seems good so far, but you might need an editor or a prereader.

Wat.

I'll favorite and like it and stuff, but...

Wat.

You said there was a "mare" you found and her name was "Cotton."

Now she's a filly, her name Darta.

Wat.

Well, good chapter anyways, and I see you are getting better at your spelling/grammar.

Keep up the good work.

IMMA GET DRUNK OFF DIS SH*T!

-Digit

>>497366497366 I forgaot I named her alright, I,ll fix it right now ok.

This story just keeps getting better and better

>>535972535972thx dude, glad you like it

also, anyone got any suggestions, let me know

every time a new person speaks you should start a new line.

>>542345542345 thx for the tip dude, I'll use it well

Wait.

I haven't read this, and now I am.

You referenced MY story and YOUR story in one chapter?

Damn.

Well, next chapter!

-Digit

Wait...

I'm so confused...

Vortex is indeed NOT from my story, nut one from yours?

Well, now I see her as a fucking sky blue gryphon! What the fuck!

-Digit

OH WAIT!

Can you use (possibly) one of the characters from my story?

I mean, if that's ok with you...

-NOW Digit

>>547297547297 I think that can be arranged.

>>550447550447

Image: http://lunachan.net/pony/src/133410714317.png

>>550521550521 just tell me witch one you want me to add.

>>550544550544

Hm...

Why not Stargazer and Cobalt? It might not be canon to my story, but who cares?

Short but still good

>>574895574895 thx dude, I do aim to please

Hey, could you add my OC?

>>925623925623 um, sure. I don't see why not.

Why dont you join Cloudsdale :(