Inspired by the songs Daughter of Evil by Kagamine Rin, Servent of Evil by Kagamine Len, and Daughter of White by Yowane Haku.
This story is about Pride, one of the seven deadly sins. Princess Sunset Shimmer is known as the daughter of evil in her Yellow Kingdom but her servant Sunburn (Who is also her twin brother) doesnt think so. I would explain more, but then I would ruin everything.
Daughter of Evil:
http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=lYJATjB88lI
Servant of evil:
http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=RQeMU8oa55U
Daughter of White:
http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=WOa7O0GUzsY
Chapters (5)
For a first chapter, I'm pretty DISAPPOINTED.
Rin would spit in your face for this. The grammar makes me wish to cry.
Otherwise, good job so far!
You'll have to excuse me. I may have overdosed on "writer's helper".
*polka face*
This is pretty much awful. I'm sorry, but it is! Rin KNEW Len was her brother! You hardly explain anything!
What the what the what. You need an apostrophe for I'm, the correct word is "to" not "too", why Ebola, and what the what.
That's just one measly sentence!
THOU HAST BROUGHT SHAME UPON PONALOIDS!
Aw, this was so sad :(
5255038 well, you're being kind of rude.
Poor rainbow dash
5255038 Look Im trying ok, Im really trying. And I love vocaloids more than you. And if all your gonna do is complain, then stop reading and SHUT UP
5255038 And actually, if you do farther research you'll find that after being seperated Rin had her memories altered
5257159 Really? I suppose I should try watching Daughter of White sometime, but I distinctly remember Rin asking to be reborn as his twin again in Regret Message. Am I not reading between the lines on something? And how do you know you love Vocaloids more than I do? Just because you know Daughter of Evil is part of the Seven Deadly Sins series, does that really mean you know more than me? I mean, do you know every single song in the Evillous Chronicles Vocaloid series thingamabobitz? Can you name more than fifteen Vocaloids, UTAUs not included(Which means NO TETO.)? And to be frank, I'm curious as to what the story will turn out to be. Even if the grammar is abominable and the dialogue a little cheesy, I wanna see your interpretation. I'm always curious about how others think of the videos.
Speaking of interpretation, have you seen all four of the Night series with the Vocaloid Eight? If so, PLEASE TELL ME WHAT THE BUCK HAPPENED. I'll delete all my mean comments and replace them with praise. I'll share this all over the Internet. JUST PLEASE TELL ME WHAT THE HAY HAPPENED. IT'S CONFUSING AND NO ONE IN THE COMMENTS AGREES WITH WHAT I THINK.
5258107 I don't care what you think, I loooooove vocaloid. And I have seen the Night Series, my favorites were Bad End Night and Crazy Night. Have you ever seen the Dark Woods series? No? OF COURSE YOU HAVEN'T
5258128 STOPP ASSUMING. IT MAKES A DONKEY OUT OF YOU AND ME.
I have seen Steel Cage Princess; Wide Knowledge of the Late, Madness; Dark Woods Circus; Blue Ice Castle; Red Swamp Bottom; and Guard and Scythe.
Have YOU watched the Synchronicity series? If you haven't, you will. You must! YOU HAVE TO! IT'S THE MOST FANTABULOUS SERIES IN ALL THE UNIVERSE! IT'S FARTING EPIC!
5258198 Oh yeah? Seven sin series is better. And if I have to choose best song in general, I say Alice Human Sacrifice
5258239
Honestly? that WAS constructive criticism. It was not that all the way through but truly she was pointing out the flaws of grammar. I'd hate to see what your stories look like if thats better then yours.
5258243
You are acting like a child. Both of you.
5524931 This arguement was from months ago let it go
Oh my Celestia! This chapter is AWESOME!