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Can't wait for more!
495295 Glad to hear it! It might not seem like much, but the few likes/favourites/views I've gotten in such a short time tell me that there are at least some people interested in the story. Of course, comments are always the one step further where you clicked many buttons after reading, instead of just 1 or 2, to express your delight.
Also, I'm just going to stick to copying the emote you used, as the limited selection that we had just didn't contain something I felt was more appropriate. 
Need more!!! =D
For your first fic it's pretty impressive. I've yet to see someone take that approach to a TaviScratch fic, their personalities seem really fitting. I'm really looking forward the next chapter.
Can't wait for more!
Pills, Demons And Etc. - Velvet Revolver
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And more you shall receive - in due time, my friend.
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I'm also glad to hear that you think what I'm doing with TaviScratch is original. Much joy.
I'm glad you think so! I was so worried that I won't be very good at writing a fanfic as I'm used to writing my own characters from scratch.
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Me too! Wait, is it weird for a writer to be eagerly awaiting more of their own writing?
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Hmm, after listening to that song and finding a copy of the lyrics to make sure I had gotten them right, I have to say it: Relevant Music is Relevant!
Because I couldn't decide whether to give you a round of applause from Octavia or from Vinyl, have both!
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Oh, another good OctaScratch? Tracking. Glad to see plot is different - often I see Octavia who needs to swallow her pride, but now it Vinyl's turn to learn something, it seems. Good!
Tracking! Good concept, way better than they meet in a bar and argue for 10 pages generic fic
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Yay, more people who think that this story is good and has an interesting plot thus far!
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And geez, you have no idea how difficult it was to not just sit them down in a bar and make them argue. 
Granted, they still argue, but they're Octavia and Vinyl! They're not supposed to get along at first!
Many thanks.
Oh, and I'll just say it here: Thank you for the welcome.
Interesting so far! Watching. /o/
Awesome, some grammar mistakes but no many. Just one or two.
I hope you update often, I'm all sucked up playing minecraft instead of reading a few good fics like these.
Keep it up! You're making me start to like Octy and Vinyl!
I like this so far... Can't wait to see where you go with this :)
My favorite ship. And one of my new favorite stories! Keep up the awesome work!
Dude! Continue this! ^^
It's quite intriguing :3
I'm enthralled in stories like these and how they "amplify" (best word to use since this is music related xD ) from contradicting opponents to adoring companions c:
This. Is. Awesome.
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That aside, thank you for you interest in the story.
I've got very little going on in my life right now, so, lucky for you, I'll probably be updating this fairly frequently.
Not that it's necessary, but if you're going to mention that you believe I've made some grammatical mistake, I would appreciate if you could point them out to me. I know sometimes you realize that something you read is off, but you're not in editing-mode so you just skip by it and you don't really care enough to going searching back for it, and that's fair.
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Not only am I capturing the attention of long time TaviScratch fans, but I'm making new believers? Excellent! All according to plan.
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Glad to hear it, and neither can I!
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Thanks for the kind words.
TaviScratch for life, my friend!
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Dude! I plan to!
I'm very happy to hear that my story has got you so enthralled already, and I hope I continue to please.
So far this story is pretty interesting, so I cant wait to see more. Oh and Octyscratch is win
Hmm very nicely done, I love Vinyl and Octavia ships and this is looking to be another good one.
Keep up the good work bro.
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there was a grammar mistake.. Can't find it. Well I'm no proofreader but if I see it I'll try to tell you.. 
Well let me see
hmmm, alright I’m gonna follow this. It's interesting enough.
The only complain i have is that i don't see a single good thing about Vinyl so far.
She is the bad kind of party mare, alcoholic, extremely judgmental, disrespectful and constantly lets her only friend hanging. Not to mention that the only time it looked like she doesn't try to get fired was when she stopped herself from outright suggesting to get fired.
seriously give us something to think that she deserves even some of the kindness she gets from Octy.
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Thank you for the kind following of my story. And yes, yes it is.
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And I hope it continues to be a good one!
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Haha, alright, no biggy. I've been considering getting a prereader, but, honestly, I don't really care that much and just want to get the chapters up when I feel like it. Also, I reread the damn things at least 3 times. :P
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It may not come across as planned, but I've never written a character like Vinyl before, and I wanted to try some brash and bold this time around.
That's completely fair criticism, and it also happens to be completely on purpose. I wanted to set up what these characters look/seem like on the outside much more before really jumping into them. I can understand why you'd be frustrated, but I'll I can say is: Yup, that's Vinyl; part of the plan is to have you wonder why in Equestria put up with her - it makes you really curious to find out what's really behind all of her show.
At least, that's how see it.
Anyways, thank you kindly for the comment and being vocal about your concerns.
wooooooo updates!
bah I never have anything interesting to say other than "good work" yadda yadda so I'll say good work and keep it up
What?! No fluff?!
The romance?! 
THE DRAMA!! 
hope I didn't sound harsh, I always do for some reason.... 
Were's the love?!
No, but seriously when's the romance tag going to stick?
I can't wait for the next chapter
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I know the feeling man, I really do.
Yeah, that's the worst part about being current with a story and not reading a completed one: You feel obligated to comment on the updates, but unless you're a fairly serious writer, you often just feel like you have nothing to contribute but, "Um... it's nice."
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FLUFF IS FOR THE WEAK!
I understand where you're coming from; I do feel a bit bad for leading readers like you on with the romance tag and no romance as of yet. But, trust me, it's coming, I'm just trying to get the pace to feel right; I really enjoy well done, organic romance, so I always make a point that in any of my writing to try and make it feel as real as I can. I've still written things where characters are involved really quickly, but I do my best to explain that through circumstances and/or character personalities.
For Vinyl and Octavia, I just feel like they need some time to build up. Hopefully you don't die waiting for it.
Just look at his pic I don't think he likes waiting >.< jk jk
This is a great story so far i can wait to see what happens next.
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Fluff could be for the strong too!
DON'T YOU EVER DENY THAT!! 
Until then I'll survive, living off of Minecraft and weekly episodes of MLP.
Yeah I understand don't want to rush things right? But how many chapters until something big happens (like something that tells us were this story is leading to, i.e. Vinyl dies, Mix quits on Vinyl, I dunno) It's progressing is awfully slow... But then again you probably need more chapters, a slow incline to what ever climax your planning right?
“I came here to ask you that same question. I don’t hear from you in almost a week and then I find out your in the hospital?”
minor thing, just wanted to point it out
i really do like where this is going. My only issue so far is that the pacing during the middle seemed a bit off, namely that Vinyl was cussing out her employer after only a little bit of interaction that the reader was able to observe. It just seemed a tad...fast.
569486 Ah, well I'm glad you did! I reread my own work a lot, but because I'm not super serious about this, count this more as practice/fun than anything else, and am mostly confident in my ability to write something with at least 90% (ish) accurate grammar/spelling, I haven't gotten a pre-reader (wow that sentence was really drawn out, but I'm far too lazy to try and fix it
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570868 When you say "the middle section" I'm not really sure where you mean; if you could give me a more specific area I'd be happy to discuss this specific point (because, even if I don't take this that seriously, I am always interested in ways to improve my writing).
Much thanks for your comments, and hopefully your reply that will help improve this work.
i like how you write vinyl, good chapter
I like this. There's a couple other Vinyl & Octavia stories out there, but so far this seems to be the best one. The characterization and dialogue is very natural, you've got the "show don't tell" going nicely, there's not too many adjectives, good spelling and grammar . . . Do keep writing. And really, I would say that you're in the top 10% of fic's on this site. There's a couple errors here and there, but I just noticed one by accident. Brains are really good at filling in what should be there.
WE demand sooner updates
Wow...that was amazing I can't wait for the next chapter.
Yay! An update finally!
So far so good.
Another amazing chapter! Well done!
Don't worry, the characters' conversation flowed naturally and like you said an author has to deal with what the characters feel they want not what you the author wants.
As long you don't force something on them, they will slowly but surely grow in their own way and push the story forward organically. 
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(So you're not crazy unless I am
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I like how I write Vinyl as well!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png Thanks.
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Oh gosh, I would not call this the best TaviScratch story by any stretch, but I appreciate the compliment nonethelss.
Now, to me, "there's not to many adjectives" sounds like criticism, but in the context it feels like it's supposed to be nicer, like: "you don't try to over describe things or use to many adjectives." If it's the later, then I will say thank you, but if it's the first: Honestly, I sometimes feel a little bad about writing such simple sentences/description and want to go back to add in adjectives and such, but I often don't for fear of over doing it.
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Well, I wouldn't want to disappoint the party brigade, so just you wait, you'll get the updates you all deserve.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
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Thanks, and me too!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_rainbowkiss_flip.png
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Thanks.
I know, it took forever, right?
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PRAISE PRAISE PRAISEdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png (I swear, I'm not actually very egotistical.
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That's good to hear; when I write dialogue I'm always thinking "Does this sound natural? Would anyone ever say this? Am I over-using a word/phrase? Am I not over-using a word/phrase even though a normal person might actually over-use it?"
Yeah, I feel like it's never a good idea to force your characters to do/say something for the sake of plot if it doesn't feel natural to them.
(Well, I may be a tad unstable [most artists/writers are], but I don't think we're crazy. Though, we are talking about fictional characters as if they were real people.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png )
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Good cause i got a 5 hour flight ahead of me in about 5 hours i expect results
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Yeah, a large problem I find when writing dialogue is giving each character a certain speech pattern to make them more real. I would say don't be afraid to overuse words in a character's speech if that's part of how they speak.
I have one male character who loves to use the word 'seriously' and it ends up in a lot of his lines (and no one else really says it in narrative like he does.). Another one of mine is very blunt in their speech and uses a minimum amonnt of words to get their point across while I have a different character who absolutely has an opinion on everything and literally cannot even stay quiet when it's in their best interest to (but is slowly learning to think before they speak to avoid escalating things) To make it even more complicated I have one main character that has english as their second language and it's difficult to write but I mostly have them use less slang and no contractions in opposition to the naive speakers.
So I don't think it is a matter of what a typical / 'normal' person would say but how you envision how your character would speak. It comes down to know your character's personality, background etc.
(Hope this helps
(I'm so used to talking about my characters as if they were real that my mother actually said to me once that she felt like she actually knew them because we discussed them so much
And yes us writers are never fully sane 
Others I talk to about characters look at me like I'm crazy when I say a character won't co-operate and they're all 'dude you're the author, just make them do it'. 
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Mhm, I very much agree with what you're saying. I know that I tend to give characters I feel a strong bond with the tendency of starting a lot of sentences/replies off with "well" because I find that I do it a lot in conversation. When I write Vinyl, for example, I cannot help notice how often she'll reply to Octavia by saying "Well, [rest of sentence]"; this is mostly because I look at Vinyl's personality as a part of my own - granted, it's a more crude, slightly less intelligent and philosophical version of part of my personality, but the similarities are there, nonetheless.
Characters need to have... well, character, and a good way to create that is in the way the speak; sure, their actions say a lot about them, but so do the things they say and how the say them.
Oh gosh, I cannot remember how many times I've told people, "No, you don't understand; characters are people: if you try to force them to do things your way, it messes everything up and is plain unnatural. I'm better of just letting my characters do what they want."
No dislikes
You win the internet. Good going, looking for more
I feel like the timeskips made their relationship change darastically.
739301 Quite right, quite right you are! I'm glad you pointed that out, even if I have no intention of fixing, but I'll address the matter still.
See, after I wrote this chapter I was quite aware that I time skipped rather drastically to accelerate their relationship, and I realized that, normally, I wouldn't want to do something like this, and I'd go back and change it. However, there are two reason I did not (now, mind you, I'm not saying they're good reasons, but they are my reasons, so try to understand):
1) While the story is slice-of-life, I have no intention of just always writing about their day-to-day activities. Yes, I included multiple scenes early of them just working together, but that was with the plan of setting up character and establishing the base of their initial relationship. This also doesn't mean I won't write more casual scenes, I'm just saying I didn't want to write a whole chapter of them hanging out (while it can be done well, it's rather difficult to write an entire chapter of just two people [ponies] hanging out, and keep it interesting enough to not lose readers over it).
2) This is just a fun side project. Seriously, I'm not writing this for it to get published; I'm writing a fun little piece for enjoyment, practice, and so that maybe a few other people online can get some enjoyment out of it here and there as well. If this were a serious project I'd never let myself leave a spot on the plot/writing like this.
Now, none of this is to say I'm actually justified in this, but, at the end of the day, I'm the author, so it's my call. Oh, and it's not like I'm not trying to make a good product with this; I still would like people to enjoy this, and I hope this one little hiccup/issue isn't going to bother too many people too seriously.
Hopefully this wasn't just a needlessly long reply (though, it likely wasdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png ), and I don't expect you to pat me on the head and say you're okay with this issues, but I do hope you understand my thoughts on the matter. I'm mostly just a trifle lazy.
739898 I always find myself wondering what two ponies as different as Vinyl and Octavia would talk about, and I like reading about more casual hangouts between characters because it increases the feeling of realism, but i really dont mind at all, and i dont think others will either.
i rather like this story, i think you should be proud of it.
If it means anything, I just waded through about 25 502 errors per chapter. Your that good.
744373 Uh... what?
I actually have no idea what that's supposed to mean, and I would be grateful if you could explain that to me.
Last night every time I would click on next chapter I would get 502 BAD GATEWAY. And I would have to refresh 25 times in order for the next page to actually come up.
746880 Ooooooooh. See, I read it was "I just waded through bout '25 502' errors per chapter" and thought it was maybe some clever insult about how every character (as in letters and numbers) I wrote was a mistake/error... or something. Like I said, when I first read your comment, I was rather confused.
Thanks for clearing that up, and also thank you very much; you clearly enjoy this story quite a bit to put up with that.