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"Oh boy oh boy, this is going to be awesome!"
You slowly open the door as you hear a familiar voice muttering to itself. "Hello?" you call into the darkness. "Hello, Rainbow Dash? Is that you?" You flick on the light switch to see Rainbow Dash, standing alone and talking to herself.
"Oh, hi Brony Hero!" Rainbow Dash turns to look at you eagerly, her eyes shining with anticipation. "I thought 'Rainbow Dash, you're so awesome, you should go right to the end of the story so you're at the most exciting bit!" She rears up on her hind legs, boxing her forehooves in the air. "What's the plan then? I thought I could do a sonic rainboom in ten seconds flat and..."
"Wow, wow, this is awkward." You cut across Rainbow Dash, shaking your head grimly. "Look Dash, I'm sorry but the story ended one chapter ago. There's no path here, you're pretty much out of the story."
"Aw." Rainbow Dash's face falls as she slumps to the ground. "I was going to have so many fun bits to do as well!"
"It's okay Dash." You step forwards, bringing out a large object from behind your back. "Tell you what, you can do something..."
"...Just climb into this cardboard box for me."
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Weird image o_0
Apparently Princess Celestia doesn't like being seduced... ![]()
AND I was just about to do something like this. *shrug*
This is going to the featured bar. I'm saying it right now. This story is absolutely amazing and hillarious. I never would have thought og trying something along the lines of this before. You sir, Are genious.
"There be somethin' on the horizon cap'n!"
"What be it lad!?"
"Featured bar, dead ahead sir!"
Honestly, we need more choose your own adventure style fanfics. Maybe even an collab between authors, combining their efforts for one awesome story.
Oh, and this was really funny, by the way. ![]()
>Desperatly searches for any ounce of Spike in it.
>Finds nothing.
Fluttershy Pillow- I.. I love you.
Seriously, this was just tongue enough in cheek for me. Loved it.
Somehow... I knew that ending was the right one...
... somehow...
Well, now I'm emperor.
Yeah, I chose "seduce Fluttershy" and I'd do it again! Haha, love this story man, great job!
This can't be THAT fun...
/ off to try
Edit- THIS IS TOO HARD OH EM GEE
Got annoyed and seduced celestia... Dx
it's fun, but... I keep getting bad endings...
-Enslaved by Fluttershy
-Murdered
-Crippled
all of my "WHY?!"
Bought tons of mountain dew, went to internet and seduced the princess. Is that the shortest way to die?
All of my wut. I must say tho, weirdly entertaining story. Partly because of humanity's need to get to ALL the endings. (And all the chapters too. Secret ending is best ending.) Well done.
Oh God what is this I don't even?
I'm sorry. But I can't relate to this ignorant, imbecilic excuse for a protagonist in any way.
That said, it is supposed to be a comedy and perhaps a bit satirical, so I'm not going to downvote it or anything. It's just that... this "brony" is far too idiotic and narrow-minded for his own good, and I just can't bear to read any more of this. ![]()
Format and grammar-wise, though, excellent work. This fic is certainly a big-step for storytelling on FF, no matter how mind-blowingly STUPID it's contents might be. ![]()
This reminds me of those goosebumps chose your own adventure books.
BUT.
NOW.
WITH.
PONIES!!!!
i fucking love you
TAKE ALL MY THUMBS
I finish the story...
The guy is still an Imbecile!
But I won't say I didn't like it, good job my good sir.
Excellent satire.
Captures the flaws of the brony community in the most humorous way possible.
That moment when you get on after finishing and see that you have 39 unread favorites, all for the same story![]()
This has peaked my curiosity. I am posting this before starting. Look for my after post to. See if I am satisfied.
After reading through every chapter just to make sure about all the endings. I have come to this conclusion.
I had a brain aneurysm from derping so hard.
Rating: Everyone.
Yet there is still cussing, the occasional "Molestia" Joke, and death.
Make it Teen.
Fine then. Keep your emoticon secrets! See if I care!
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PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE TELL ME!!! ![]()
Jk. I've lost interest honestly.
Meh to myself, considering I have no reason to read a CYOA when I have a story to write, but... meh.
>>510968 [img] code. The emoticons are stored on my dropbox. See also this:
Two new ones since I took that screenshot
dude. i know everyone says this, but I had this idea while reading those old goosebumps books. Nice job though. I couldn't have done a better one on roidz
I've been trying to figure out how to do a "Choose your own adventure" story for quite a while now. I feel so stupid for not thinking of putting hyperlinks to the chapter
Oh well. Thanks to you, I think I'll finally be able to do it ![]()
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I always enjoyed reading these kind of stories as a kid (my favorite being the one where there was no page that actually led you to the final page, you had to just turn to page 101 and the story would end) It warms my heart to see that someone has created a pony version. I will read soon.
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And now I know why Rainbow Dash wasn't in the story, and why I hadn't found chapter 62 from selecting every option I could find (unless I forgot it, like I did for pressing buttons in the Tardis and going with Honey Trap :\).
This was a brilliant idea, and I hope you have more brilliant ideas.
I'm sorry, but... What? What the fuck was that? Seduce Fluttershy pillow? Seduce Celestia? ![]()
Oh well, that's how far I got, and then I got bored and ragequit.
Sorry, I don't know why this has so many likes. It sucks!
Main character is so stupid and creepy, that it's impossible to identify with him in any aspect. C'mon I can deal with redemption of any villain, I can read Sweet Apple Massacre while I'm eating, but this abomination discourages me to read any further. I was praying that I would find Rainbow Dash and she will kill him with sonic rainboom. Unfortunately it didn't happen. ![]()
Story is so bad, that most trollfics has better storyline. Maybe it's because tag "Human" means "It sucks" I dunno, normally I don't read stories with human.
And maybe some would say, that they likes that for idea, but even the idea is dumb. You can't make a decent interactive story in this format. It has no memory. Twilight Sparkle doesn't remember that she already kicked your ass out of library, and you can just go back and she acts like nothing have happened. It should be written as text game with variables.
Seriously I don't know why would anyone like that. ![]()
I wanted to write a choose your own adventure... but then I did some fancy mathamatics... and realized that would be like 60 chapters... I'm to lazy to write that!
great stroy i lol'ed at the seduction scenes and i fucked up a lot of times but i love stories where you are the character and if you pick your path i love them even more ![]()
Aww, no marrying RD?
Anyways, I was wondering where you were, Rainbow, why did you hide from me!?
btw, nice job
I loved these things as a kid :D. I'd try ALL the endings until I got one I liked. Thatnk you for reminding me of those. :)
#1: WHY CAN YOU SEDUCE EVERYONE/THING?!
#2: <.< Description lied. You can't marry Woona at all.
#3: Well played, good sir. Well played.
Luckily, actually pressing "ctrl+alt+E" didn't do anything to screw up my computer.
Okay, here's for an actual review...
First of all, this is really silly. And stupid. And silly. And brilliantly funny. And silly.
I have gone though this a gajillion times and clicked EVERY. SINGLE. OPTION. For example, every time you try to seduce a pony it ends badly, except with Trixie. The author obviously must be a Trixie fan. Also, there are only three decent endings, one sorta creepy ending, one kinda-decent ending, one best ending, one secret ending and one that isn't an ending at all. The rest are all horribly awful endings. I felt cheated that every time I did the sensible, logical thing I died bloodily.
That aside, it's plain to see that a lot of work went into setting this up. The only real criticism I can offer is that the "Brony Hero" was silly as all Hell and always behaved like a grade-A douschebag no matter which option you took. I suppose that was intended to be humorous, but it got annoying sometimes.
SPOILER ALERT: Chapter 33 and chapter 62 are impossible to reach by playing the game. But they're still fun. Check 'em out.
Interactive story... FUCK. YES.
Because Rainbow Dash is my favourite pony I find this both hilarious and disappointing. ![]()







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