...Its been about 8 months since the incident with Diamond Tiara, But Scootaloo isn't worried she's having the time of her life with her new family... but little does She know she's being tracked down by a mare no ponys seen in over twelve years. A mare that could change Scootaloo's life for ever. But change it for better or for worse

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Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question · 9th Nov 2014 · 1,971 words
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Ch 2 strange pony's meet · 14th Nov 2014 · 1,430 words
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Scootaloo The Awesome

Scootaloo The Awesome #1 · Nov 9th, 2014 · 1 · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

needs some work grammar wise and split the sentences up its a little hard reading it when there swooshed together, but its a good story.

Matt11

Matt11 #2 · Nov 9th, 2014 · 2 · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

uh you might need to put that I gave you permission in the description other wise people will thank you stole or something.

SweetNSour

SweetNSour #3 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

5247925 fixed it

SweetNSour

SweetNSour #4 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

5247910 when you say spilt the sentences up do you mean like make more paragraphs

Scootaloo The Awesome

Scootaloo The Awesome #5 · Nov 9th, 2014 · 1 · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

5248164 here is an example, yours

"Come on Scootaloo, you can do it, just one more wing-up," said Rainbow Dash encouragingly to Scootaloo. Scoots took a deep breath and with a huge amount of strain she completed her last wing-up for the day. As she fell face first into the dirt she let out a huge sigh of relief. 'Man Rainbow Dash sure does have a tough routine,' Scoot's thought, 'but I can't really complain she is coaching me on flying after all.'
"Alright squirt you did a great job today," said dash as she noogied scoots. "Now I gotta fly but first I need you to Twilight a message for me."
"Sure...thing...Dash... what is it?" Scootaloo said still out of breath from training.
"I need you to tell Twilight that I have to postpone her training session today. I have to go to the Cloudsdale Cloud Factory and help round up some runaway storm clouds. Tell her to be ready the day I get back though. I should only be gone for two days, three at max."
"Yes Ma'am," replied Scoots with a salute. Rainbow was about to take off but was stopped by an outstretched orange hoof. "Ah ah ah not yet missy," Scootaloo teased, "I believe you owe me ten bits." Rainbow looked from her hoof to her face, then remembered the bet she made the filly. "Well, I guess you did beat your score of thirty wing-ups by five," said Dash, "here ya go squirt. You earned it." As Dash reached for here saddlebags Scoots ask, " Me and my friends can still have that sleep over at your place since your nit going to be there, right? You did Pinkie promise," said Scoots.

and how I'd love to see it.

"Come on Scootaloo, you can do it, just one more wing-up," said Rainbow Dash encouragingly to Scootaloo. Scoots took a deep breath and with a huge amount of strain she completed her last wing-up for the day. As she fell face first into the dirt she let out a huge sigh of relief. 'Man Rainbow Dash sure does have a tough routine,' Scoot's thought, 'but I can't really complain she is coaching me on flying after all.'
"Alright squirt you did a great job today," said dash as she noogied scoots. "Now I gotta fly but first I need you to Twilight a message for me."
"Sure...thing...Dash... what is it?" Scootaloo said still out of breath from training.
"I need you to tell Twilight that I have to postpone her training session today. I have to go to the Cloudsdale Cloud Factory and help round up some runaway storm clouds. Tell her to be ready the day I get back though. I should only be gone for two days, three at max."
"Yes Ma'am," replied Scoots with a salute. Rainbow was about to take off but was stopped by an outstretched orange hoof. "Ah ah ah not yet missy," Scootaloo teased, "I believe you owe me ten bits." Rainbow looked from her hoof to her face, then remembered the bet she made the filly. "Well, I guess you did beat your score of thirty wing-ups by five," said Dash, "here ya go squirt. You earned it." As Dash reached for here saddlebags Scoots ask, " Me and my friends can still have that sleep over at your place since your nit going to be there, right? You did Pinkie promise," said Scoots.

do ya understand now and see the difference?

SweetNSour

SweetNSour #6 · Nov 9th, 2014 · 1 · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

5248212 yea I see the difference im writing the next chapter chapter now so I'll make a note in my book. thanks for the clearing that up for me

The Fiction Fanatic

The Fiction Fanatic #7 · Nov 9th, 2014 · · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

Loved it!

SweetNSour

SweetNSour #8 · Nov 9th, 2014 · 1 · · Ch 1 Scootaloo's Question ·

5248700 thanks this is my first story that Ive written in ten years, not my original idea though. Many thanks to Matt11 for letting me go off his story

skullgreymon1