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I was introduced to MLP by a friend in S3. At the time I teased him about it a little, but I guess the joke is on me as here I am now, writing Trixie shipfics. Feedback is always welcome.

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After the Battle of the Bands concludes in victory for the Rainbooms, all is well again in Canterlot High. The villains have been vanquished, trust in Sunset Shimmer has slowly been restored, and Trixie Lulamoon has yet another thing to add to her long list of 'totally legit' grievances against the world.

Fortunately, she knows just where to go.

To Trixie, the cafeteria is not only an excellent place to fill up her stomach, but it is also a great place to spill her guts after getting robbed in the Battle of the Bands.

Time to vent to her best friend.

Edited by:Phaoray

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Comments ( 92 )

Awww. Trixie needs more love. I actually was super stoked with the whole vinyl friendship! Then bam! Heartstab. Have a like

Okay......so Vinyl wasn't nodding to Trixie and she was only nodding to her music? I think I get it :rainbowlaugh: Good job bro.

Hahhahahah! XD This was perfect, nice job.

Haha, knowing you, I'm sure Trixie will find a way to bluster her way into someone's heart while somehow remaining insufferable to the untrained eye.

It's almost sweet (and pretty sad and defiantly self-centered) that all it takes to befriend Trixie is to smile and nod along. Haha

I hope she makes some friends soon!

I love it! Can't wait for more!

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Yipe, I didn't think this would be as well received. I honestly expected a lot more blowback for that little twist. Awesome. :yay:
I guess I better get on writing the rest of it then. :pinkiegasp:

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Haha, knowing you, Trixie will find a way to bluster her way into someone's heart while somehow remaining insufferable to the untrained eye.

That has to be the most glorious summation I've ever heard. :rainbowlaugh:
You know me too well. :trollestia:

Yeah, the implications about Trixie as a person are adorably melancholy. :pinkiesad2:

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

That was riotous:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

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Heck yeah bro, nicely written and I do hope to see more soon~
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Poor Trixie! Not only did her band mates abandon her but the person who she thinks is her best friend has no idea who she is. Also her wins were almost totally legit as she had a really great song.

OMG I was waiting for one story but you gave me two!! And this is looking to be something great!

Heh, I didn't even realize you were this story's author until I saw you replying in the comments.

Of course that meant I knew the ending before I even started reading, but damn if it wasn't hilarious. :rainbowlaugh:

You write a perfectly obnoxious Trixie too. :rainbowlaugh:

I love the cover picture, it fits so well. :rainbowwild:

I didn't find any mistake.

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Even when there weren’t any spontaneous musical numbers going on, the place still managed to be obnoxiously loud and annoying.

Almost as loud and annoying as Octavia’s table guest.

Geez, I wonder who that could be. :trollestia:

Vinyl herself was agreeably quiet; either because she was mute or because she refused to speak until she figured out how to turn her own voice into dubstep.

Oh god that's best reason for her not being mute ever. :rainbowlaugh:

Octavia noticed she only had a knife on her own tray! She was sure she had not made a mistake in selecting cutlery. She shot a glare at Trixie, but said nothing.

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Trixie let go of the fork, leaving it discarded on the table besides what was now clearly a carving Trixie's own name in cursive.

And I bet she didn't even do it consciously. :rainbowlaugh:

She can’t be expected to sit through math class on an empty stomach! Trixie would die!

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How she was allowed to wear them at school was anyone’s guess.

Bribery. Celestia and Luna's booze doesn't pay for itself, you know. :trollestia:

Forget the Sunglasses; standards in this school were way too loose!

I dread seeing what Celestia's School for Gifter Unicorns looks like. :rainbowlaugh:

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Don't worry. Trixie's a big girl. She not even sad.
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Trixie certainly hasn't been crying, and definitely doesn't need a hug right now.

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Always glad to see you excited. :yay:

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Considering it featured no romance tag, I also wouldn't assume it was mine. :trollestia:
I follow the spiderman approach to commenting.
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The real question is, what were you doing spoilering yourself in the comments like that? :raritywink:

A thousand hours in photoshop had to pay off at some point. :yay:
(Fun fact, I actually made this cover image months ago. Before ever writing a word till earlier this week.)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love writing obnoxious Trixie; what a shock, right? :rainbowlaugh:
It's so much easier too when you don't have to do when you don't write from her point of view too. :trixieshiftleft:

Trixie definitely didn't do it conciously. :rainbowlaugh:

Gosh, I was feeling so good about there being no errors, but I noticed that there was one the quotes you used at the end. Darnit. :facehoof:
I stealth fixed it though. :twilightblush:

That ending, Way to go Vinyl!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

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A vinyl so nice, we lost it twice?:rainbowlaugh:

7731039 actually so many more times, but at least twice. Can we have more of Vinyl? :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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I follow the spiderman approach to commenting.

And I thank you for that. :twilightsmile:

The real question is, what were you doing spoilering yourself in the comments like that? :raritywink:

I always read the comments before reading the story itself, so that I know if it's something I'll like. Saved me from reading poorly-written stories too.

A thousand hours in photoshop had to pay off at some point. :yay:

(Fun fact, I actually made this cover image months ago. Before ever writing a word till earlier this week.)

That's not an official picture? Impressive.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I love writing obnoxious Trixie; what a shock, right? :rainbowlaugh:

It's so much easier too when you don't have to do when you don't write from her point of view too. :trixieshiftleft:

I wouldn't know about it being easier, I've not written enough Trixie to know if I can even write her at all, let alone actually in character.

This better lead to the Friendship Games status quo where Trixie and Octavia seem to be talking all the time. :trixieshiftright:

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Thanks for prompting me to look up images of that. Daww, cute together. :yay:

7736223 Sure are. Trixie in general seems very amicable in the third and fourth movies. Talking to Octy all the freaking time in FG, and in the fourth one she went fishing with the nerd glasses guy, which I wouldn't have imagined her doing. :rainbowderp: I feel like the EqG Trixie is actually much nicer than the pony one and in RR she was actually under "heavy influence". But as with many EqG characters, there's enough room for interpretation so don't take it as me saying how it SHOULD be or anything :twilightsheepish:

I really love the interactions between the characters, specifically Trixie and Octavia the way that they are fighting over Vinyl is extremely amusing. I can't wait to see where things go from here.

Also, in LoE, you don't hear Vinyl's voice (because another conversation is in focus), but you can see her having a conversation with Fluttershy. :yay:

...Trixie's making me want to facepalm so hard right now.

Oooh Trixie... I feel so bad for her but holy balls :rainbowlaugh:

Nicely done.

This is one of those stories that makes me grin but nonetheless still makes me feel very bad for some of the protagonists. Particularly Trixie, who desperately needs a hug from someone. However, Octy also gets my sympathies for having to deal with Vinyl's habit of constantly being in a groovy universe all of her own.

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We'll see a some more, but the next chapter will probably be the last. :trixieshiftleft:
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It's true! :pinkiegasp:

Not only that, but she's been spotted talking to Lemon Zest as well! :rainbowhuh:
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I... I don't know what's real anymore. :pinkiecrazy:

I mean, uhm, I didn't make a mistake, it was the characters! Yes, yes, that's it, the characters are the ones who think Vinyl is mute. :trollestia:

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Thank you. :rainbowlaugh:

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Clearly, Trixie still needs a hug, but it has to be a hug of a quality suited to her great and powerful self. :trixieshiftleft:
After all, It's been tried once, Trixie was less than enthused about the subpar attempt.
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Well that could have gone better......:rainbowlaugh:

It was lunchtime at Canterlot High.

is it just me or has most things recently happened at lunch time in your stories? Whatever happened to dinner or brunch? Super or second supper? Tea time and coffee time? Doughnut time?:rainbowlaugh:

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It's not my fault schools don't have Brunchbreaks! :rainbowlaugh:

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No good deed goes unpunished. :trollestia:

Good lord Trixie.... Octy, can you both get your heads out of your butts? Vinyl is secretly plotting something I know it....

Haha, this chapter was pretty spot on in the humor of the situation. Trixie refusing to stop eating the cracker and her confident assertion at the end really made me chuckle.

There are a couple of things you've kinda been hinting at here that I'm wondering if I'm reading too much in to. As usual, you don't have to address any answers back except through the story but I feel like voicing them regardless. I would hate to be spoiled!

Firstly, Trixie is giving me the impression that she is pretty shy. She has trouble looking people in the eye while talking and doesn't have many friends. Now, this could shallowly be chalked up to just her arrogance and self-centered personality (of which she certainly has) but even so it surprises me that she has NO friends. She boasts a lot, but people do that plenty in highschool and still make friends. Trixie isn't lacking in some kind of strange charisma but she's still so lonely? My guess is that she either runs people off with her overbearing personality or she's too shy to approach or be approached by other people (of course the second would beg the question of why she is approaching Vinyl). I guess the other option is that she was publicly ostracized for some big and public incident but if that were the case then Octavia would probably know about it. How odd. Of course I'm trying to extrapolate based on only two chapters so...I'm probably completely wrong! Still, Trixie is frustratingly adorable and her social sense is so violently blind that I can't help but root for her and Octavia for trying to put up with her. Trixie will not make it easy.

Secondly you've established a weirdly specific relationship between Trixie and food. I could be overthinking this one too if only because so far the entire story has centered around lunch time but you've had Octavia address it multiple times. In the first chapter Trixie straight up forgets to get her lunch (which honestly could be attributed to her being upset enough to vent to Vinyl as she tends to do) but here in the second chapter she eats about half her lunch (the milkshake) and then leaves to go get some crackers instead. She could just be a picky eater, though.

Man, though, I'm just reeling from how badly Trixie seems to be setting herself up for disappointment. It's nothing unexpected, but it absolutely killed me when she was just so confident that it was OCTAVIA that was misunderstanding Vinyl's affliction. Just such a perfect Trixie misunderstanding. But I really feel for Octavia just gearing up to see a trainwreck. She's giving a good effort to avoid the worst of it which is very nice of her even though you're really stressing how much she just doesn't really LIKE Trixie.

Finally, I'm conflicted on Vinyl right now. I'm kinda interested in seeing how far we can go with Vinyl being such an influential character without actually having any dialog. On the other hand, I'd like to see how Vinyl feels when she realizes that she's had all this unintended influence. Depending on her character, she could feel bad about it or frustrated. Maybe she won't care? It's hard to tell and each flavor could be interesting! I'm looking forward to it.

Sorry if I rambled more than usual here. While I finally got a chance to type this out on a computer instead of a phone, I kept getting dragged away and distracted but I really wanted to comment to show that I'm enjoying this story and the direction. I have no idea where we're going so far and I'm looking forward to the trip.

Haha, thank you for the chapter! :twilightsmile:

7746666 Trixie does seem to suffer from some sort of anti-social anxiety, or something all together. It's to bad Octavia hates/despises her existence it seems.

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Haha, it can certainly look that way, huh? Still, I personally don't think Octavia HATES Trixie, she's just frustrated dealing with the insufferable egomaniac. In this last chapter we see that Octavia is under the impression that Trixie is willfully ignorant and deserves some form of comeuppance but realizes that Trixie MIGHT be innocently ignorant and feels bad for wishing embarrassment upon the annoying girl.

Ultimately Trixie is pretty annoying and off-putting to Octavia and has been for a while. Octavia obviously dislikes boasting. She is a little bit proud herself and feels slighted that she is beneath Trixie's notice when Trixie is not beyond her own. Octavia is also getting constantly embarrassed by Trixie intentionally or not. Trixie has overlooked and forgotten her, Trixie stole her cutlery from under her nose, and Trixie made her worry and then Octavia was made to feel as though Trixie was throwing that worry back in her face. It could all be a misunderstanding, but Trixie is prone to them and Octavia doesn't know her well enough to judge her as anything other than wilfully malicious. After all, Trixie goes out of her way to appear confident in everything that she does.

All this is to say that Octavia still went out of her way to try and prevent Trixie from embarrassing herself when she got the briefest impression that Trixie might not be malicious. I think that shows Octavia is pretty open to a non hostile relationship with the awkward girl. Maybe not friendly yet... And Trixie will be Trixie so non hostile might still be off the table for the time being but Trixie has a way of charming her way past her own bad impressions... Eventually. Maybe. Haha

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insufferable egomaniac

What? The Great and Loveable Trixie? Why no... Totally not... Okay you're right. I can't even type this down with a straight face.

Ultimately Trixie is pretty annoying and off-putting to Octavia and has been for a while. Octavia obviously dislikes boasting. She is a little bit proud herself and feels slighted that she is beneath Trixie's notice when Trixie is not beyond her own. Octavia is also getting constantly embarrassed by Trixie intentionally or not. Trixie has overlooked and forgotten her, Trixie stole her cutlery from under her nose, and Trixie made her worry and then Octavia was made to feel as though Trixie was throwing that worry back in her face. It could all be a misunderstanding, but Trixie is prone to them and Octavia doesn't know her well enough to judge her as anything other than wilfully malicious. After all, Trixie goes out of her way to appear confident in everything that she does

Uh, sorry but I'm not sure I get what you mean by this. So you think Octavia has an issue with Trixie because she simply forgot her, and that's why she gets annoyed with her? Plus....:trollestia:

As Octavia turned a corner, Trixie managed to compose herself just long enough to shout after her.
“She’s mute, not deaf!”

I'm not sure about you but I'm ABSOLUTELY sure Trixie has no idea what's going on because of this. She will be so sad when Vinyl doesn't show up, and I'm sure Octavia will try to reconcile with her, only to have Trixie blow up in her face. Probably thinking she tricked Vinyl into not showing up I'm sure, or something... maybe?:rainbowhuh: Then again it could all be A PLOY FROM CROW TO GET US TO THINK OF SOMETHING ONLY TO GO BACK AND MAKE SURE WE'RE COMPLETELY WRONG!! Then again it could just be us reading too much into it. :pinkiehappy:

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Welcome dude~ :D

7746391 Well, it's your fault for pulling a Trixie and forgetting to bring your own lunch. LOL. :rainbowlaugh:

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Sorry for the late reply. You mentioned you wanted to avoid any spoilers and I figured I'd let the next chapter speak for itself as you asked, but darnit I can't just not acknowledge the effort and thought you put into these things. :rainbowdetermined2:

I love seeing your thoughts on this. A lot of things in there that I would actually love to explore too, some of which I hadn't even thought to consider and would make for interesting scenes, but sadly there are only so many words I can cram into a short story. :rainbowlaugh:
We'll have to content ourselves just theorycrafting sometimes. :trixieshiftleft:
Which feels wierd to me, given the perhaps somewhat excessive counter example of my main story. :pinkiecrazy:

On the other hand, while this story may end with some open questions, that also means I don't have any reason to keep secrets anymore. You're welcome to just ask a question on anything you still wonder about by the end and I can actually give you a straight answer for once. :raritywink:

Great work once again, you got me to feel bad for Trixie, she seems to really want to be Vinyl's friend.

Dang it Trixie, just swallow that accursed pride of yours! Octavia, a genuine and decent human being, tried to help you in the past, even when you were being terrible, and is willing to help you now. Just talk to her!

*deep breathe*

Alright. I feel better.

In all seriousness, another good chapter. Keep up the good work.

Poor Trixie. Poor Octavia too.

And something makes me want to whack Vinyl in the backside of her head.

Awww... I'm so sad now :fluttercry: Poor Trixie.

Nicely done.

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If it makes you guys feel any better, Trixie has no idea who Vinyl actually is since she never once actually spoke to her. Trixie just thought she knew her. The real Vinyl is probably completely different from how Trixie images her, and Trixie knows that.
...Wait, that just makes it worse, sorry. :pinkiesad2:

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The Great and Powerful Trixie swallow her pride? Never! :trixieshiftright:

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Thank you! :yay:

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Ow... my feelings man.
*Hugs Trixie*
SHE NEEDS HUGS!

7767607 I see, can't wait to see what is next.

7767607 Eh. It ain't a Gibbs Slap, but it'll do.

Oh boy, you really worked to tug on the heartstrings in this chapter, huh?

First of all, I want to express that I really liked the idea of Octavia realizing how small Trixie looked. I just pictured that scene as a real moment when Octavia is, in a way, finally looking at Trixie in the same way she keeps telling Trixie to look at Vinyl. It could be argued that Octavia has been looking at Trixie pretty shallowly, seeing only what she wants or expects to see. She knows that Trixie is annoying and some kind of social pariah so she doesn't REALLY see what kind of person Trixie must be to keep coming back to someone like Vinyl for support. I mean, the signs that Trixie is almost TERMINALLY lonely aren't exactly subtle, but Octavia spent the previous chapters mostly chalking any reason Trixie might have had for pursuing such a one-sided friendship up to Trixie being such an egomaniac that all she wanted in a relationship was a yes man. In fact, thinking on it some more, Octavia has a very interesting mindset in these chapters that you're able to express because she is our narrator.

Octavia seems to take Trixie's annoying presence personally. Of course, Trixie is pretty frustrating in general, but whenever Octavia thinks about Trixie being around her thoughts tend to revolve around how much Trixie being around is frustrating to Octavia personally. She doesn't think very much (at least in the narrative) about how Trixie is annoying to others or how this might upset Vinyl or whatever. Of course, this may just be a narrative bias because of the nature of the story, but it led me to an interesting thought. And that thought is that Octavia thinks an awful lot about Trixie.

Of course, again, there is a lot of bias because of the windows of the story, but Octavia doesn't really think much about Vinyl or any of her other friends in much capacity in the story nor does she think much about anything else she might be doing at school. This leaves her as a bit of a blank slate character outside of the three things we know about her.

1. Octavia is annoyed by Trixie.
2. Octavia is a musician.
3. Octavia is possibly friends with but is at least comfortable with talking to Vinyl.

Man, I really feel like I'm going off the reservation here, but hear me out. We know that Trixie is socially inept, but what if Octavia isn't exactly as refined as she leads the reader to believe either. It doesn't escape me that as sad as it is that Trixie spends her time venting to a silent yes man, Octavia regularly spends her lunches with a friend that she doesn't communicate with either. She doesn't speak sign language (or so I assume, otherwise they might have communicated this way in the previous chapter where Vinyl acknowledged that she didn't know Trixie), Vinyl is always listening to her music during lunch which renders her mute AND deaf, and Vinyl is so absorbed in her music that she doesn't notice Trixie's admittedly bombastic behavior right next to her much less the friend she has sitting right in front of her.

Of course, this might just be the relationship the two of them have. There's nothing wrong with that but it allows for the possibility that, given Octavia's own touchiness about being forgotten or boring, Octavia might not be that popular either. In fact, it is possible that Octavia might only be higher on the social scale than Trixie because Trixie has committed some social sin that we (and probably Trixie admittedly) is unaware of. At least Trixie is memorable, Octavia doesn't seem to have that (or not, admittedly I'm stretching here). It just struck me as funny that Octavia was so certain that in offering a hand to Trixie that Trixie would immediately become best friends with her and follow her to all her concerts and embarrass her. Trixie might certainly do this, but doesn't it strike you as kind of a immature thought? Like someone who isn't really comfortable with the many permutations and boundaries of friendship that exist might have? I could picture a little kid thinking "And I'll just say hi, and we'll become friends and she'll come to all of my concerts and I'll go to all of her magic shows and we'll be best friends!". It makes me think that Octavia might be lonely as well. Which would make an interesting foil against Trixie if the story were to go that way.

It might allow Octavia a chance to see HERSELF in a different light when she confronts the reality of Trixie's situation. Personally, I've experienced something like this. It's sad to say that some of the people that have annoyed me most in life are people that remind me of my own personal flaws. It isn't fair to them, but I can't help the almost visceral reaction to being confronted with a part of myself that I feel so uncomfortable with.

But enough about that wild speculation. Let's move onto some other stuff.

I had a question while reading this and I didn't think it was very clear or I missed it. Is Trixie just physically smaller than most girls? I know that Octavia observed that Trixie SEEMED smaller because she was being less grandiose with her gestures and body language, but when you described this scene I got the impression that it was more than that but I wasn't sure. It feels interesting to me to think of Trixie with one more complex on her mind related to her height and size. Trixie is physically small so she acts out a grander personality to make up for it in any way she can. Maybe she's younger than the other girls in her grade? Not like prodigy younger but maybe just like barely made the cut to join Kindergarten younger? It doesn't really matter but a small, vulnerable Trixie really tugged at my Lyras (my Heartstrings).

Obviously this chapter we reached a climax regarding Trixie's relationship with Vinyl. Honestly, as usual, Trixie reacts much more maturely that people give her credit for. She must have been VERY hurt and even after she realizes that it is in no way Vinyl's fault she can't bring herself to actually be ANGRY at the girl that admittedly helped her through what sounds to be a trying year. I've personally been through something of a betrayal like this before and I'm not proud to say that I did a lot of yelling and it was a long time before I really got over it. I worry that without a friend base, this could really, REALLY hurt Trixie. In a way that is really tough to come back from. It sounds like she doesn't get much support. I'm very interested in seeing where she goes from here. Does she go back to her usual self? Does she TRY to go back to her usual self but finds it tough? Does she just give up here and wither away in the background for the rest of highschool? I've always found your Trixie to be pretty tough, so I kinda doubt it would be the third option, but I could certainly see her withering for a while and never quite making it back to the bombastic Trixie she was. Alternatively, I could see her just getting crazier and possibly nastier as she cries out harder for attention. Neither is particularly palatable. Hang in there Trixie!

I'll stop here before I end up just writing a chapter of baseless speculation, and wrap it up with the observation that you mentioned this story won't be much longer. I'm looking forward to see how you wrap it up! I kinda just assumed that this was going to go the way of Forest Retreat, so some of my speculation might have reflected that more long term storytelling, but I've enjoyed the story as is. I'm also dying to see if Vinyl ever learns about her best-friendship with Trixie. The way this story is going, I really doubt she will and if she does it probably won't make it into the story but still. It's pretty funny to me. And even if this is just a short story, that doesn't preclude a second short story some time in the future if the fancy really strikes.

I'm very flattered that you think so highly of theorycrafting. It is honestly the only way I can really think to express to authors how much I appreciate their work. I know it is often baseless and rambling, but I'm glad you like it. I look forward to your next chapter.

Thank you very much! :twilightsmile:

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Oh boy, you really worked to tug on the heartstrings in this chapter, huh?

I am such a drama queen that Rarity has asked for her crown back. :raritydespair:

In fact, thinking on it some more, Octavia has a very interesting mindset in these chapters that you're able to express because she is our narrator.

You know what's funny? In the early drafts, Octavia wasn't even there.
The story was just from Trixie's perspective, talking to a wall (Vinyl). As I was writing it, I was having trouble finding a voice for the narration and then Octavia just kind of showed up and the story became her perspective as an experiment. It very quickly became apparent that made it so much better and more interesting to write. :pinkiegasp:
I can't imagine the story without her now, it's as much (or more) Octavia's story as it is Trixie's. Which is a little weird, considering I have never read a single story that was about Octavia so the only snippets of personality I had to base her on was basically whatever I could remember of seeing this last year:

And this

I'm genuinely scared to look at any Octavia stories now for fear of seeing how wrong I portrayed her. Especially given you already made me realize I gave her nearly no personality beyond:

1. Octavia is annoyed by Trixie.
2. Octavia is a musician.
3. Octavia is possibly friends with but is at least comfortable with talking to Vinyl.

Which is kind of confronting. :rainbowderp:

Man, I really feel like I'm going off the reservation here, but hear me out. We know that Trixie is socially inept, but what if Octavia isn't exactly as refined as she leads the reader to believe either. It doesn't escape me that as sad as it is that Trixie spends her time venting to a silent yes man, Octavia regularly spends her lunches with a friend that she doesn't communicate with either.

I like where your head is at. :rainbowlaugh:

Though I will take a moment to point out that Octavia hanging out with a silent friend may also be related to her desire for peaceful lunches and Vinyl respecting that desire.

Of course, that may be just what she's 'leading the reader to believe.' :raritywink:

Meanwhile, on the reservation:
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I had a question while reading this and I didn't think it was very clear or I missed it. Is Trixie just physically smaller than most girls? I know that Octavia observed that Trixie SEEMED smaller because she was being less grandiose with her gestures and body language, but when you described this scene I got the impression that it was more than that but I wasn't sure. It feels interesting to me to think of Trixie with one more complex on her mind related to her height and size. Trixie is physically small so she acts out a grander personality to make up for it in any way she can. Maybe she's younger than the other girls in her grade? Not like prodigy younger but maybe just like barely made the cut to join Kindergarten younger? It doesn't really matter but a small, vulnerable Trixie really tugged at my Lyras (my Heartstrings).

Trixie is physically smaller than most girls.
Well, both actually. As you noted, in the current chapter Octavia's observation of the seemingly smaller Trixie is due to her being less grandiose, but in the previous chapter Octavia made note of Trixie being physically smaller when they stood face to face in the hallway.

I absolutely love the idea of Trixie being physically lesser than her peers. It does so many things for her. It makes her being loud and boisterous akin to a cute little yipping puppy. It makes it so that when she's down she's that much more vulnerable and vanishing. It gives her additional motivation to appear larger than life. It gives her natural underdog status. It makes her twice as cute and huggable. Etc etc etc. :yay: derpicdn.net/img/view/2014/8/25/707659__safe_shipping_humanized_blushing_lesbian_trixie_open+mouth_maud+pie_fangs_tsundere.png
As soon as I saw this image centuries ago, it became my permanent headcanon that Trixie is small in comparison to other girls. It is not only absolutely adorable, but it also serves as excellent fuel for some measure of her inferiority complex.:trixieshiftleft:
As for why... maybe she is younger as you suggested. Or perhaps she never hit her growth spurt. Maybe she was sickly as a kid. Any number of options really. I'll admit I haven't decided on one.

I'll stop here before I end up just writing a chapter of baseless speculation, and wrap it up with the observation that you mentioned this story won't be much longer. I'm looking forward to see how you wrap it up! I kinda just assumed that this was going to go the way of Forest Retreat, so some of my speculation might have reflected that more long term storytelling, but I've enjoyed the story as is.

My editor occasionally recommends that I write something short for a change and this was the result. I would figuratively die if I had to maintain two stories of Trixie's Forest Retreat length. :rainbowlaugh:

I am sorely tempted to continue writing in this universe, but I have to recognize that part of what made it so enjoyable to write this is the fact that I don't have to think as much about ensuring the implications of every detail or action I write line up with what I have planned, since I won't be stuck with it forever. :twilightsheepish:

If, after I'm done with this, I write another EQG Trixie story, it probably won't be an official sequel to this one, though mostly just so I can claim "Alternate Universe" if something in that hypothetical story doesn't line up with something that happened in this one. :trollestia:

I'm very flattered that you think so highly of theorycrafting. It is honestly the only way I can really think to express to authors how much I appreciate their work. I know it is often baseless and rambling, but I'm glad you like it.

I'll let you in on a trade secret, theoycracfting is fantastic because it allows an insight into the implications of a lot of the things the author wrote that they maybe didn't even think about previously, and sometimes some of that stuff is way better than what the author had planned originally and actually makes the future chapters more interesting than they would have been. :raritywink:

I look forward to your next chapter.
Thank you very much! :twilightsmile:

Thank you. :yay:

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