• Member Since 6th Sep, 2014
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PowerPuffBronyNRG


I like PPG & MLP

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"T-T-Ticktock?" she whispered out slightly blushing pink,
"Feel warmer now?" I ask
"Y-yeah..." she said looking deep into my eyes and I followed.

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Comments ( 8 )

Such a cute fanfic, please do more Derptock :derpytongue2:

DERPTOCK FOR LIFE!!!!!!

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You made Tick Tock smile. You defy Ponies with Pockets Productions' canon! Charge!!!!!

If this doesn't get in the Featured Box... *cracks neck* Someone's gotta die... This story is too good not to be...

Well the plot is.

I'm sorry in advance if I sound over-critical.

This story is pretty rushed. Scratch that, it's extremely rushed. I felt like there was a jumping-bean in the story, forcing us to bounce with I.

More descriptors would be nice, but then again... this is Tick Tock's perspective.

Speaking of which, it wasn't really like he was telling the story. When you're telling a story from a character's perspective, you need to know how the character acts, thinks, speaks, everything.

Sorry if I sound harsh... just trying to help...

And like I said, I really liked the plot. If you're ever up to it, I loved to do a Colab.

Eyyyyyyyyy its tick tock from that doctor whooves and assistant! I think everyone saw the first episode but only 5% of the people continued to watch it afterwards... I know about tick tock and I like his personality and he's probably the most unique character the fandom has made! But I ship doctor derpy - I mean the slice of life episode gave it away :derpytongue2:

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