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Solid Poison


YO! I write stuff. Primarily comedy for now but I will experiment with other genre's. some will go better that others.

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Your Faithful Reader,
Deadinlight.

So Derrick and Sunbutt created a magical bond. Would be fun if both of their feelings mix with eachother.
Derrick shows more kindness and Celestia becomes stricter.

you're and your are not interchangeable

5217799 yeah....I'm not good at that...sorry..

5217799 I'll try though... I hope you're not too upset. :twilightsmile:

5217668 I have a few pages of the next part done but I wouldn't except much for a few days... I have huge project to do... After that though I'm going overdrive! :twilightblush:

It's been 2 years, fucking learn how to use modern English already Luna

5217856 it's simple:
You're = short for you are (You're tall, you're small, etc.)
Your = Shows possession (Your house, your majesty, etc.)

5217997 i looked it up already but thanks for your help!

"That may be so, but we don't run around naming our towns Humanville..." I said with a chuckle.

OOohh... Reeaaallly?
Check this out: bestplaces.net/images/city/humansville_mo.gif

5218356 :facehoof: well I stand corrected.... Even so... Ponyville... Not sure how I feel about that name.

5217965 not necessarily in my continuity... I haven't placed my story in the timeline yet but I'm thinking about making it take place before the wedding and before discord (its definitely already before twilight got wings) then again i might just mix and match things to my liking.

Yunno what?
I want Derrick to slap a bitch .

5220272 Might have to step up on that butt naming game, I've got more than 1 name for each princess:

Sunbutt/Lightbutt = Celestia
Moonbutt/Darkbutt = Luna
Sparklebutt/Magicbutt = Twilight
Lovebutt/Candybutt = Cadence

And for the lols, the princes:
Shinybutt = Shining Armor
Bluebutt/GPSbutt (Cuz he has a compass on his butt) = Blue Blood

5221544 he didn't completely forgive Luna... And he isn't exactly firing on all cylinders right now because of the golden bud cider

5221376 I could probably actually use some of these... Considering every character here will appear in the story at some point... :twilightsheepish:

5223342 good story so far. I love it ;)

5229368 thanks!:twilightsmile: I should be getting the draft of part 5 done by today hopefully... Maybe even the chapter posted depending on how tired I am...
(I have a big presentation afterschool, senior stuffstuff:twilightoops:)

5230744 well good luck with that man.

i hate flash sentry...the one from the movie. since hes has no personality and was made to be a pseudo-boyfriend for money.
~commercial jingle~
~Every Barbie needs a Ken, Thats why they created you~

dislike this flash as well since he has no personality and is just unneeded, ANY two bit guard can do what he did and have a better name to boot.
good story but a oc in place of flash would be better imho.

5251854 hmm..
I see... Or i could just GIVE him a personality.... Which I plan to do...

I want to avoid creating too many OC's unless its necessary for the story...

5252655 Love this story, by the way I can't wait to see how DJ will get away from Celestia. XD ALSO I can't wait till he meets Discord that'll be a trip. :rainbowlaugh:

5252872 yes..... indeed it will be a trip..... :twilightsheepish:

5252655 if you can do a good job then ill accept it. hope you caan impress me as much as the author of 'What is love' and 'This is love' did when they did flash's personality

Why do you keep saying "danm"? It's spelled "damn".

This is really good man i really enjoy reading about DJ very interesting character development indeed.....(Reminds me of Malideus).....

"What if.... I made that your obligation?" She said, my eyes turned to pinpricks as Twilight turned to her. "What if you made what his obligation?" She asked curiously. "Discovering the importance and power of friendship, by going out and meeting a variety of new ponies in ponyville..." Celestia said, her smile widening as the idea came together in her head, I guess this is my fitting punishment...I think I'd rather take the dungeon...

completely bullshit.

Twilight brought up another important thing "You're going to have to start talking like a pony. Everypony instead of everyone, nopony instead of nobody, and er..." "Buck instead of fuck..." Flash finished for her with a chuckle making Celestia giggle

thats racist..or speciest..whatever, there are other creatures in the world and he could just be a worldly pony. always disliked the 'hey you're in equestria and even though you are human you MUST SPEAK THE WAY WE WANT YOU TO or YOU MUST MAKE FRIENDS COS I SAY SO.' i only have 2 real life friends and i rather have them as friends than others. because they are true friends and would take bodily harm for me..one already has aaaand im ranting and rambling..

5288808 yeah.... honestly this part was hard to write, because I just wanted to set up a reason for Derrick to go back to ponyville, and a reason for him to socialize with the others (I also thought it would be funny if Derrick had to write those silly friendship letters, him being the jerk he is and all). I guess there was a million ways to set that up without this excuse but After many rewrites I still kinda don't like it, and it's a bit frustrating. I could have spent more time on the reasoning, but I don't want to take something like this TOO seriously (I still do this as a fun little hobby when there's not a controller in my hands) so I'll just roll with it and make it work! :eeyup:

And as far as the pony speech, he's just trying to blend... Not sure where you're going with the racism or whatever...:rainbowhuh:

Anyway thanks for the feedback!:twilightsmile:

5289800
Notice: im ranting and making petty arguments..please let it in no way affect your story..unless you feel the need or something.

i can understand trying to blend, thats not a problem to me. its when in the stories that its more or less forced upon them.
ex: "So is everybody ready?" 'Don't you mean everypony?" so and so asked with a sly smile. "No because I'm not a pony and neither is spike you racist fuck."
..i think my example is from an actual story...
and by racist,specist..it might be elitist.. unsure.. but its forcing others to speak in such a way even when there are other races on the planet, i might just be grasping at straws, but it seems wrong to me. sure, you get turned into a pony and you can say things their way but for the love of all dont be one of the ones that speak as such to other species.
ex2: "Alright Everypony-" "We are not ponies, pony." a griffin said while gesturing to his companions.

i might not be saying my thoughts in a clear way..sorry if its confusing

good chapter man keep it up

....Its this some kind of lunar r...Nah....Good chapter anyway ^^'

Daaaaym 3rd base allready? WITH BOTH PRINCECSSES? daaaaym dude great so far

need to fix that wall of text, my friend.

Clifffhanger be damned!
Great chapter though.

5374297 yeah... LOL its always something.... When I eventually start doing this stuff on PC I'll go through and fix stuff like that...

This guy is so fucked up right now :rainbowlaugh:, i can't wait for the next one

MORE MORE MORE MORE!!! this had me smiling all the way through!!! cant wait!!!

absolutelty perfect and completeley hilarious XD.

5221376
bruh blueballs = blueblood

Engage the stick motherfucker! Please add this some how.

5444649 I...I don't get it.... Next chapter is done Btw it just needs to be checked, get ready for 22 pages of awkwardness!

It would be cool if Luna´s plan backfired, like wen she enter his dream , she will be in the middle of a Left 4 Dead 2 Lvl .:rainbowlaugh:

5446407 just type it into YouTube....... you'll see XD.

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