Sombra escaped his death at the crystal empire narrowly, and has since been hiding in a Manehatten suburb. He has a house, a roommate, and a female pegasus with a daughter who is interested in him. This is a problem. Oh and he is hearing voices...really annoying voices that mock him. Terrific right? He has plans to restore his power, and take back the Crystal Empire but unfortunately for him, Celestia knows he survived too. Worst of all...in order to not be found, he has to be...nice.
Popular list as of 10/29/14. Thank you all for your support.
Tags will be added as they become relevent. Partly inspired by Kudzuhaiku's The Chase. Mostly inspired by a friend.
Edited and Proofread by YourPersonalTherapist Call him Canook, he loves it.
[EDIT] Drama tag has been added due to the site now having that tag. And me being here to add it. lol
.......yes.....Yes......YES!!!!!!!
As wwe ryback put it "Feed me moar!!!!!!!"
Also this is something i never thought i like but a sombra romance story: you took it from the paper, shoved into a cannon, fired it into space, flew it into the sun, turned it into a chicken, roasted the chicken, brought back down in a flying cow, turned it into a catfish and served it to us on a golden plate as the best hamburger i have visually red.
5/5 moustaches 5/5 photo finish
Thinking about a fav already. I'll wait a bit though
This story seems interesting. I love the way that Angel is completely in love with Sombra's alter ego.
5197035 someone figured out my process.
5198080
WELP
Heh, okay then. Well, I'll give this a follow based solely on the fact that the concept made me laugh.
This is pure gold.
Lovin' it!
This shit will be epic!
5198460 Yes, yes it will.
5198320 Thank you. And it will only get better from here.
5198191 I do that all the time.
5198491
At the end at the decription of the story it should go:
"He has to be...nice.
...Fuck"
5198596 I was thinking about adding to it. Something like "that'll end well."
Congrats on getting into the popular story section I knew i wasn't the only one who loved this.
Now back to your dungeon to do chapter 2 i'm waiting :D
5198633 I did what now?
5198685
Popular story section just saw it come up!
Oh yeah and you have a dungeon....What Pinkie Pie is my favourite for a reason!
5198717 Well...that was unexpected. A dungeon you say? Hmmm... very well I shall return to it!
I
at this. Good job! You said you were gonna do something different with Sombra, and you did.
5200516 Yes, yes I did.
5200526
*Pokes you*
Congrats.
5200554 Thank you. I am pretty psyched.
5200583
It's a good feeing, hitting the popular list. Cherish it.
Very much liking this so far!
Haha I love the concept and the way you make sombra a likeable character with the introduction of a "Jimminy cricket" character, favorites and can't wait for more!
5201485 More is on the way! I am writing three stories now though...
*sees you bio*
Well, don't you say Sherlock
5203172 actually I don't say that... he did. And now for something completely different...
REPTILE VS LIU KANG........................................FIGHT!
Ah. Something different. Isn't this nice?
For starters, I honestly didn't give this story much focus at first, but once I read it, I really liked it! The only part that bugs me is the sudden already set date from Angel. It happened too fast, don't you think? I personally would have extend that part and make it more troublesome for Sombra (I would have laughed my ass off if you used the word Sombrero as his name instead of Somber). Just a small detail, 'kay?
On the other hand, I laughed. I laughed at some parts, but it was interesting nevertheless.
One last thing. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! ....Oh, and you might wanna check for the grammar. A few errors here and there. Kay?
5220913 yes. That was s bit rushed out there. But keep in mind Sombra has been there for over a year already. In The Chase( which I am basing parts of this story off of) most Pegasi date for like, a week and get married. I will be troublesome for him and not just from that standpoint. Yeah my grammar kinda sucks. But it is getting better. You should have seen it before my editor and I got to it! Gilda thinks it's funny to call him Sombrero too..
5221031 Oh, that clarifies things. However, Sombra must still show restrainment, shouldn't he? He secretly wishes to recover the Crystal Kingdom, but a relationship would only slow him down. Just saying.
You and me both, my friend. Grammar is a... I was gonna say bitch, but complicated is better.
One more thing.
I'M GONNA FOLLOW YOU AND FAVORITE THE SHIT OUT OF THIS IF YOU USE SOMBRERO ON HIM AND YOU ACTUALLY MAKE HIM USE A MEXICAN HAT.
5221047 the name next chapter. The hat....maybe.
5221136 *INSERT SQUEE SOUNDTRACK*
Ok, I really enjoyed the chapter. Who knew that Head Voice was an attractive, self-conscious mare that lives inside Sombra's head or that Gild developed a crush on the guy. It's quite the coincidence that Sombra and Shining were teaching at the school in the same day. Given Octavia and Treble's reaction to Sombra actually educating the foals, along with Cherrilee's desire to see the foals learn, I predict that by the next chapter he'll have a few more admirers. I hope the next chapter comes soon.
5248643 sombra wasn't intended to teach anypony. He just did it because they were wasting the time of the students. Treble is an odd character... the description of her may have been off. Her coat is light blue in case forgot to put that in there. Her mane is a strange gray green color.
Shining armour... Your arrogance in the guard will be your undoing...
Me when i started reading: Gilda has a crush!?!
ok there is no way this can get better.
Me when i got halfway through reading: Cheerilee's in this too!? This just got better!
Very entertaining there are definitely a few mistakes here and there, the ones I can remember are "put off" not "off put", "school's" to show ownership... I'm pretty sure there are others, but I can't remember. Anyway, yes it was a pretty good chapter, but I do wonder why almost every female he meets has to fall in love with him? I mean unless he looks like alternate universe Sombra then I would understand. I would also like to see more reluctance to anything good or right or helpful in any sense. He is making a transition into being good, so far he's been acting pretty good without much resistance. Anyway, still pretty good, like it so far.
5249028 never said they were in love with him.
5248888 the town is also becoming a haven for villains down on their luck.
5248802 Yup.
5249489 Oh my mistake, be infatuated with then?
5249671 they are seeing his qualities.
5249722 Sure.
5221153 [youtube=http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=kjM6qJGUqIw] soundtrack added.
5254690
Very interesting... I shall follow.
Also, some advice. Change the color of Jimminy's voice (I shall refer to him as such until a name is given) so that you can tell who's talking/thinking. Sombra thinking to himself and Jimminy talking sort of blend together because there is no discernible difference between the two.
5263519 That is a good Idea, I'll make sure to fix that and change it for the future.
Ok, I enjoyed this chapter. Hard to believe I only realized that a chapter was updated a few days ago.
5300611 thank you. It was a lot packed into a chapter though... With more coming in the next.
5300748 I hope the next one comes soon as I want to see how the former antagonists (Sunset, Blueblood, and Trixie) get along and maybe see how Sombra would defeat Shining without compromising his identidy.
5300774 I have to write another chapter for my other story first. Then I will. Don't worry, it'll be done pretty fast. Back to "former antagonists"... I plan on there being more. Notice how they were all unicorns In this chapter?
Good going so far buddy! Keep up the good work!
signed,
Sunshine
5300940 Jeez, there is a lot here, ya know? Hope you don't get swamped with too many plot devices. :P Still not sure with what you're going to do here, but I look forward to it.
Damn, that was a lot of stuff this chapter.
i really like this story, it's crazy fun. lets see who we got involved so Far
-Sombra
-Shining Armor & Cadence
-Celestia & Luna
-The (Former) Elements of Harmony
-Sunset Shimmer
-Trixie
-Gilda
-Cherilee
-Chrysalis
-Blue Blood (Gezz, Every Member of the royal family getting in on this huh)
-Octavia (kind of)
wow. that's a full list, and i was paraphrasing a bit there. if you could just find a way to add Mare-Do-Well