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"Oh boy oh boy, this is going to be awesome!"
You slowly open the door as you hear a familiar voice muttering to itself. "Hello?" you call into the darkness. "Hello, Rainbow Dash? Is that you?" You flick on the light switch to see Rainbow Dash, standing alone and talking to herself.
"Oh, hi Brony Hero!" Rainbow Dash turns to look at you eagerly, her eyes shining with anticipation. "I thought 'Rainbow Dash, you're so awesome, you should go right to the end of the story so you're at the most exciting bit!" She rears up on her hind legs, boxing her forehooves in the air. "What's the plan then? I thought I could do a sonic rainboom in ten seconds flat and..."
"Wow, wow, this is awkward." You cut across Rainbow Dash, shaking your head grimly. "Look Dash, I'm sorry but the story ended one chapter ago. There's no path here, you're pretty much out of the story."
"Aw." Rainbow Dash's face falls as she slumps to the ground. "I was going to have so many fun bits to do as well!"
"It's okay Dash." You step forwards, bringing out a large object from behind your back. "Tell you what, you can do something..."
"...Just climb into this cardboard box for me."
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Weird image o_0
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"There be somethin' on the horizon cap'n!"
"What be it lad!?"
"Featured bar, dead ahead sir!"
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>Desperatly searches for any ounce of Spike in it.
>Finds nothing.
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Oh God what is this I don't even?
I'm sorry. But I can't relate to this ignorant, imbecilic excuse for a protagonist in any way.
That said, it is supposed to be a comedy and perhaps a bit satirical, so I'm not going to downvote it or anything. It's just that... this "brony" is far too idiotic and narrow-minded for his own good, and I just can't bear to read any more of this. 
Format and grammar-wise, though, excellent work. This fic is certainly a big-step for storytelling on FF, no matter how mind-blowingly STUPID it's contents might be. 
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I finish the story...
The guy is still an Imbecile!
Where did you get that Mr. Cake emoticon?
Fine then. Keep your emoticon secrets! See if I care!
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PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEE TELL ME!!! 
Jk. I've lost interest honestly.
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>>510968 [img] code. The emoticons are stored on my dropbox. See also this:
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Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Trixie_lolface_2.png>>511035 Yes, there is a picture... reload and try again
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>>511052 Ever heard of Greasemonkey?
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I always enjoyed reading these kind of stories as a kid (my favorite being the one where there was no page that actually led you to the final page, you had to just turn to page 101 and the story would end) It warms my heart to see that someone has created a pony version. I will read soon.
And now I know why Rainbow Dash wasn't in the story, and why I hadn't found chapter 62 from selecting every option I could find (unless I forgot it, like I did for pressing buttons in the Tardis and going with Honey Trap :\).
This was a brilliant idea, and I hope you have more brilliant ideas.
Sorry, I don't know why this has so many likes. It sucks!
Main character is so stupid and creepy, that it's impossible to identify with him in any aspect. C'mon I can deal with redemption of any villain, I can read Sweet Apple Massacre while I'm eating, but this abomination discourages me to read any further. I was praying that I would find Rainbow Dash and she will kill him with sonic rainboom. Unfortunately it didn't happen. 
Story is so bad, that most trollfics has better storyline. Maybe it's because tag "Human" means "It sucks" I dunno, normally I don't read stories with human.
And maybe some would say, that they likes that for idea, but even the idea is dumb. You can't make a decent interactive story in this format. It has no memory. Twilight Sparkle doesn't remember that she already kicked your ass out of library, and you can just go back and she acts like nothing have happened. It should be written as text game with variables.
Seriously I don't know why would anyone like that.
Anyways, I was wondering where you were, Rainbow, why did you hide from me!?
>>512191 Ever heard of Google?
Image: http://e.deviantart.net/emoticons/t/trollface.pngOkay, here's for an actual review...
First of all, this is really silly. And stupid. And silly. And brilliantly funny. And silly.
I have gone though this a gajillion times and clicked EVERY. SINGLE. OPTION. For example, every time you try to seduce a pony it ends badly, except with Trixie. The author obviously must be a Trixie fan. Also, there are only three decent endings, one sorta creepy ending, one kinda-decent ending, one best ending, one secret ending and one that isn't an ending at all. The rest are all horribly awful endings. I felt cheated that every time I did the sensible, logical thing I died bloodily.
That aside, it's plain to see that a lot of work went into setting this up. The only real criticism I can offer is that the "Brony Hero" was silly as all Hell and always behaved like a grade-A douschebag no matter which option you took. I suppose that was intended to be humorous, but it got annoying sometimes.
SPOILER ALERT: Chapter 33 and chapter 62 are impossible to reach by playing the game. But they're still fun. Check 'em out.
Interactive story... FUCK. YES.
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