Why not? (Revised)
Every Tuesday afternoon, Twilight Sparkle ate her lunch at the Hayburger, an appointment that stuck after the Crusaders invited her there once before. She'd always loved burgers and fries, and she loved, perhaps even more, the looks on the nobles’ and other high society types’ faces when they found out that a Princess - heaven forbid! - loved the food of the "lowly peasants".
Of course, the novelty was wearing off quickly, especially as the upper crust of Canterlot began copying her eating habits. Needless to say, The Hayburger was now doing very well across the nation.
But trends and silly celebrities aside, Twilight was enjoying her hayburger in peace.
Until he showed up, that is.
"Ah, Twilight Sparkle! What a surprise to see you here," exclaimed a certain draconequus. Said draconequus appeared out of thin air in the seat across from Twilight, drawing the attention of all eyes in the room.
"Actually, it shouldn't be. Everypony, whether I like it or not, knows that I eat here every Tuesday." With a sigh, she glanced over at a nearby trashcan. "Hello, Quick Snap."
A stallion wearing a fedora and a camera peeked out from behind the trashcan, and smiled bashfully. "H-hey there, Princess ma'am."
"See?" She asked, turning her attention back to him.
"Well, forgive me if I run out of original things to say from time to time," he snorted as he rolled his eyes. Suddenly his talons became remarkably interesting.
"Why are you here, Discord?" She popped a hayfry in her mouth and chewed, not making any effort to pay him much attention.
He put his talons down and looked her in the eyes. "Well, why not?" he asked with a shrug. A smile tugged at the corners of his mouth. "It's a free country, isn't it?"
"Yes, but you're obviously here for a reason." She rolled her eyes—another hayfry, more chewing.
"Maybe I just wanted to see you."
Twilight started hacking wildly, as if his words had jammed themselves in her throat, hindering her breathing.
"Excuse me?" She asked once she could breathe again.
"What? Is it really so surprising? What’s a draconequus to do being in the presence of a creature so strikingly beautiful? Hardly a minute passes when I'm not thinking of you," he said with a smirk on his face.
A few ponies snickered in the back of the restaurant. The attendees of the restaurant could hear the furious clicking of Quick Snap's camera taking pictures at 2,000 miles an hour. They could already see tomorrow's big headline...
DISCORD BRUTALLY REJECTED BY PRINCESS TWILIGHT SPARKLE.
KING OF CHAOS? HOW ABOUT KING OF THE FRIENDZONE?
The occupants of the fast food restaurant waited for Twilight to say something, to turn him down.
But it never came.
"R-really..?" She blushed, using a fetlock to partially cover her bashful smile.
"How could I not?" he said, head resting in his palms, elbows on the table. "You're simply divine, Princess. Your eyes are sparkling amethysts, and your smile shines brighter than Celestia's Sun. Your beauty is greater than Luna's night sky, and your heart is kinder than even the Princess of Love. You're the most dazzling creature I've ever met."
"What have you done this time?" Her wings fidgeted a little, and she looked everywhere but at him. "You're obviously buttering me up for something."
"Am I? I'm pretty sure I haven't caused any major disturbances lately. I'm here for one thing, and one thing only—a chance to take you to dinner tonight, Princess Twilight Sparkle." He took her hoof in his paw, his talons resting on top. He looked into her eyes, his own more serious than she’d ever seen before. "Will you do me the honor?"
Everypony was hanging on to the edge of their seats. There was still a chance for rejection here, surely she wouldn't—
"I'd love to," she said with a smile. Her eyes danced with glee.
"I'll pick you up at the castle at seven then?" he asked, letting go of her hoof and leaning back.
"Okay," she squeaked. Discord then vanished with a grin, leaving a very happy Twilight. "Yes! Yes! Yes! Yes! Ye-" her joyful shouts were cut off as she teleported away to get ready for the date she now had.
The ponies inside The Hayburger were silent.
A grey pegasus fell out of his chair and began to wail. "But I wanted to ask her out!"
Rarity's Boutique.
Now that was a place that high society could tolerate a princess visiting, even if it was in an odd place like Ponyville. In the conversations of those who knew of her, there were almost always a few comments about how the charming fashionista would do better in a place like Canterlot. She'd definitely do better in a bigger city, preferably somewhere comfortably close to the nobility.
But alas, she wasn't in any other city, and Twilight Sparkle was glad. Teleporting such a distance, which she could easily do as an alicorn, when she needed to see her with such high emotions was risky. And she needed to talk to her now.
"Ijustgotaskedonadateadaterarityineedadressdon'tyouthinkcanyougetmeadress?"
"...Can you please repeat that, darling?" Rarity said, startled as anypony could be when a best friend of theirs pops in quite literally in front of them, even if there was a certain length of frequency to it, with a various number of her friends. Meanwhile, Twilight glanced around erratically, and tried to catch her breath. "Breathe, Twilight, breathe. What is it?"
"I need to buy a somewhat casual, somewhat semi-formal dress for a date I have tonight!" Twilight exclaimed.
"Something for a night out on the town, you say?" Rarity asked with a warm smile. It wasn't every day her friend had a date. In fact, she didn't think she'd been on one since moving to Ponyville, and that’s considering if she'd ever been on one at all. She was excited, to say the least. "I think I have something you'll look simply marvelous in. May I ask who the lucky stallion is?" she added with a teasing smile.
"Oh, well umm..." she trailed off, blushing. "Actually, he isn't a stallion, per say..."
"Oh, who is she then?" she amended, somewhat surprised. She hadn't expected that.
"Nonononono!" Twilight yelped. "It's a he!"
"Oh." Rarity arched an eyebrow. "Ohhh, is it a dashing griffon from across the sea?"
"Um, no.."
"A muscly, adventure seeking minotaur?"
"No."
"A handsome, charming dragon you met by chance while exploring the caves for jewels?"
"...No?"
"...A diamond dog?"
"NO!" Twilight shouted. "Ew, Rarity! No way would I ever go out with a diamond dog!"
"Then who, Twilight? I'm running out of guesses here."
"....Discord...."
"...What, darling? I didn't quite catch that."
"Discord! Discord asked me to dinner tonight and I said yes!"
"Wh—" she began, but she was stopped by a hoof to the muzzle.
"And you can't stop me!"
Silence reigned for a few moments before Rarity cleared her throat. "And why would I do that, Twilight?"
"Why wouldn’t you?" she said, exasperated. "It's Discord! You know, King of Chaos, Master of Entropy, the last of the draconeqi!"
"Yes?"
Twilight thought for a moment.
"Well, I just thought—"
CRASH
Rainbow Dash smashed through the large window of the boutique, an angry look on her face. In mere seconds she was a feather's length from Twilight's startled face.
"Twilight! You aren't seriously going out with Discord, are you?"
"—that you'd be more like that."
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You should put that A/N at the top.
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Oh, whoops, I actually meant to do that.
Thanks for pointing that out!
You accidently centered the story from the second half onward.
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Error with Google Docs import, and it's fixed now.
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"but you can't be interested in HIM"
... (Revised)
*Reads*
What's different and why couldn't this be chapter two? I'm excited for chapter two!
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Should be coming soon, I'm sorry! I'm nearly done with it, so maybe later tonight or some time tomorrow.
I'm a busy little pony!
5229691 I had that exact same reaction
I cant find anything changed... maybe a spelling error fixed but nothing i could find...
What's the eta on chapter 2?
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Minor things were changed, but like I said, the story is exactly the same. Just some re-wording and the like.
I may release an un-edited chapter tonight.
if the story is the same and no major plot points are changed why the hell did you bump me with a "unread" chapter. I have a large list of added stories I have to go through(been away for a while with 170+ adds) and I get a basically same chapter? next time just edit your chapter invisibly
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Because I did.
5229835 well that's fine then. I just had over "33" unread chapters over all my libraries. Having to read a remarkably similar chapter is a delay from new ponywords
she better pay for that window with that little stunt she pulled.
Awww man, And there I was thinking I was gonna get an update...
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Is an early release chapter still a possibility?
I believe a song is in order. Is she really going out with him?
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Honestly, re-uploading a chapter when all you did was minor edits is a fairly obvious play for views. Some respect was lost, here.
5229927 33 unread chapters, I can't remember the last time I was that low on chapters to catch up on. I can't remember the last time I had less than 90 chapters to read. Currently I have 103.
However I like have many different options. I don't always feel like reading certain things. Or I want to read something specific, and I quite often have some chapters of it to read.
NEW CHAPTER PLEASE
WHAT? How can you have 877 likes with only 50 followers and no previous stories AND only with ONE chapter!??
Are you the new god of FimFiction? Or i dont understand something?
5230813 I have a ton of followed stories, but they are all in multiple libraries, inflating that number. What kept that number at zero everytime I went to sleep was that I would always keep up to date those stories. My internet was terrible this past week, so I couldn't access this site. I probably only had 20-26 favs to read, the most I have ever had, even at my peak when I had over 250+ stories followed back in 2012
5230915 It is a big hit concept, stories come along like this occasionally. The last one I can remember was Cultural Artifacts, back when it was amazing and not a crack wreck(a train wreck on crack)
EDIT: a couple probably passed me by though
I now wait with bated breath...
I love this line, don't know why
can you please just get the content out and then revise all of it? I barely noticed any difference and I'm sure you could have put out the newest chapter by now
EDIT: also let it be known that I have been on this site for more than 2 years and I still don't know what that emote means but it felt appropriate
OHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOSH
Cliffhanger cliffhanger cliffhanger...! I simply MUST get back to this story. This is juicier than... well juice. IT'S JUICY!
This could be interesting...
I think you mean 'per se'
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Or maybe just unfamiliarity with chapter editing, there are easier way to get pageviews if you really value such a thing...
When I saw this was updated I was excited then came disappointment when it was the same chapter "revised"
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But there were already DiscoLight fanfics earlier. Why is this so popular? Is it ship itself or the fact that Applejack is against it?
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FAVES, FOR THE FAVE GOD! VIEWS, FOR THE VIEW THRONE! LET, THE GALAXY, REEEAAAAAADDD!!!
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Not a play for views, I thought that it was a better quality chapter and there were actually a lot of revisions. I still have the old copy. It's just that the story itself wasn't changed, so it's hard to notice.
Also:
I STATED IT WAS REVISED ANYONE WHO'D READ IT ALREADY DID NOT HAVE TO READ IT AGAIN.
Shouldn't I post what my editors worked hard on? No one would have noticed if I hadn't uploaded it as a new chapter! I don't care how many views I get, I just thought that it wouldn't be fair not to update this silly gosh darn chapter.
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THANK YOU
I didn't want my editor's work to go unnoticed, and I also thought it was the best idea at the time... I didn't even think of just pasting it over the old one, honestly.
The old one is just unpublished now...
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Except you don't need to re-upload a chapter to edit. And we aren't informed that it's a revision when the site tells us there's been an update.
If you truly want the chapter to be re-read, you should make a note in the next chapter informing readers that there have been updates, or make a blog post. That's just author etiquette.
If it truly wasn't a play for views (Even though immediately after you said it wasn't you argued that the editors' work should be shown), then I would apologize if I came off as confrontational. But regardless it was still unnecessary. Simply going into the old chapter and making edits as necessary is by far the better option.
5231511 It's likely because it's a romance, involving two fandom favorite characters. Not to detract from the story by saying that, though.
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It says "revised" in the title, and the author's note is at the top. You didn't have to read it, it was made clear that it was a revised chapter. I already said I didn't even think of pasting it over the old version, and I would never, ever be as shallow as to fish for views.
5231511 Like I said, it is one in a million. It was probably somewhere along the lines of initial views, combined with the fact that Twilight is working under the assumption that people would object(something that doesn't happen TOO often or heavily). the writing style is a decent one for this premise, and not too shabby either.
after this point I have re-written few times. Suffice to say, this story is both half-decent(which is all you need on this site) and lucky.
I am not going to give any examples for this site, because it will likely lead to needless drama from author fans or story fans. Instead, Etho(possibly BdoubleO100), a million+ let's player was once asked how to become a successful let's player. He said, be lucky and go back in time about three years. This mostly holds over on this site too.
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That's fine, like I said, not trying to be confrontational. I've just seen a lot of people do this for views, and I'd gotten tired of it.
Apologies if my comment upset you in any way.
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I'm also going to have to apologize; I've let outside conflict affect my response to your comment. I know that your suspicions are not unfounded, and I will certainly just update the chapters without creating a new one from now on.
I've never really published a fanfiction before, so you'll have to forgive me
6ix and Thornwing are helping a LOT
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New chapter should be up today! Just working a few kinks out, I promise
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Yep. Still racist.
THIS IS IN MY FAVORITES SHELF CAUSE I REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, REALLY LOVE THIS STORY! PLZ DO SOME MORE CHAPTERS!
Sounds like the villain for the season 5 opener is going to be really depressing.
5234434 well, it proves that they are still in character.
Everypony, whether I like it or not
"Excuse me?"
"And you can't stop me!"
Discord!
1. Forgot to italicize your E.
2. Best italicize your quotation marks as well, looks weird when they aren't.
3. Same as 2.
4. Same. I mean, to me it just looks weird with it being partial italicization...
I cracked up at this part. Too funy.
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