I like these stories. Keep it up!

this sounds really interesting i'll favorite it cause i cant read it now

Very nice idea.

You have spelling errors here and there, and some word confusion, but aside from that small issue, it read rather well.

Nothing like introducing Rainbow Dash to the horrors of our world first hand, right?

I like this so far, so keep it up if you can.

Like others have mentioned, the format/spelling could use some work.  Using a word processor on this before posting could help.  Also, putting an indent at the beginning of each paragraph makes it easier on the eyes.

Still, I love it.  Favorite.

DUDE WHAT? CX

EPIC IDEA I'MA GOING TO READ ALL THE WAY THROUGH MAN XD

PLEASE MAKE SO MUCH MORE!!!!!!

But seriously the lack of events is just....eugh...

longer please

i like it and like the others said some formating and spelling issues but those are just a little thing, i think you may have a really great story on your hands

indent and seperate your paragraphs.

other than that, the only complaint I have is that there's not more.

My only complaint is the "tThe" at the begining of the story. I thought being a grammar nazi was fitting with the story.   

English isn't your first language, is it? :(

Needs some editing but it still is a great concept. I have a soft spot for WWII / MLP crossovers.

YEAH 'MERICA!

need a proofreader.

>>515084515084 Yeah. I need and editor. BAD.

A WW2 story this showes germans as cruel, monsters? No, thanks.

>>516289516289

Eh, dude? These were SS officers. They basically were cruel monsters. Normal soldiers or officers didn't have nazi armbands.

That was interesting very good so far.

The only complaint I have is that there's not more.

also more explosions

>>516789516789 Yes, more is definitely required. As for the explosions... You can never have enough, but it helps when used at the proper time. Like... All the time.

Nazi BASTARDS. IM A JEW.

>>516777516777

Guess it just came over me as I read German in such a story again. I know, the story about my home in this time isn't pretty, but not all germans were monsters, and that's something some people forget, or don't even know sometimes, and that makes me upset.

>>518034518034 I'm in no way attempting to make every german look like a heartless monster. I'm trying to simply show the harsh realitys of war in those dark days and how selfish people can be in moments of desperation. Americans, Germans, Britsh etc.

If your offended by this story I am really sorry. I'm not trying to make this a "God hates Germans story" As I truly hate people who dwell on the past. And I will never EVER judge a country's people based on events they could not control 70 years ago.

PS: I also like german beer

>>518185518185

Thats good to know, thank you. Oh, and I forgot to tell you that this story is well written anyway. Except for the german parts, I guess you are not really used to the german language, are you?

For example: "Sie war mit der amerikanischen ja?" I guess it should sound more like:

"Sie war zusammen mit dem Amerikaner, ja?" But thats just my opinion.

PS: German beer is great, isn't it?

>>518034518034

Well, you'll be glad to know I'm not one of them. Not after actively studying world war two, as its one of my favorite subjects.

>>518281518281 Heh. Yeah. Google translate isn't very good. And I'm glad we understand eachother.

>>518319518319

Yup, thats really good to know.

Perfect. You captured the darkness of war and Rainbow Dash's pain perfectly. Just watch the spelling and this fic is platinum.

Keep it up!

Sadly, this is what happens in war. Aren't we humans just grand?

>>518336518336

FALLOUT 3 REFERENCE!

another good chapter keep it up.

also YAY explosions!  

Great chapter! ;)

Great story, but I beg you... PLEASE run this story through a spell check. Write it in a writing program, then copy paste it to there. Trust me... it helps a lot.

>>519020519020 Will do. As of now I'm going to sleep.

THIS  story can take ALL my fucks

DAAAAW poor rainbow dash she is all sad and scared....and coverd in blood DAAAAW poor dashie

>>518817518817 .... Wut?

Great chapter, you really captured the essence and brutallity of war.

oh poor rainbow she's so scared, great story as allways i looked for a war fic a long time ago and finally you made one excelent keep em coming

Dixon, I will rip your head off if only this were real and I could go back in time... Only after I killed Hitler personally, but hey, that's just me...

...Oh my god.

This is amazing.

Awesome. Thats all that needs to be said

This chapter felt comparitively unedited.

Is this some alternate reality where the mainland United States was attacked?  Sounds like it.

Also, equine animals have hair, not fur.  If saying hair sounds weird, just say "her coat."

You also mention her "arms"

>>524687524687 Thank you for pointing out this flaw. I'll change it now. I know some parts sound confusing but it'll all be be explained eventually

Alright i love history, and ponies. This story is just......the best.

This chapter was a lot better than the previous one. You really captured the as Ken Burns called it "The Universe of the Battle"

Wait was the United States attacked? What ?

Your descriptions seem rushed. Slow Down and don't do too many things in the same paragraph.

Eg: "Rainbow Dash looked at the piece of apple before grabbing it with her teeth, before she slowly started chewing on the fruit. The taste was pretty plain compared to how the apples tasted back in Equestria but she savored the taste as it reminded her of home. When she was finished she continued to look into the darkness in front of her. Bishop stayed silent, trying not to pressure the pony into saying something."

You try to combine two ideas (apple tasting plain and reminding her of home) in the same sentence. I personally think that it could be more than one sentence.

Eg: "The apple tasted bland in comparison to the ones in Equestria. Despite this, she savored the taste, as it reminded her of home."

Don't get me wrong it's a nice story it just needs some work.

I like this so far....Why the hell does this remind me of the World at War campaign?

>>527409527409 Funnily eneough the origonal idea was suppose to be a call od duty crossover but in the end I thought that just being a war story with rainbow dash could be something diffrent yet unique

>>527449527449 Haha. Great story by the way. For some odd reason, Dixon making Rainbow freak out reminds me of when Gilda made Fluttershy cry...

That was great. I can only imagaine Rainbow's pain. But I think sh deserves a proper explaination as to how World War 2 began

>>526526526526 Heh. Dont worry. I know the plot sounds confusing now, but it all makes sense in the end.

Good chapter, no explosions but still good.

Good sir, I would like to order a hit on the one known as "Dixon". Fuckin' dick'ead.

Anywho, nice story so far mate. A few problems with grammar and/or spelling, but otherwise perfect so... pretty much what Ascension Call said on the last chapter.

I think this fic's a little unfair in its portrayal of the germans; the majority of american prisoners of war were treated with respect by their german captors, even when the SS was involved. It was mostly on the eastern front where cases involving execution and general mistreatment of prisoners occured regularly.  

>>534103534103

You glorious bastard. That was so random that I laughed.

I wanna see Rainbow Dash do a sonic Rainboom on Hitler's face

This is sorta out of the blue, but I've seen it in several fics and it confused the hell out of me: the idea that a FiM pony would be insulted by being called a horse by mistake. I don't get it. Where did this come from? It makes no sense to me.

Weeee!!! For a while, I confess, I refused to read this, simply because I couldn't bear to be torn away from my beloved Rocket to Insanity series. But now, I see I was wrong. I hope you can forgive me.

>>544919544919

Ponies and horses are two different equine animals. Albeit, ponies look like horses, but they are not. Understand?

>>551134551134 Yeah, I understand that. But I'm pretty sure Equestria doesn't have horses. What confuses me is the idea that they'd be offended by a word that probably doesn't even exist in their vocabulary.

Did you see the season one finale? Twilight transformed the mice into, as she said, "magical horses"...or...something of the sort. I remember, however, that she did call them horses, implying that Equestria does, in fact, have horse,>>551146551146. Okay?

>>551146551146

It would be like a big cat calling you a chimp. While you probably wouldn't be insulted, think of RD's personality. She probably would be insulted by being called a horse.

>>555023555023 I've seen the episode but I don't have that kind of memory.

>>555033555033 That would make sense if non-sapient horses existed in Equestria, but aside from that one line in one episode, there is no evidence of this. I think the writers put that in for the obligatory Cinderella reference, and then... forgot about it.

>>555124555124

Meh, good point.

I CLAIM FIRST!

Excellent.... yeeees....

>>564007564007

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Son of a rabid mongrel bitch... I. Want. Him. DEAD! Honestly it'd be kinda fitting if he tried to sell his team out to save his own skin, they escaped and the nazis execute him as he begs for his life.

Sadistic tendencies aside, nice to see a new chapter up, was starting to gat worried. This promises to be good.

>>564152564152

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>>564390564390

yea

These chapters are to shoohohort!

one of these men are not like the other one of these men are dicks

>>564283564283     Looks like I got the hate factor I wanted

>>567344567344 Heheh. Yeah, but anything that hurts Dashie tends to send me into a frothing rage. Plus he seems like a douche in general.

But I digress. It, like the others, is a good chapter. With the other stories ya wrote, I have no idea if ya love or hate Dashie so here's sincerely hoping ya don't kill her off this time.

>>567356567356 Well. To ease you nerves, Rainbow Dash is my favorite pony. I'm pretty much interested in stories involving her in general. As for killing her off, you'll just have to wait and see.

Thank you for your posotive comments. :)

>>567403567403 Good to know. Wasn't sure if ya liked her or just enjoyed torturing the poor lil' filly. Still silently begging for her to survive and maybe the tragedy tag relates to the soldiers or the dead prisoner?

Speaking of which, I have two alternate theories for sgt. Shithead.

1; He's either really sore about the prisoner's death and is blaming Dashie for it or

2; ... He's a genuine sadist, taking pleasure in Dashie's fear and suffering, using any excuse he can think of to prolong his actions. Is prolong the right word there?

You're welcome mate.

>>568781568781 Is that good or bad?

that face was when rainbow dash got hurt other than that i love it more please!

They... shot... Rainbow...

Fuck the Japanese... I know where those two nukes are heading...

>>568962568962 Come again?

Intense really displays the horrors of war well!

when they shot rainbow dash that was this face was there. oh i love what you have so far keep up the good work i was my fan fiction was as good as yours

one does not simply shoot rainbowdash

i thought people Established that ponies were 4 feet tall?/

>>568989568989

I think this takes place in Germany, not japan.

Close enough.

... I could rage for hours about rein-acting the holocaust with Nazis replacing the Jews, but can ya blame me? FUCKERS SHOT DASHIE! WE NEED MORE RAGE ICONS!

How'd Dixon get to be a sergeant anyway? His existance is bad for the squad. If he can't work in a team or adapt to the situation, he should be in a different role.

Pleasantly surprised to see a new chapter up so quickly.

FUCKERS SHOT DASHIE!

>>569424569424 i think he means to use the nukes on the Germans because they shot dash.

>>569424569424>>569495569495

Bingo. Instead of bombing Japan with the two nukes, we should bomb Berlin and... umm... lets go with Frankfurt.

DAMN

Excuse me I have guns to pack and a delorean to steal

You spelled Calvary wrong... but other than that a good fiction. Your ways of writing emotion are improving as well as your details.  

>>569339569339 the japs(or is it the germans?) did! lol

MUTHAFUCKA SHOT RAINBOW DASH!!!

1) How dare they shoot Dash!

2) Bishop counted help but smirk as he helped the wounded sergeant to his feet. Should say couldn't.

"...your the only ones you hasn't killed me yet!"

Haven't

Just letting you know.

PLEASE TELL ME THAT NAME IS A RISE AGAINST REFERENCE!

Poor Dashie. Stick in there!

>>571536571536 Heheh. Yeah it is. :)

It was the song that inspired me to make this story.

>>569399569399 Well. I though it would be more cute if Rainbow Dash was small enough to hold in your arms.