Persona22's Pony POV Friendship Games POV Adaption
After several attempts at research, I, Sunset Shimmer, wasn’t even close to understanding how magic worked in this world.
Being a former unicorn and an expert in magic in Equestria, I thought that it was going to be simpler, but it wasn't. After some observation and trial and error, I decided that the best way to do it would be to run tests on my friends while they were playing their instruments using different testing machines. It didn’t work.
After several tests I concluded something. Just like the weather here does not have pegasi to manage it, the plants have no Earth ponies to help them grow, and there is no Alicorn sisters that raise the sun and the moon, then magic too had no management. Magic in this world simply had a mind of its own, it did what it wanted to do, just like the sun and the moon moved by themselves. Meaning that everything I knew about magic before was of little use to me now and I would have to make a whole new study from the ground up, with absolutely no previous research to go with. I should have guessed, considering my entire plan hinged on the Element of Magic working differently here, but forgive me if I didn't realize right away my plan that went horribly right still had validity. Others would have just let it go there, but I had a personal reason to do so. Magic was introduced in this world by me, it was my responsibility. The only reason the Sirens had targeted Canterlot High before was because they felt magic coming from it.
Also, to be honest, I was having kind of an existential crisis. Up until now I had a clear view of what I wanted in my future. Before coming here, it was to become a Princess in Equestria. After I … abandoned Princess Celestia, that goal was to eventually return to Equestria and become a Princess by force. After I went insane it was to take over Equestria with an army of demons. After Twilight used the Elements of Harmony on me, and saved me from myself, it changed into a short term goal of understanding what it really meant to have friends, and making up from my last mistakes. It took effort, but now everyone at Canterlot High likes me and sees me as a friend, and it wasn’t because I blackmailed them or used some magic spell to control their minds. They trusted me, and I trusted them. Even Trixie was opening up to others, dropping down that facade she does all the time and trying to be the center of attention.
Twilight was right, Trixie was a middle child who just wanted wanted some attention. Her older siblings were graduated, her younger sister shared a class or two with the CMC. She just needed some help to open up.
But, now what? Being a human is completely different from being a pony, and it's not just about cultural differences. For starters, Humans have no cutie marks. I giggled a little, remembering when Twilight had to change into pajamas during the last time she visited and spent the night at Pinkie Pie’s. Sure, the other time she was here, she had changed for the dance of the Fall Formal, but then she had just changed her clothes, she hadn’t taken off her undergarments (and she had to be told humans wore those for a reason given ponies didn't even wear them when they wore clothes). When she saw herself in the nude for the first time and realizing that she didn’t have her cutie mark, it was funny how she freaked out. I just laughed, explained to her how humans had no cutie marks and how I had the same reaction when I found out.
It was odd, even if humans don't have Cutie Marks they somehow know what theirs should be and personalize their stuff with them. Maybe I should ask sometime how they realize it.
And no, none of us have checked if we get Cutie Marks when we 'pony up'. Even I'm not curious enough to ask one of my friends to play music naked.
Having no cutie marks meant that they didn’t have just one special talent, but it also meant that sometimes spent their whole lives trying to figure out what they wanted to do (and of course didn't have superpowers related to them, normally). That’s where I was now. For the first time in my life, I had to figure out what I wanted to do with it, I was free and it was kind of scary. I knew that there was more out there, waiting for me, and I would know what it was when I found it.
Why did I sign up for the Friendship Games? Well, for starters Rainbow Dash was very convincing. And also, I figured that it was a good way to get my mind off of all this “magic can’t be figured out” business. Boy was I wrong.
Principal Celestia called everyone at the gym for an announcement, the whole school knew what it was about. The Friendship Games. And very few were looking forward to it, the last games had taken place the year right before I went through the portal, so I just found out recently that Canterlot High always loses. To say that there was little enthusiasm was an understatement.
To set the record straight, contrary to the name, Canterlot High actually has grades below 9–12, so losing to Crystal Prep wasn't a single time affair for everyone.
Then Rainbow Dash gives the mother of all motivational speeches. I don’t know the pony Rainbow Dash as much as Twilight does, but this Rainbow Dash, the one that I know and I’m friends with, is a natural leader. The whole school was now in high spirits and couldn’t wait for the games to start to finally beat Crystal Prep.
And no, I didn't care the old me was on one of those posters she brought up. I'd conquered her by now as much as they had, just in a different way. My past does not define me, my past is not today.
And then, right at the end, Rainbow Dash ponied up without playing her guitar. And I had no idea why. Why didn't anyone care? The seven of us were like superheroes her now...scratch that, we kinda are superheroes here...And it feels good to say that.
Vice-Principal Luna meets with us backstage, she asks me to try and find out why Rainbow Dash transformed and to keep it from happening during the Friendship Games, so the school doesn’t get accused of cheating. So much for trying to forget about the whole magic business… But I promiseed I would do my best. Again, magic was brought here by me, it was my responsibility.
Of course I had no idea what to do. I tried reading some books about ancient human myths and legends regarding magic, but I wasn’t any closer to anything. Magic in human culture was by nature the 'unexplained.' It had rules, but normally it ultimately was a supernatural thing. The only common link was it was generally draw from a higher power of some sort, evil magic from the devil (which I was quite familiar with, given the 'Sunset Satan' nickname I had for awhile after becoming a shedemon), and a benevolent deity for light magic. And that's when magic wasn't declared an outright perversion of the natural world, with all magic being evil wearing different faces, to be destroyed on sight.
Finally I decided to write to Twilight for help, little did I know that she was having a problem of her own at the time and would not be able to answer until the Friendship Games were over.
Before the games started Rarity had a surprise for us. Knowing that the school budget was limited in some respects, she had made costumes for any scenario that we might encounter during the Friendship Games. And while she was giving us different uniforms to try on, and doing little last minute adjustments to ensure a perfect fit, she ponied up as well, without playing her Keytar! And I still didn’t have a clue why.
And all of a sudden, she looked drained and her transformation was gone. At the time, I only took it for simple exhaustion, she had been working on this costumes for many an hour without rest. Twilight said her Rarity had sometimes done the same thing.
And then I saw her, the Twilight of this world. At first I thought she was Pony Twilight, deciding to come here out of curiosity to see how magic works in this world, instead of writing me an answer from my last message. We were all surprised when we found out she wasn’t Princess Twilight, but the actual Twilight from this world! She was more surprised when everyone at the school, even Principal Celestia knew her name.
It came to a shock to everyone when we found out the truth, and that Twilight, human Twilight that is, went to Crystal Prep and that she would be competing against us. All my frustration on not knowing what was going on came back, as if seeing Twilight, even if she wasn’t the Twilight I knew, reminded me of my current failure on knowing what was going on with magic and why my friends kept transforming without playing music. Good thing I trusted them enough with my problems, they listened to me and I calm down again.
Oh, and yes, I may or may have had to finally explain to them they had pony counterparts that weren't them anymore than this Twilight was interchangeable with the one we knew.
The less creepy part in retrospect was her 'not-really-friends.'
It was like fate was trying to pair her up with five girls who matched up with the Elements of Harmony, but couldn't really zero in on Applejack and the others and so... made due. I don't think they're evil or anything, not even really bad girls when they weren't being Principle Cinch's hands for pressuring this world's Twilight, but, their traits were... kinda disturbing.
Lemon Zest was like Pinkie Pie, cheerful and optimistic. Except she seemed oblivious to the hardships of others, and only understood her own definition of how to have a good time... like others THOUGHT Pinkie Pie was like until they got to know her. She was just in her own little world.
Indigo Zap... I couldn't help but feel there was something just a little bit off about her. Rainbow Dash told me later she swore she felt familiar SOMEHOW but couldn't pin it down, and I don't mean in the 'like me, but can't see she's like me' way. More like knowing someone but not being the someone you know. At any rate, she was seemed to be nearly the only Shadowbolt seemed to want to win for the thrill of it, instead of just to prove she was better than others or avoid Principle Cinch's wrath. She CLEARLY didn't get there was a difference between peer pressure and loyalty.
As for Sugarcoat... Personally I think that she was one of Crystal Prep's best students was the only reason she hadn't been expelled yet if she was that open and blunt with her opinions to both her classmates and her teachers. Applejack was honest to be sure, trust worthy and sincere. Sugarcoat held nothing back, and always gave the cold hard facts about anything. She wasn't CRUEL about it, but she wasn't NICE either.
Sour Sweet... don't tell Fluttershy I said this... but I think they're more alike that you think. Don't give me that look. Fluttershy... she had a lot of bottled up feelings, okay, we all do, but Fluttershy bottles them up MORE. And when the bottle bursts, it's horrible. Sour Sweet... I don't KNOW if she just fakes being kind and then shows her true colors a second later, or if she suffers from a bipolar disorder or even a split personality...
And that leave Sunny Flare, I didn't really have to go on with her except through process of elimination that leaves her a corruption of the Element of Generosity. She was supposedly a perfectionist, but a lot less nicer of one than Rarity. I heard a couple students whispering she might have been Principle Cinch's daughter, but if I've learned ANYTHING during Christmas was to NEVER put too much faith in rumors!
Like I said, it's SCARY how this world's Twilight ended up with five teammates who just happened to have traits that were like distorted reflections of what the Elements of Harmony SHOULD HAVE BEEN. And... this world's Twilight Sparkle followed suit. Studying under Cinch and the 'dog eat dog' mentality Cinch had wired into her school system had left her a spineless mess and yet still clung to her research when anyone could see the sane thing would've been to put it on hold!
Still I try to contact Twilight again. Maybe she hadn’t seen the book yet? Maybe I could just write a message on a paper and send it using the portal.
And then it happened. I don’t know what that device Twilight had built was supposed to do, but it started to suck up the magic of the portal. At the time I didn’t notice that it was also sucking up some of the magic within me as well, probably because I wasn’t transforming. I suppose she was able to do it because I was touching the portal at the time, but like I said before, I wasn’t sure how magic worked in this world so it was just a theory.
Twilight… she didn’t even know what magic was before coming here and she had built a device that could not only detect magical energy, but also absorb it and contain it. Twilight would always be smart regardless of what world she’s in, seems like.
When the portal closed, it dawned on me… there was no cavalry going to come to our help. Right then and there, I was the cavalry. This wasn't like the Sirens...I thanked Princess Celestia that I'd already gone through my 'don't do anything for fear of messing up' phase.
I was always very direct, so I just walked over to Twilight during the welcoming party, and asked her what she was up to. Her schoolmates thought I was trying to spy on them for the upcoming games, and interrupted us before we could exchange words. I didn’t even notice when Pinkie Pie took Twilight away, that girl is always trying to make friends with anyone.
Pinkie does some changes to the whole party, and in just minutes everyone is mingling regardless of what school they came from. I felt like I was in Equestria again. It seemed that the Friendship Games were finally going to be more about Friendship than Games… and then that Principal Cinch comes over and kills the mood completely.
At the time I didn’t know it, but after the whole ordeal was over and the Twilight of this world gave us a short story of her life, I couldn’t believe it… Principal Cinch was everything I believed Princess Celestia was after I left her and crossed the portal to this world. She was selfish, she saw her students as nothing but tools to reach her goals, which were always about her and not others, and she cared little about what happened to others as long as she attained those goals. When I first came here I didn’t know why Celestia was a principal at some school instead of the president or something like that. Then I realized, Celestia was always a teacher, a guide for others, she wasn’t a ruler.
For all these counterparts, sometimes I wonder where the human Discord and Queen Chrysalis are. Twilight told me about Starlight Glimmer, maybe she's a teacher at Crystal Prep, or will be the one to bring the dreaded school uniforms to Canterlot High.
Then Pinkie Pie tells us how she ponied up, again without playing an instrument, and how the magic seemed to be draining out of her. This was two times that it happened, and at the portal too, and I wasn’t even close to figuring out what had happened other than Twilight having to do with it.
There wasn’t much time to dwell on it, since after that the Friendship Games started. The first event was an academic decathlon, and according to the students that had been in the previous Friendship Games, it had been the closest Crystal Prep had come to losing since the games started.
It was disturbing how terrified the Shadow Bolts were of their own Principle whenever their best fell short of ours.
By the last event we were tied in score, and it all came down to me and Twilight, competing in geometry. I have to admit that different parts of me were feeling different things at the prospect of competing against Twilight to see who was better. I tried my best, I did, but Twilight, well, she’s just smarter than me.
It'd be easy to pretend Cinch lied about me losing, but I double checked my math, and I'll admit I lost.
I was also kind of glad that it was going to be RD, Applejack, Rarity, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie and me for the next event. I mean, no offense to Flash, Derpy and the others, but there was better chemistry between the six of us, and I had a feeling that was going to be important for the next event.
A while later, when we were walking to the field for the next event, when Fluttershy explained what happened to her… and the portal opening. I asked her to describe the creature she saw jump out, a Jackalope, they didn’t exists here, they were only found in Equestria… Twilight was not only draining magic from my friends, she was tearing up holes in reality and into Equestria. The portal's magic followed it's Equestrian rules...but that was when it was in the mirror portal, now that it wasn't anymore... Jackalopes were harmless, but what if the portal opened someplace like an urban area of Equestria like Manehattan, or worse yet, in a dragon's liar!
The next event was motocross. Motocross. I found out later there's a motocross club, but that definitely wasn't my first choice.
During the event my fears come true when giant carnivorous plants come out from several portals all over the track during the last stage of the race. Me and the two Shadowbolt girls were almost eaten alive were it not for Rainbow Dash, who transformed after saving me and then proceeded to keep the plant under control for the rest of the race (and I imagine lived out a few childhood dreams of being a superhero). In the end we won the race but we weren’t able to celebrate.
Twilight comes over, tries to apologize for what she did, and then I see how she drains Rainbow Dash’s magic… and it looks like she’s hurting her!
It was just too much for me, the magic out of control, me not being able to figure it out. My frustration, and this girl with Twilight’s face doing all this. It’s just too much, I lash out at her, but I don’t know if I was yelling at her, or if I was yelling at myself, both now and my old me. I immediately regretted having done it. While she was clueless of what was happening, she wasn’t a bad person, she was just… misguided.
We hear Principal Cinch arguing with Principal Celestia at the other side. The principal of Crystal Prep is accusing Canterlot High of cheating. Pinkie Pie and Flutter said they'd check on the two Shadowbolts that almost got eaten since their Principal clearly wasn't, given Cinch never once seemed to care they almost died.
I apologize to Principal Celestia, she tells me its not my fault. It took all I had to not thrown myself in her arms to cry, to remind myself that this was not the Celestia that took me in when I was a filly and raised me like a daughter. Instead, I trust her and open up my heart to how I felt, how I considered this whole mess my fault from bringing magic into this world. First the Sirens, and now this…
It was right before the last event that it happened. Were were all getting ready for the scavenger hunt that was to be the final of the three events and the one that would decide the winner of this Friendship Games, I had decided that I would just keep my eyes on Twilight and apologize to how I treated her at the end of the games. Who knows? Maybe we could befriend her later, and I would trust her enough to explain what I know about magic, and maybe together we can figure out how magic works here? One person would have to take the first step, to trust the other, and that might as well be me.
But then, it happened.
It was like in slow motion but it only took a couple of seconds. Twilight was going to release all the magic she had absorbed in her device! I saw it in her eyes, just for a second, but it was there. She wanted knowledge, she wanted to understand, and she didn’t care what happened. Didn’t care about the consequences. No… No! I had to stop her!
I saw a little ghostly girl wearing a black poncho with a purple scarf that no one else could see approaching Twilight, a black crown in her hands...I could feel it, it was the same as the magic I felt when I became Nightmare Inferno.
I was too late.
I watched in horror as the magic took over her, and then… Twilight, she transformed into a Nightmare right in front of me. The first true human to ever become a Nightmare. Or was that Nightwoman? Dammit who cared?!
Nightmare Midnight
Vivisector Of World
She declared how she wants more knowledge, more understanding, more magic, and how she would do anything to obtain it. She begins to open rifts to Equestria… ALL over Equestria. I can see places, places I even went to visit myself when I was Celestia’s student. Rainbow Falls, Manehattan, even Ponyville. I see ponies looking in awe at this portals opening up, not understanding what they are, some not even having ever heard of a human being before, much less ever seeing one. One of the portals Twilight opens is right on the ground, but it opens high above Ponyville, if anyone falls they could die!
I tried to reason with Twilight, plead with her to stop, that this is not the way. She doesn’t listen to reason. She wants power and knowledge, and will stop at nothing to get it...as badly as I'd wanted the power and respect I thought I deserved.
Nightmares are insane, that is as much of a fact as rain falls from the sky. She wanted all knowledge and wisdom and would destroy the world to get it.
[=My Past is Not Today=]
I see all around me, some students are about to fall, but my friends and some of the girls from Crystal Prep help them up. I… I understand now. I know why they transformed before without playing music. I, I had to trust in magic. I had to trust in them. I had to.
Twilight, I mean Princess Twilight, wasn’t here, so the Element of Magic wasn’t present. But the elements had worked before without one of them. Before I restored Trust, the elements still worked! The bearers trusted each other, and so they still worked.
It wasn’t the same but. Magic was Friendship. We had friendship, it could still work. It had to! I trusted that it did. And I trusted my friends. Twilight might have drained magic from them, but more had to still be in them, the elements couldn’t be drained like that. All she drained was raw magic.
I grab the device Twilight made, I use it. My friends aren't hurt, because I'm not TAKING this...we're sharing it. They give it to me.
I hold the little magic container...not to long ago I thought I wanted this...I thought I needed it...now I just trust it to help. I break it open. The magic takes me. I understand now, I am aware. It’s not like before. I don’t want power to dominate, I want it to help my friends, to protect this wonderful world that I now call home, as well as my former home.
I trust the magic. I trust my friends.
But most importantly...I trust myself.
Trust takes belief. Even if you don't understand, especially if you don't understand...you trust in something because you believe in it. You believe your friends are worthy of trust. You believe that others can trust in you. You believe in forces you don't understand...and most importantly, you believe in the good in everyone.
I understand now...it isn't about music...it's about bringing the truest part of ourselves to the surface.
Nightmare Inferno consumed all I am. This was becoming more than I ever was before.
I feel it. Was this how Twilight felt when she became an Alicorn?
Hehe...sorry...it's just...
For my entire life, until Twilight woke me up ...this was all I ever wanted. These wings. This power...
And now I get it when I stopped wanting it. I finally stop seeking it...and I finally get it. Funny, isn't it? No...it isn't funny. I'm just finally ready to actually have power.
Rainbow Dash suggested 'Daydream Shimmer' later on...but personally? I like the way Solaris sounds. Why no Princess? I'll wait till Princess Celestia chooses to call me that.
Nightmare Twilight and I start to fight, she is about to overpower me. But something seems to distract her on the last minute, like if there was one thing that made her doubt about destroying the world. I take the opportunity. I overpower her.
We then find ourselves transported… somewhere. I don’t know exactly what it was, but it made me feel at peace, it was hard to describe, like if I was inside empathy itself.
I offer my hand to Twilight, I ask her to trust me. She takes my hand, the elements true power take her and purify her.
How did I convince a Nightmare to give up her ambitions? ...Simple, she trusted me...and trusting someone else is sometimes all it takes for us to turn away from a dark path.
We are back at Canterlot High, Twilight apologizes for what she did. I tell her that they will forgive her, she trusts me for it.
Oh, and it turns out her Spike (a puppy) was mutated by Fluttershy's magic. He can talk now. Eh, seen weirder things.
Principal Cinch accuses us of cheating again, this time everyone is against her. Even her own students, and the Dean of her own school. Her threats are empty, who is going to believe about magical students with wings, portals and a talking dog?
Well, okay, we live in the age of cellphone cameras and youtube... but Well... even if she did... it would be hard for her NOT to get blamed for wanting to continue the games or forcing her own student to use a dangerous force she obvious couldn't control. And you know, almost causing doomsday.
That and Dean Cadence said even without the magical stuff, she had enough dirt on her treatment of Twilight (including blackmail and doing nothing to help a bullying victim, which is a crime in the human world) to do something to help Crystal Prep, and said Twilight always could have told her what was happening.
Sometimes help was there all along and you don't see the outstretched hand until you realize you can't handle it on your own.
We then learn that Twilight is to come to Canterlot High. We welcome her with open arms. Although it was kind of funny seeing how both Twilights reacted to meeting each other for the first time. She was more worried about the PR mess that awaited her, Princess Luna and Princess Celestia back in Equestria, trying to explain to worried ponies how they didn’t have to worry about magical portals just opening up at random, showing images of a strange world filled with bipedal creatures with fingers instead of hooves.
I think I'll wait until after that's cleared up to tell Twilight and Celestia I'm a Goddess now. Wow...if the old me heard me say that she'd accuse me of being a Changeling. Hehe.
I used to be confident, but for all the wrong reasons. And afterwards I simply lost my confidence. But now it’s different. And so, I’m still not sure what I want to do with my life. But I am sure of one thing now, I am now confident in myself to choose the right thing.
I'm a new person, free of my greed, free of my lust for power, and free of my past. And free of my doubt.
I'm free.
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This Chapter was AWESOME!!!
Ooh! I like it! I like it! I like it!
This better be cannon...please be future cannon...I'm gonna die if it's not!
Awesome job on this chapter!
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Princess Solaris is my OWN idea for Sunset's Alicorn name.
6547188 I really like it!
*snerk* Pity.
Eh, didn't like the song much.
Remove.
And she's a Lightning Dust recolor.
And it is hilarious!
Hey, uniforms aren't that bad, Leather Jacket, it helps save a bit of time in the morning.
I swear having a cool name is part of the whole Nightmare Package. Also, worlDS.
Eh, it sounded better than Dyadream Shimmer.
Unable to meddle, and arguably worse due to making things even more confusin due to 2 Twilights.
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Thanks for the comments!
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And here I was hoping for some witty repartee.
BTW, I still think that in between this movie and the last one she became friends with Octavia. Or at least they hang out together a lot.
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:CHS_students_watching_Rainbow_and_the_band_EG3.png
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:Rainbow_Dash_--Crystal_Prep_students--_EG3.png
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:Photo_Finish,_Trixie,_and_Octavia_impressed_EG3.png
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:Pinkie_Pie_--she_was_right_here--_EG3.png
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:Students_listen_to_Luna's_announcement_EG3.png
http://equestriagirls.wikia.com/wiki/File:CMCs_wearing_Wondercolt_ears_EG3.png
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Not an impossibility.
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I don't get it.
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That's the author of this chapter.
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Ah.
I just realized that the really interesting thing would be a POV story of Friendship Games NOT through the eyes of Sunset Shimmer... but through the eyes of Human Twilight! Just think about it, this is a girl that goes to a school where everyone is either mean or indifferent, she's the best at school but feels incomplete. She finds this strange source of energy. When she gets to Canterlot High all this kids that she never met before greet her like if they were all good friends and they even know the name of her dog. And that's just the start...
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True, but what NEW stuff would we learn?
6778515 None, except made up stuff about Human Twilight's life. Like her life outside of school, what motivated her to get to Crystal Prep, how is her relation with her brother and her parents, that sort of things.
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Well, factors and variables. Glade it entertained ya!
Well, your narrative certainly made it better than the movie somewhat. The movie's biggest weakness was that it had two to three story focuses. Since you only focused on Sunset's POV, it made the story more coherent. Nice job.
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Thanks, I guess. :-)
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Thank the mirror ADAPTS those who travel through.
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Everything's relative.
Thank you.
Hopefully not for arbitrary reasons.
In general or one of Celly's students?
Dammit.
Did you read the Dazzling origin story yet?
Oops.
Thanks.
Mystery is fun.
I had a friend, he and I thought the same thing seeing that scene.
Did you read their origin story?
... Don't get your hopes up.
THANK YOU!
Or Earth adopted her.
That's the idea.
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Agreed. So hard.
Persona, you did amazingly well with the FG chapter! I especially love the small bits of analysis you had for the shadowbolt 5 and the Alicorn name you gave to Sunset and the way you handled Nightmare Midnight/Midnight Sparkle.
The Shadowbolt 5 in particular I feel are definitely a group that would benefit from the Pony POV multiverse treatment. One of the aspects of this Fic's mutliverse is the "there's no such thing as a minor character" deal where damn near every character's had their personalities fleshed out to a noticeable extent, and Foil characters like the Shadowbolts always have the potential to be interesting, though FG sadly pushed them aside in favor of Cinch. (Sunny Flare especially. The others had their noteworthy moments, but that poor gal barely had anything.)
Lemon Zest is a pushy escapist, Sugarcoat's the living antithesis of her namesake, Indigo Zap's a competition junkie, Sunny Flare's obsessive and rude and Sour Sweet's mood swings faster, harder and more wildly than a Pendulum in a Gothic Horror tale. So what's their deal? How'd they get this way? Did people hurt them? Are they abuse victims? Is Cinch the source or does she make it worse with manipulations? Could they serve as secondary elements of harmony like Trixie and Fluttercruel? Elements of CHAOS even? The possibilities are endless!
Do you plan on adapting Legends of Everfree when it's out?
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Actually that was all added by Alex's edits after I sent him the story.
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Oh.
Well. You did amazing with everything else. Really loved Sunset's development!
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I admit I WAS stupid with the excessively long names in the early days.